!!!Major spoilers!!! This game slaps so hard for no good reason and I have a lot I want to say, so why not right a way too long comment nobody's gonna read? Buckle up b^tches we've got six chapters (plus a prologue) to break down, and as somebody whos read this way too many times I am going to go WAY too in-depth. :)
Prologue- Mommy issues.
Honestly I'd give this prologue a 10/10 she did what needed to be done. I was hooked and I was ready. I think it establishes a good start to this novel. I felt pretty indifferent to both Ahlf and Salyra at this point without really knowing the gravity of the situation we were in, and honestly- they both suck and cannot parent to save their souls, but we'll get into that later. I'm not really going to talk about the part where we get sick, I think it's cute we get to see Ahlf being somewhat fatherly, but that still doesn't justify what he did with the letters. (the fact he's been hiding the letters Salyra wrote us, not the letters in the jade box.) I like how we get to establish MC's appearance so earl on in a way that fits instead of just saying 'what u look like?' and then move on. As for genuine plot, i enjoyed it. We were able to see what MC goes through when it comes to cultural discriminations, and how Ahlf is just not doing what needs to be done as a sole parent. As for Dena I feel like their not talked about enough (going to use They/Them for Dena as you choose their gender) Previously there were hearts next to the two romantic options if you join Dena at the tavern, but they were taken out so it's safe to say Dena won't be romanceable which I have no problem with as they called us getting the shiz beat out of us a jest. Come on bro could you be more insensitive? I also liked the fact that we got a moment where Ahlf expressed his affection for us when we came back all bloody and banged up. I'd love to see Dena re introduced in later chapters just for unnecessary drama, but that's just me wanting to stir shiz up for no reason. At the end of the day Dena, you're just a tutorial character, get over yourself.
Chapter one- Alone with an exiled prince
Chapter one was really good too, I think the start with the mourning of king Erlan felt like it foreshadows Ahlf death. Speaking of which, I like to think Ahlf was really upset about king Erlan dying. I chose to make my MC think she was her mom was alive, but I still think it's nice you mourn the absence of her, because that's still something we can do if somebodies missing in out lives. Let's be so for real, or MC is traumatized BIG time. Also this i could've mentioned in the prologue part since it's in the prologue we fine the jade box but who cares- I kind of feel like Ahlf and Salyra's relationship may be foreshadowing- just a little bit- to MC's ad Irus's if you choose to pursue him. If that predictions correct I will not hesitate to cry. Ramona did MC dirty with Ahlf's death, especially if you choose to take his side like omg, I didn't like him that much, but that's just sad. Bu let's talk about the elephant in the room, Prince Irus. I genuinely love his character, he's a real piece of work in this chapter, but I loved every moment with him, honestly. It's made clear he had bad first impressions with MC, given how we're dressed when he first see's us, but that didn't stop him from being a gentleman and helping us off crown. I also love crown sm, and I need to take a moment and say that. Fight seen with that blood guard was super bad as^ if you chose to fight him and not make Irus fight him. And I am waiting for my MC to become a fricking magical girl with the most badas^ powers from the ancient ones, I'm getting my ancient ones stat to 100 sue me. Slay atheist Irus we live for it, and it was nice to get a sense of vulnerability from him with his dads death, makes him feel more human. And that wraps up chapter one, so next stop Vinia babes
Chapter two- well, this is bizzare.
