Dang, that was so good. My MC definitely felt betrayed. And reasonably so imo. But it seems after every chapter I just become more and more in love with Elora 😍.
Woah the plot thickens!!!! so many things happened in this chapter I can't even describe it, I just know that it was amazing. Great writing, as always. Thank you for another wonderful chapter author 💞
I went with the prince and chapter 5 had me blushing and kicking my legs while giggling, I'm highkey simping Irus is so cute 😭 i wanna draw my Mc and him together
Thank you for playing and I'm so happy you enjoyed Irus' route ❤ 😊🌼 Please do feel free to draw your MC and Irus! I'd love to see them together 😆 And if you're on Tumblr, I'll be happy to add it to the fan works section of the game 😊
crying because my saves are gone. heart beating faster cause i rember i exported my saves?! oh shart nevermind crying again. i was immediately hit by the emotions of: ayo new RO?!?! and damm that sidebar 🤤 sadly missed the joy of chapter 4 release from the rookie mistake of not following you i shall romance irus again... or not... Also on my first play i was *kinda* expecting Irus to be some spoiled brat or smthn. it was such a delight that i was wrong (i would've dated him either way tho ngl)
Unfortunately, I usually add and tweak variables with every new update so it means that you'll have to restart the game with each update 😅
And thank you so much for playing! I'm so grateful for your support 💖
Yes, there is a new RO - Anu who's brash, hot-headed and quite flirty if pursued by the player character.
A lot of people said the same thing about Irus and I realise that from the outset, he does give off spoilt prince vibes 😆 but I dislike spoilt, arrogant ROs and so Irus ended up being quite different from his original version.
I'd suggest holding off to play until tomorrow because Chapter 5 is being released then 😋
Thanks for playing 💖 Sir Oren does get a little bolder deeper into the relationship, but he is quite shy when it comes to romance 😄 Next update is on 1st February.
I was expecting this to be a short demo but it had four complete chapters and I cannot stop replaying it!! So well written and had such great characters! Excited for the next part to become available. ❤
I was wondering though, can we not choose to be with the other RO's yet?
Thank you so much for playing and I'm so happy you enjoyed it! 🌼😊
Currently, you can lock-in your romance with Prince Irus. The other ROs will have different lock-in points in further chapters. If you intend on pursuing them, you'll need to avoid locking in a relationship with Prince Irus so that you'll receive the option when it comes up.
I've used Twine to create the game, and Crown of Exile is written with the sugarcube format in Twine 😊
It's basic HTML and CSS for coding if you're starting out and I find it quite simple (coming from a non-coding background) once you get the hang of it 🌼
Yes, hello I don't usually comment on these sights but your game grabbed my interest when scrolling through itch, the story was good and I enjoyed the romances (and that they do feel forced). But I have reached the end of the game currently in the free browser version i await when more comes out. (In short good job )
Thank you so much for playing and I'm so happy you're enjoying it 😊 💗 It means a lot to have your support and hopefully the next chapter will be posted by February.
I'm sorry 🌷🌼😞 I posted a bug fix demo, so you'd have to restart the game anyway because of old bugs 😬 Hope it wasn't too much trouble to go through it again!
just finished my first playthrough and goddamn why did i drop this 😭. i remember playing this when its still at its early stage but i think prince irus kinda made me go sour and im like ill just play this again after i find time but i saw that you released chap 4 and saw a kiss scene with irus and i kinda got tempted lmao. im so glad i came back because this is art. i love it all, the characters, the conflict, how you handle relationships and beliefs and all that is just so well done.
also, my first impression with irus back then was so wrong with me thinking he is a spoiled brat lmao. he has truly stolen my heart 😔. now im off to romance oren and make my blushing mess of an mc fall in love again.
also, you made me cry in a couple of scenes there. while reading my mind just kept adding into the angst with pops there that i just had to shed a tear. yummy IF you got here, gonna give it MASSIVE chomp
Thank you so much for giving the game another try and I am so happy that you enjoyed it 😊💖 It means a lot to know that you were able to feel all the emotions I tried to convey. I always feel like it's not emotional enough, so it's really satisfying to learn that players are feeling these feelings 😅
Prince Irus is portrayed as being spoilt because that's him at the beginning - a spoilt prince 😂 but he is quite sweet once he opens up to the MC, so I'm glad he stole your heart.