My first impressions on Nerena were pretty bad like, sis, let us in, we've been through it alright. As for Oren, not the most memorable of the capture targets, though his picture is spicy af. While I feel like he can fade in the back when put up against a whole queen of a nation and an exiled prince, he feels more in place than Anu, but I'll get into her when she's actually introduced. I think both scenes on the horses of Irus or Oren is adorable, but it feels almost mean to choose Oren over Irus after you know Irus's true thoughts about you choosing to ride with him. Then we're introduced Queen Elora, and I as just about read to fight this girl when we first see her. Like, who does she think she is jumping onto MY man and calling him "Iri?" like, sis, we're gonna fight. But in all seriousness I love queen Elora so much, she seems like the bff you rant to about your toxic ex while she paints your nails and encourages you to fight them way too much. The part where Irus gets mad and snaps at you got me so heated, especially if you choose "that wasn't the news i was expecting" and he says "All I'm left with is a fisherman's daughter/son" Like bish? I could get in a space ship and see the entire world and STILL not find where you got the audacity. Of course he apologizes, all is forgiven, whatever, but I still haven't forgotten that four chapters later. Back in our room the only thing really worth mentioning besides the nightmare is what we find in the jade box. I'm enjoying uncovering my mom and dads past WAY too much, like really. Then the nightmare we have really reels in the fact that MC is freaking traumatized- like I am so sorry. Anyways, after the nightmare we have our moment with one of the three introduced capture targets. (Throughout this review I'll mostly be talking about Irus because he's the target I went for.) If you go upstairs and have your time with prince Irus I initially thought he would give you a kiss goodnight regardless, however if you choose the shyer option he just touches your face which I personally feel is so cute because it's like he's trying to be mindful of your boundaries. Also this novel encompasses anxiety so well, it's hilarious. Then, of course, the next morning we get good news from Elora which went- "Yay we can stay- Oh we have to win over your government." Happy moments are fleeting in this game indeed. We go and take a look around the city, of course me being me- I went to the food stalls. It also seemed like the least traumatic option for MC. Then disaster strikes. We have to take a look at MC's mommy and daddy issues again because we found family at the bizarre with Nerena and Irus. I genuinely love Zikar as a freaking mood so much. Of course he's gotta learn to watch what he says about Irus my man, my man, my man. The part with the MCs family is just super emotional, and makes me hate Salyra even more than before. That's practically chapter two and my thoughts- but get ready girls because chapter three is one of my favorites.
Chapter three- I'm having a ball.
Starting this chapter off strong with coming to the realization that Irus can't study for shiz. You want to govern a whole kingdom but you can't even sit down and read a book? Smh. I also spent some time with Elora learning about Kazan which actually came in handy, I was genuinely not excepting that to matter. Later we're helping Elora, and oh my god let's make a petition to get rid of every mother in this novel, what are ya'll even doing for real. Also, I'd feel bad romancing Elora when Elora and Zikar together is so cute-. Also, the more I read the more I hate MC's mom, poor uncle Belahm- he did not deserve the mental torment Salyra put him through. Also why is everybody-besides MCs mother and father- in MCs family so freaking nice like omg. I got so excited when Ama gave MC the locket, if only I had known how much Salyra sucks. Then it was time to go to a ball. I'm going to sum this banquet up really quick because this comment is really long. MC aggressively makes out with either Irus, Oren, or Elora, then Virion (Irus's uncle who is trying to kill him) comes and says he's totally gonna wage war on Vinia- a very neutral kingdom- if they don't give him Irus. I honestly loved this chapter so much. The drama, the romance, it was all so perfect, I would stay here longer but there's not as much to unpack as there is in the other chapters which I really need to talk about. But in chapter four we're going on a trip sis, and poor MC just needs a nice good cry.
Chapter four- Setting sail.
Understandably enough, we start this chapter off in total fear. With all the- "I want Irus's head" and "I'm gonna declare war on you fools" we are not doing well as the MC, and the rest of the group isn't either. We're making the decision if we want to keep Irus and wage war against Cyre, or leave him in the dust, and the council doesn't go one way or the other. They decide we're going to be packaged with a nice bow and shipped to Ishari. This is hard on the MC because being Isharian literally got them beat up before, and now MCs going to where all the Isharians live. We have to say good bye to Ama, Zikar, Belahm, and Aunt Yara (who is literally pregnant and dose not need this stress,) and it was totally hear breaking. We really get to see how deeply they care for MC and it's so bittersweet. After that, if you're as cool as I am, you get into an official relationship with Irus. I think it's really nice how the book takes into consideration how people may feel about the sexual parts of relationships ad makes sure you're ok with having anything more than just a base level relationship with Irus. I would also like to mention how Elora is literally my right hand man like we are thick as thieves for real, and again everybody is fatherless in this book like omg. All our moms either abandoned us or hates us and we just have no dads smh. The next day begin our endeavor to Ishari, and of course nothing ever goes right for these dudes. It's only fair we get attacked while at sea, right? Nomad tribes attack us because they suck. It's a total massacre, luckily Oren and Elora come to our rescue and we're saved and the turns quickly table as we capture the Nomads and their leader whos name starts with an L it's like Lena or something. Cha[ter four was nice, and is very hectic for the MC. After this who knows what's going to happen? Though You and Irus still get some... quality time together? Chapter five is a bit spicy huh?
Chapter five- spicy
We finally make it to Ishari and we meet Anu, who I've got some notes on. First and for most Anu is sexy af, like mommy? I mean mommy? I mean... But also she seemed to be introduced quite late in the story. Most people will have already chosen who to be with by the time Anu is reeled into the picture. That's really my only issue besides the fact she makes me think gay. Again people hating on Irus like that- this time Anu calls him a bastard- smh. This is like black people being racist towards white people racisim is racism, it doesn't matter who it's directed at. :/ Discriminations aside we meet aa rather open minded Isharian named Saragon who's a real breath of fresh air. I chose to visit Eloras room and she literally let me do her hair I as so happy. Then some insignificant rude bish -Delondra- comes and ruins our good time like the insignificant rude bish she is. She lies to my face about my mom like an insignificant rude bish and the leaves. Like bish? Later prince Irus states his case about why the Isharians should make an Alliance with him but, of course, nothing ever goes smoothly, so MCs offered as tribute to save some Isharian captives being heled by the blood guard. So in favor of the alliance I do so, and say goodbye to Irus as I go and put my life on the line. Yay. I stumble upon my mother. The same mother who abandoned me when I was six years old or smth. This could've been a happy hting if it weren't for the fact she had another kid, Rana, AND that Rana got a dad. Yay. Needless to say MC isn't taking this too well. Ahlf is painted to be this bad dad who simply Tolerated MC but at least he had his moments. Since Salyra came into the picture, it's been sadness after sadness for MC. They both suck at parenting and chapter five was just mentally detrimental on MC. I try to remain indifferent when it comes to Rana since its genuinely go nothing to do with her that Salyra is a piece of trash. of course we still have time for the dirty and squirty with Irus, and we close out chapter five with the devils tango. I refuse to go into anymore detail than that. Chapter five was pretty good too. Fudge you Salyra you suck.
Chapter 6 - Tender mercies
If you end up staying the night with Irus you wake up with him, and then Elora tells you that the nomad prisoners escaped. (remember those guys?) Your mother also goes through your things at some point but there's something really important i need to talk about. It is stressed multiple times throughout this chapter that Salyra is keeping a secret from you and i think i figured out part of what it is. You get an opportunity to question Salyra and you can ask her why she never went back to you. She says it was too dangerous and that she's afraid she could be putting you in danger by leading the blood guard to you. That's total BS because she had Rana but didn't abandon her event though Rana is completely susceptible to the same fate. I think the secret is that Salyra was totally capable of coming back for MC but chose not to because of one reason or another. Not only that but Princess Lamahu said something that led me to this conclusion. " "I see," she breathes. "You are unaware of much, child. Your mother always did think she was protecting you by sending you away." " Literally word for word. This means Lamahu knew I was in Cyre, and knew of my existence even though Anu didn't so we can assume it was just Lamahu. The queen of this clearly wealthy nation and my moms good friend. Could she not have sent protection with Salyra? I feel like Salyra was purposefully leaving us in salt bay even if though he could come get us for whatever reason. I'm not surprised Salyra sucks, though i could be way off. Anyways, thats mostly what i wanted to day about chapter six. We did manage an alliance with the isharians, go Irus! and bam, my analysis of this book.
It's 1:37 Am and I am tired as shiz but felt like doing this because this story has helped me cope so much, Thanks Ramona G. I wrote 8 paragraphs of this then an essay for school, I'm living the dream until it's due tomorrow. TvT. Excited for chapter seven! I remember hearing it's coming out end of April early may so I am checking in literally everyday now, super excited. This story is honestly a 10/10, it understood the assignment.