Thank you for taking the time to send in such a wonderful comment! I'm so grateful for your support and I do hope you enjoy Oren's route 😋
Absolutely enthralled by the story so far, made me feel so many emotions. Little bit dissapointed without to many spoilers, such a skilled fisherman not teaching his son to defend himself in such a dangerous environment. Though i do understand a few reasons for and against.
Thank you so much for playing and I'm so happy that you enjoyed the game 😊Ahlf certainly had some reservations about teaching the MC any fighting skills - a lot of it would bring up unwanted memories of his past and he was also fed up of all the fighting he had done, so he thought that he could at least live in relative peacefulness with the MC 😅Unfortunately life had other plans for him and the MC.
No, that's more for role-playing purposes 😊 If your character is more spiritual, they have the option to pray and if not, they can make a wish - or don't do either.
Bug. I can't get past a certain point. After waking in the temple with the Prince, there is no 'next' button after this paragraph:
You doubt that you will have the chance to return to the temple any time soon, if at all. It provided you much needed shelter and refuge when you needed it the most.
(If it helps I petted Crown's mane and went outside and picked the couldn't breathe options.)
Thank you so much for playing! I'm glad you enjoyed the update 😊
Irus has most of the players fighting over him and considering this was originally a story opposed to an IF idea, Irus was the main RO so he is the most fleshed out in the game 😅
I'm glad you're enjoying the romance! I love romance games, but there's never enough romance for my tastes so I was eager to include as much romance as I could 😅 You can expect smooches in almost every romantic interaction going forward.
Thank you again for your lovely comment and support 🌼💖 It really does put a smile on my face 😊
I adore how our MC found remnants of their family after so long. Its such a nice event considering the rampant themes of loss and abandonment in most adventure stories <3
I'm glad you thought so! I knew that I wanted the MC to get some happiness during their journey, especially considering the life they've led so far 😊 Thank you for playing and for your support! 💖
I really love this story. The character development ist great. The MC is very well built, I love the fact that we're able to play them as children. Not many IF I've encountered did that, which is a real treat :)
I really like the building trust between the MC and Irus. Can't wait for chapter 5 ! :)
am i doing something wrong? i can't put my custom name because there's nowhere to click to confirm. i end up having to choose the 4 given names. i'm on phone :(
When playing on mobile, you'll need to hit the enter button after typing in your character's name. You can also open the game on desktop mode in your browser and hit the enter button.
That's very weird 🤔 are you using the apk version or browser version? I haven't tested out the apk version properly so it might be an issue with that. But on the browser version, it should work because that's what I tested it on. If you are able to, I'd suggest using a pc/desktop to play and I'll try to figure out how to make a confirm button by the next update so the issue doesn't persist 😊
Thank you for playing and I'm so glad you liked it!
Crown wasn't mentioned because I left out a few scenes at the end of the chapter to keep with a monthly update schedule. He will be mentioned again in Chapter 5, but rest assured that he is quite safe and well. I'll likely go back to add in those scrapped scenes when I start edits 😊
The romance scenes are my favourite parts to write 😅 I'm so glad you're enjoying both of the guys' routes! Hopefully chapter 5 will come by early Feb if all goes to plan 😊 Thank you for playing!
Glad you're excited! Please let me know if you encounter any issues with the android version - it's my first time compiling a game into an apk file 😂 Do have fun and enjoy!
Thank you for playing 😊 And I'm super glad that you loved Irus! He's possibly my favourite out if the ROs if you can't already tell 😅 Thanks for supporting me! It means a lot to me 💖
this. i'm not even done yet with all of the chapters so far and i know it's amazing hhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh i have so much respect for you because i can't even make a good enough sentence with at least 15 words for my english homework. and if i do, it looks like an elementary kid did it
um spoilers below
and i don't really know how long this has to be
so i'll just put random sh lol
i have a folder dedicated to finding typos and weird english stuff for this game and i'm using a 2nd character for this
hee hee 🥰
and then it isn't long enough and this is just an annoyingly long comment
ok anyways
not my problem (well actually it is)
"Where are we going?" you ask, your voice small.
cirlces. CIRLCES??????? nah but it's ok i guess circles*
"I am not staying with this man," you declare.
well it's missing the pronoun/noun. could be "Mama says softly." or "she says softly."