Firstly, thank you so much for taking the time to leave such a long and detailed comment! I'm so grateful for your support and I'm happy that you're enjoying the game so far 🌼💖 I'll tackle my response the same way you structured your comment 😊
PROLOGUE:
I'm really glad you enjoyed the prologue! Those scenes with Ahlf (the sickness scene), Dena's scenes and the bullying were added to the prologue after Chapter 3 had been completed. I had hoped to flesh out the prologue a bit more by adding more ages for players to explore. Good news - Dena will play a major role in Part 3 and you'll meet them by Chapter 8. Dena was supposed to just be a forgotten character but after I wrote their character, I fell in love and realised I couldn't just ignore Dena 😅
CHAPTER 1:
Ahlf was always going to die 😬 That had been one part of the plot that I knew I had to include. As much as this is a fantasy game, I really love exploring family dynamics so the MC's relationship with their parents and especially when everything goes to hell was something I wanted to explore. I'm glad you love Irus! When the game was still a story/novel idea, he was the main love interest for the main character so you can say he has a special place in my heart. Crown was also going to be a nameless stallion until I added that scene with Irus explaining his name, so it's good to know you like our favourite horse.
CHAPTER 2:
Elora is definitely the BFF character I imagined her to be. She's based on another story character I created and originally was the only other love interest for the game. Chapter 2 was definitely more of a struggle to write for me, especially the political aspects since it was made up by me and I often questioned if it was going to make sense or not. I'm really glad you enjoyed meeting the family because it was also a planned moment which I had known needed to happen.
CHAPTER THREE:
This was one of my favourite chapters to write and I'm so glad you enjoyed it! I prefer writing romance to most things and I'd be dying to include a banquet scene and balcony kisses with a particular prince 😋 Bad parents/family is the theme of the game so buckle up, it's definitely not over yet. With that said, Oren and Anu have the best family/parent dynamics with Oren's family being the closest to the MC's Vinia family.
CHAPTER FOUR:
I'm so happy that you appreciate the way the relationships are handled! To me, a good relationship isn't based on physical intimacy but trust and understanding so I knew that the sexual aspects of the romances would be secondary to the emotional connections I wanted to write. No one will be forced into doing more than they're comfortable with and it won't be an issue for any of the ROs. There is a lot of baggage with Ishari and the poor MC so I'm happy you enjoyed all the turmoil.
CHAPTER FIVE:
Anu was never planned as an RO until later in the game's writing and I had decided from the start that no RO would be an RO just for the sake of it. They needed to be relevant to the plot and play a role in the overall story, so Anu was introduced late and unfortunately will have fewer scenes with the MC than Irus would. Still, if you pursue her, you'll find that her romance will progress quickly much like Irus' and you'll start to see more of her route in Parts 3 and 4. Funnily enough, the intimacy scenes with Irus were meant to be more detailed/interactive but time was not on my side so I had to stick to basics 😅 Expect a more detailed scene when the full game is complete.
CHAPTER 6:
There are a lot of secrets to unearth with Salyra. When I say that you haven't learnt the full truth, trust me 👀 You'll get some answers in Chapter 7 but it'll just lead to more questions and with the way everything is structured, you'll only get to learn everything by Chapter 9/end of Part 3. So brace yourself for more angst and painful revelations 😬
Thank you for your lovely comment and know that I truly appreciate you playing and being so wonderfully detailed in your comment! Chapter 7 will be out in May 😋
I wasn't expecting anybody to read that comment (because of the size and all) especially not the author, so thanks for that pleasant surprise while I was watching a horror movie. :> With that aside I did have a question about my comment with Salyra. The more I thought about it the more what I wrote didn't make sense, so I did the only smart thing and re read It paying a lot more attention to chapter five and six and while I can see her being like this I don't get her motive, not only that but I'm really excited for Dena- all besides the point, I know this is a demo so I wanted to know if the entire thing is going to be on browser, or if theirs going to be an eventual download option, and if it's going to be a paid experience or not. I know there's twelve chapters scheduled but i just wanted to know. I'd definitely spend money because the writing is immaculate. I'd have to say I'm mostly excited about the re introduction of Dena an where he takes this story in chapter seven. Good writing, and remember not to overwork yourself. <3
I always read and try to reply to all the comments so please feel free to add as many as you want 😊
Her motive is mostly because she thought Erlan would have killed the MC but also because of spoilers which will be brought up briefly in Chapter 7 and explained more in depth towards the middle to end of Part 3. Safety was one of the reasons but not all of her reasons 😋
The game will go up to Chapter 8 for the public demo and then up to Chapters 10 and 11 for my Patrons. Once it's completed the demo will remain as it is on itch.io and playable on browser and as an apk and I'll be publishing the full game on Steam and depending on the demand, on Google Play 😊
I played the game for five hours straight only to realize that my romance relationship with Irus was -63 :) I wish the romance options were more clear. If you flirt with other ROs does is the possibility of friendzoning increase? How do the percentages work? I chose romance responses only to be disappointed when I looked at the menu. It's time that I won't get back.