"Alright, Mama," you agree.
not cirlce again 😭😭 encircle*
"What's is to you?" you snarl.
- choice - the result or whatever well.... technically you just said "What is is to you?" it*
"Bring the knives, [insert name]," Ahlf commands.
"...as to Ahlf was." what. it's missing a "who" as to who Ahlf was.*
stall man merchant
"It fits neatly into your palm, a small and detailed." 'a' should not be there. even grammarly agrees "It fits neatly into your palm, small and detailed."*
do you want to learn more about the Ancient Ones
"What say you?" wth happened here. i don't know if it's meant to be like that "What do you say?"*
yeah i wanna learn more
"You eyes the idols." a "You eye the idols."*
But instead of finding the worn book, you find a closed box
"...you reach out for the first folded, page." remove the comma after 'first folded' you reach out for the first folded page.*
"I was just watching from the cottage," you snap in anger.
"...and the look his gaze becomes hard." well it's missing an 'in' and the look in his gaze becomes hard.*
"I don't have to obey your every command," you hiss.
"...before he looks way." well it is certainly missing an 'a' before he looks away.*
anyways at this point my itch.io is breaking but it's okay since i'm done with everything i've found so far idk if some of them are intentional since.... maybe it's just ancient grammar or something. i mean, it is the 500s 🤷♀️ nOW MY LAPTOP IS BREAKING .
Thank you so much for playing and I'm so glad you enjoyed it! Some of these errors were fixed, it's just not posted yet in the public demo 😊 It'll be posted with Chapter 4's update - there's quite a few new scenes added to Part One as well.
What a great read! You're really talented, author; the writing got me hooked the entire time, the characters and lore are so interesting and the romance part gave me butterflies 💞 hope to see more of this one, good luck with your work and thank you for letting us read something with so much quality for free💜
Thank you so much for your kind words and support! 💖😊 I'm so glad you enjoyed the game and my writing! It's hard to think anyone actually enjoys my ideas so it's really nice when players tell me they did. Thanks for playing!
Yup, it's unfortunately an issue that happens. When it does - you'll need to use the back arrow on the top left side of the side-bar in order to get back 😊
I'm really enjoying writing after a long time of not writing so it's been a blast 😆 if you're keen on more info on the game while you wait for the update, check out my Tumblr because there's tons of content there and information on the next RO 👀
Has work begun on Chapter 4? I'm very excited for what is coming next in the story! Keep up the great work, I'm sure I speak for most of us when I say I am at the edge of my seat in anticipation.
I'm currently working in Chapter 4 as we speak 😊 I have a Patreon with exclusive content and sneak peeks of Chapter 4 but you can also follow me on Tumblr for writing progress updates and other fun stuff 🙂
Please don't feel any pressure to become a Patron 😊 The public demo will still be updated with the same content, albeit a week later. I'm hoping for an end of the month update if not early January, so not too much longer 😅
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Dang, that was so good. My MC definitely felt betrayed. And reasonably so imo. But it seems after every chapter I just become more and more in love with Elora 😍.
I'm so happy that Elora is getting some love! She's just so different to write from the others so it's good to know that people like her 😊
Im not a simp or anything, but Irus could run me over with Crown and I would thank him-
🤣🤣🤣 This made me laugh! Irus will happily do anything the MC asked of him 😉
Yeah! none of us are simping over irus🫣🤭
man the betrayal. i love the angst so bad i want more akjdhakjsh
Glad you liked the angst! Thank you for playing 😊
Mama making cry over here- but it's FINE
its actually not fine, DID YOU NOT TRY TO COME BACK FOR ME MAMA?? I DONT NEED SLEEP I NEED ANSWERS
You'll get your answers in Chapter 6 👀😆
i cried too, so conflicted
Lots of angst ahead 😔
I agree with you! No one is going anywhere without ANSWERS, especially you MAMA 🙂
Woah the plot thickens!!!! so many things happened in this chapter I can't even describe it, I just know that it was amazing. Great writing, as always. Thank you for another wonderful chapter author 💞
Thank you for playing and I'm really glad you enjoyed it! 💖💖
Not me fangirling while reading the NSFW scene with Irus
I hope you enjoyed it 😋😆
thank you for the irus food <3 every new chapter is a chance to fall in love with irus all over again.
Thank you for playing 😊 And I'm really happy to know you're enjoying Irus' romance as much as I enjoy writing it!
I went with the prince and chapter 5 had me blushing and kicking my legs while giggling, I'm highkey simping Irus is so cute 😭 i wanna draw my Mc and him together
Thank you for playing and I'm so happy you enjoyed Irus' route ❤ 😊🌼 Please do feel free to draw your MC and Irus! I'd love to see them together 😆 And if you're on Tumblr, I'll be happy to add it to the fan works section of the game 😊
crying because my saves are gone. heart beating faster cause i rember i exported my saves?! oh shart nevermind crying again.
i was immediately hit by the emotions of: ayo new RO?!?! and damm that sidebar 🤤 sadly missed the joy of chapter 4 release from the rookie mistake of not following you
i shall romance irus again... or not... Also on my first play i was *kinda* expecting Irus to be some spoiled brat or smthn. it was such a delight that i was wrong (i would've dated him either way tho ngl)
Unfortunately, I usually add and tweak variables with every new update so it means that you'll have to restart the game with each update 😅
And thank you so much for playing! I'm so grateful for your support 💖
Yes, there is a new RO - Anu who's brash, hot-headed and quite flirty if pursued by the player character.
A lot of people said the same thing about Irus and I realise that from the outset, he does give off spoilt prince vibes 😆 but I dislike spoilt, arrogant ROs and so Irus ended up being quite different from his original version.
I'd suggest holding off to play until tomorrow because Chapter 5 is being released then 😋
The way sir oren shyness has me in a chokehold- I cant wait for the next update.
Thanks for playing 💖 Sir Oren does get a little bolder deeper into the relationship, but he is quite shy when it comes to romance 😄 Next update is on 1st February.
This was fantastic. Definitely one of my favorite IF games right now. Cant wait to find out what happens next. Queen Elora is life :')
Thank you so much for playing and I'm so happy that you're enjoying it! 💖😊
Chapter 5 will be out on the 1st of February, so just a few days more 😊
I was expecting this to be a short demo but it had four complete chapters and I cannot stop replaying it!! So well written and had such great characters! Excited for the next part to become available. ❤
I was wondering though, can we not choose to be with the other RO's yet?
Thank you so much for playing and I'm so happy you enjoyed it! 🌼😊
Currently, you can lock-in your romance with Prince Irus. The other ROs will have different lock-in points in further chapters. If you intend on pursuing them, you'll need to avoid locking in a relationship with Prince Irus so that you'll receive the option when it comes up.
Thank you again for your support! 💖
Oh I see. I tried pursuing the others but I always get the option for locking in a relationship with Prince Irus, which I don't really mind tbh. 😅
Thank you sm for responding! 😊
No problem! If you want extra content on the ROs, you can always check out my Tumblr. 🌼
I'm curious what program did you use to make this? This has inspired me and I want to try my hand at this kind of game.
I've used Twine to create the game, and Crown of Exile is written with the sugarcube format in Twine 😊
It's basic HTML and CSS for coding if you're starting out and I find it quite simple (coming from a non-coding background) once you get the hang of it 🌼
Thank you 😊 I really appreciate it and appreciate you being so interactive it's refreshing
You're welcome! I look forward to any future games you might create 💖
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Yes, hello I don't usually comment on these sights but your game grabbed my interest when scrolling through itch, the story was good and I enjoyed the romances (and that they do feel forced). But I have reached the end of the game currently in the free browser version i await when more comes out. (In short good job )
Thank you so much for playing and I'm so happy you're enjoying it 😊 💗 It means a lot to have your support and hopefully the next chapter will be posted by February.
Cool I look forward to it 👍
❤️️
oh no!! my saves are gone!!! (immediately replays for the 7th time) >:)
Sorry about that! 💖 Unfortunately by the time chapter 5 comes again, old saves won't work on account of new variables added in 😬
ill accept any excuse to replay again haha. don't worry about it!! thank you for all your hard work!! 💖💖
Thank you for playing 🌼💖
I went to replay this even though I had just played this when the new chapter came out and now I lost all my saves :,)
I'm sorry 🌷🌼😞 I posted a bug fix demo, so you'd have to restart the game anyway because of old bugs 😬 Hope it wasn't too much trouble to go through it again!
just finished my first playthrough and goddamn why did i drop this 😭. i remember playing this when its still at its early stage but i think prince irus kinda made me go sour and im like ill just play this again after i find time but i saw that you released chap 4 and saw a kiss scene with irus and i kinda got tempted lmao. im so glad i came back because this is art. i love it all, the characters, the conflict, how you handle relationships and beliefs and all that is just so well done.
also, my first impression with irus back then was so wrong with me thinking he is a spoiled brat lmao. he has truly stolen my heart 😔. now im off to romance oren and make my blushing mess of an mc fall in love again.
also, you made me cry in a couple of scenes there. while reading my mind just kept adding into the angst with pops there that i just had to shed a tear. yummy IF you got here, gonna give it MASSIVE chomp
Thank you so much for giving the game another try and I am so happy that you enjoyed it 😊💖 It means a lot to know that you were able to feel all the emotions I tried to convey. I always feel like it's not emotional enough, so it's really satisfying to learn that players are feeling these feelings 😅
Prince Irus is portrayed as being spoilt because that's him at the beginning - a spoilt prince 😂 but he is quite sweet once he opens up to the MC, so I'm glad he stole your heart.
Thank you for taking the time to send in such a wonderful comment! I'm so grateful for your support and I do hope you enjoy Oren's route 😋
Absolutely enthralled by the story so far, made me feel so many emotions. Little bit dissapointed without to many spoilers, such a skilled fisherman not teaching his son to defend himself in such a dangerous environment. Though i do understand a few reasons for and against.
Thank you so much for playing and I'm so happy that you enjoyed the game 😊Ahlf certainly had some reservations about teaching the MC any fighting skills - a lot of it would bring up unwanted memories of his past and he was also fed up of all the fighting he had done, so he thought that he could at least live in relative peacefulness with the MC 😅Unfortunately life had other plans for him and the MC.
Fantastic, Thank you so much. I will donate when I can and look forward to the release of the rest of the story!
Thank you! 💖
Do you have a Patreon or a preferred method of support?
I'm pretty active on Patreon, but please don't feel obligated to support 🌼😊
Does praying and making a wise at the temple change anything in the story?
No, that's more for role-playing purposes 😊 If your character is more spiritual, they have the option to pray and if not, they can make a wish - or don't do either.
Bug. I can't get past a certain point. After waking in the temple with the Prince, there is no 'next' button after this paragraph:
You doubt that you will have the chance to return to the temple any time soon, if at all. It provided you much needed shelter and refuge when you needed it the most.
(If it helps I petted Crown's mane and went outside and picked the couldn't breathe options.)
Thank you for this! I'll definitely check it out and hopefully have it fixed by the next update. Sorry about that 🌼
THIS IS SO CUTE!!!! i love it so much, you are such a talented writer and i am literally Dying. it's so adorable and i love this IF soooo much
Thank you so much for playing and I'm so grateful for your support 🌼😊 Glad you're enjoying the game!
The update was truly wonderful! Currently, the plot is taking some intriguing turns.
Once again.... Irus, you have my entire heart 😮💨✨.
Dear author, You have such a gift for creating romantic scenes <3 and You have such a beautiful game cover, I must say.
I enjoy reading everything you write, and I admire your efforts!
Thank you so much for playing! I'm glad you enjoyed the update 😊
Irus has most of the players fighting over him and considering this was originally a story opposed to an IF idea, Irus was the main RO so he is the most fleshed out in the game 😅
I'm glad you're enjoying the romance! I love romance games, but there's never enough romance for my tastes so I was eager to include as much romance as I could 😅 You can expect smooches in almost every romantic interaction going forward.
Thank you again for your lovely comment and support 🌼💖 It really does put a smile on my face 😊
I adore how our MC found remnants of their family after so long. Its such a nice event considering the rampant themes of loss and abandonment in most adventure stories <3
I'm glad you thought so! I knew that I wanted the MC to get some happiness during their journey, especially considering the life they've led so far 😊 Thank you for playing and for your support! 💖
I really love this story. The character development ist great. The MC is very well built, I love the fact that we're able to play them as children. Not many IF I've encountered did that, which is a real treat :)
I really like the building trust between the MC and Irus. Can't wait for chapter 5 ! :)
Thank you so much for playing and I'm so glad you enjoyed it! 💖😊
It's good to know that you liked the MC's childhood - it was a necessary part of the game, so it's good to know you enjoyed it.
Thank you for your support!
am i doing something wrong? i can't put my custom name because there's nowhere to click to confirm. i end up having to choose the 4 given names. i'm on phone :(
When playing on mobile, you'll need to hit the enter button after typing in your character's name. You can also open the game on desktop mode in your browser and hit the enter button.
Type your character's name first:
Then, hit enter:
i did! multiple times, even. but it just stays on that screen, nothing hapens :(
That's very weird 🤔 are you using the apk version or browser version? I haven't tested out the apk version properly so it might be an issue with that. But on the browser version, it should work because that's what I tested it on. If you are able to, I'd suggest using a pc/desktop to play and I'll try to figure out how to make a confirm button by the next update so the issue doesn't persist 😊
Yes I'm having this problem too on the browser version via my phone :( I guess I'll go with Aena :D
That's very strange because it works on my phone fine 🤔 I'll have to get a confirm button working
i have this problem on both apk and browser version.
I'll hopefully can get a confirm button for the next update so you won't have this problem 😊
Thank you very much for brightning up my whole week with this wonderful story.. Thank you so much lady..
Thank you for playing and I'm glad that the update could brighten your week 💖😊
I loved this! however, I noticed that (SPOILER) in escaping the barge, Crown wasn't mentioned? was he left behind or was it just accidentally omitted?
Thank you for playing and I'm so glad you liked it!
Crown wasn't mentioned because I left out a few scenes at the end of the chapter to keep with a monthly update schedule. He will be mentioned again in Chapter 5, but rest assured that he is quite safe and well. I'll likely go back to add in those scrapped scenes when I start edits 😊
Oh thank god i was so worried!!! ;-; My sweet baby Crown...
Don't worry, I never include any animal harm in my writing 😋 So Crown will get his happily ever after regardless of what happens.
Amazing! Love this one. Thanks for the chapter 💜
Thank you for playing and glad you enjoyed it! 😊
Omgg, i loved chapter 4!! I'm playing Irus's and Oren's route and i just can't- the romance!!--
*Faints*
I can't wait for the next update ^_^
The romance scenes are my favourite parts to write 😅 I'm so glad you're enjoying both of the guys' routes! Hopefully chapter 5 will come by early Feb if all goes to plan 😊 Thank you for playing!
I am inlove with this so far. Thank you for great writing. And lovable characters.
I'm so glad you're enjoying the game 💖 And thank you for playing!
Chapter 4!!! Thank you for the food!!! ;w; Irus my beloved... don't worry. My goblin of an MC refuses to abandon you! You're stuck with him now...
Never disappointed when theres an update. ^^ Can't wait for the next one!!
I'm so glad you enjoyed the update! 💖😊 Irus is honestly the best 👌 Thank you so much for playing and leaving a comment! It means so much to me 💖🌼
Oh..Queen Elora...*faint*
😆😆 Wait for chapter 5. More romance scenes ahead 😋
Oh yes!..*faint again*
😂
Dear Lord!!!! Chp 4 is here ✨
I can't wait to read it all now 🙊🤍
Tysm for the update and the android version, dear author! :)
Glad you're excited! Please let me know if you encounter any issues with the android version - it's my first time compiling a game into an apk file 😂 Do have fun and enjoy!
I am SO in love with Irus! I was instantly hooked into the story. I love your writing so much! Never lose your talent!!
Thank you for playing 😊 And I'm super glad that you loved Irus! He's possibly my favourite out if the ROs if you can't already tell 😅 Thanks for supporting me! It means a lot to me 💖
this. i'm not even done yet with all of the chapters so far and i know it's amazing hhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh
i have so much respect for you because i can't even make a good enough sentence with at least 15 words for my english homework. and if i do, it looks like an elementary kid did it
um spoilers below
and i don't really know how long this has to be
so i'll just put random sh lol
i have a folder dedicated to finding typos and
weird
english stuff
for this game
and i'm using a 2nd character for this
hee hee 🥰
and then it isn't long enough and
this is just an annoyingly long
comment
ok anyways
not my problem (well actually it is)
"Where are we going?" you ask, your voice small.
circles*
"I am not staying with this man," you declare.
well it's missing the pronoun/noun. could be "Mama says softly." or "she says softly."
"Alright, Mama," you agree.
not cirlce again 😭😭
encircle*
"What's is to you?" you snarl.
well.... technically you just said "What is is to you?"
it*
"Bring the knives, [insert name]," Ahlf commands.
"...as to Ahlf was." what. it's missing a "who"
as to who Ahlf was.*
stall man merchant
"It fits neatly into your palm, a small and detailed." 'a' should not be there. even grammarly agrees
"It fits neatly into your palm, small and detailed."*
do you want to learn more about the Ancient Ones
"What say you?" wth happened here. i don't know if it's meant to be like that
"What do you say?"*
yeah i wanna learn more
"You eyes the idols." a
"You eye the idols."*
But instead of finding the worn book, you find a closed box
"...you reach out for the first folded, page." remove the comma after 'first folded'
you reach out for the first folded page.*
"I was just watching from the cottage," you snap in anger.
"...and the look his gaze becomes hard." well it's missing an 'in'
and the look in his gaze becomes hard.*
"I don't have to obey your every command," you hiss.
"...before he looks way." well it is certainly missing an 'a'
before he looks away.*
anyways at this point my itch.io is breaking but it's okay since i'm done with everything i've found so far
idk if some of them are intentional since.... maybe it's just ancient grammar or something. i mean, it is the 500s 🤷♀️
nOW MY LAPTOP IS BREAKING .
Thank you so much for playing and I'm so glad you enjoyed it! Some of these errors were fixed, it's just not posted yet in the public demo 😊 It'll be posted with Chapter 4's update - there's quite a few new scenes added to Part One as well.
What a great read! You're really talented, author; the writing got me hooked the entire time, the characters and lore are so interesting and the romance part gave me butterflies 💞 hope to see more of this one, good luck with your work and thank you for letting us read something with so much quality for free💜
Thank you so much for your kind words and support! 💖😊 I'm so glad you enjoyed the game and my writing! It's hard to think anyone actually enjoys my ideas so it's really nice when players tell me they did. Thanks for playing!
I soft locked myself by clicking on multiple menus without closing them.
1-Click on Bio
2-Click on Relationships
3-Click on "Return", you will be returned to Bio.
4-Click on "Return", you will be "returned" to Relationships.
5-See step 3.
Yup, it's unfortunately an issue that happens. When it does - you'll need to use the back arrow on the top left side of the side-bar in order to get back 😊
gotta post again to just say that i check this for updates daily💀 your writing has me hooked asjoajw
Thank you so much for playing! 💖 Chapter 4 is currently being tested so if all goes to plan, the update will be live by next week for the public 😀
Thank YOU for working so hard to bring us all these updates so quickly!!! ;w; You're the best and amazing and please don't overwork yourself!!!
I'm really enjoying writing after a long time of not writing so it's been a blast 😆 if you're keen on more info on the game while you wait for the update, check out my Tumblr because there's tons of content there and information on the next RO 👀
omg not me doing the same thing
Soon 👀😋
Let me slap that smug smirk off the uncle face lol but I loved it nothing less keep up the good work 😸
Haha! Thank you for playing and glad you enjoyed it 😊
Your welcome can't wait for more of this game I'm already wandering about what next in there adavender 😸
Chapter 4 is done and will be tested soon so keep an eye out for an update 😊
Has work begun on Chapter 4? I'm very excited for what is coming next in the story! Keep up the great work, I'm sure I speak for most of us when I say I am at the edge of my seat in anticipation.
I'm currently working in Chapter 4 as we speak 😊 I have a Patreon with exclusive content and sneak peeks of Chapter 4 but you can also follow me on Tumblr for writing progress updates and other fun stuff 🙂
Thank you so much for playing!
I will be more than happy to become a patreon member. Just after christmas. Darn these holiday gifts cleaning me out haha.
Please don't feel any pressure to become a Patron 😊 The public demo will still be updated with the same content, albeit a week later. I'm hoping for an end of the month update if not early January, so not too much longer 😅