If you are not choosing flirt options, you will not increase your romance stats. For Irus, you lock in your romance only if you spend time with him on the balcony in Chapter 3 and if you don't, you're locked out of his romance because the romance lock-in scene which triggers by Chapter 4 when you speak to him will not happen so you're automatically cut off from future romance scenes with him.
SPOILERS: This is gonna be long and all over the place because I have thoughts and my nerves are irked....real bad
Honestly I called the whole "mother being alive thing" and I also kinda called what some of her "reasons/excuses" would be. Now usually with my characters I let them reconcile with their parents but for this one I decided not to. I mean my main thing was "why didn't you tell them you were alive?" which she gave her answer and imo it wasn't enough. Listen I understand you not being able to help who and when you fall in love with and having a child can be a "happy accident" but let me put this into perspective. Her (main) reasoning for staying away was because it was "dangerous" and because of the previous king hunting her down and she felt it would extend to us. Which I found ironic considering he knew about us this whole time so it was kinda pointless. Then if you want to go there it was so "dangerous" yet she decided to have a child in which they could end up possibly be forced into the same circumstances our mc was put in because of who our mother was. On top of all this the lies, the secrets, and the half truths between both parents make me glad that I made my character kinda stiff with her dad because both of them ain't it at all. Like I know that it was written in a way to make the dad seem like the bad one but naw they both trash. Especially after we find out he hid the letters of her basically letting us know she was alive. Also I would like to add because I almost forgot she literally went through our stuff. Like I understand some of the letters were hers but she still had no right. I mean imagine what else she could've went through while in our room....
To add this in right here I had a whole little laughing moment where I was like "her whole character was a lie and she couldn't even be truthful about dying".
Its crazy because I hate how in these situations they say their piece/peace idk and think that everything is suppose to magically be alright. Ummm...No our character literally thought you died and they had to live with that at a young age and in a new place where everybody seemed to hate them. Not to mention the person you left them with didn't even want them really and kinda just tolerated us. So no I don't forgive her and I made my mc pick the choice of "I may have needed a mother once when I was child but I'm older I do not need one now" or something like that. Because its true. The moment she disappeared all those years was the moment she died and my mc eventually moved on. Being the person I am I just think some things people should let go. My mc already mourned and to just pop up like everything is sweet irked the mess out of me. Especially when even after that convo "mama" is kinda how can I say this "sneaky" about stuff still even after everything and even after seeing where that "sneakiness" has gotten her. Like she inserts herself in things when we kinda already established that's not her place to do....and its annoying and not endearing at all. Likeeee don't inquire about my man Isur he was there while you weren't so scoot scoot. Shoo fly shoo. And I'm glad he stepped because she really tried it.
This is so out of order but also think about her family who think she is dead as well and tbh the energy she's gives off makes me feel like she's the type of person to ask our mc not to tell them she's alive....or at the very least say they are gonna tell them themselves but have every excuse as to why they haven't yet....
In the end no I'm not gonna blame the child and no I'm not gonna be mad at the other guy but I swear if she gives me a reason I'm gonna be petty asf. Andddd I hope in the future we can have the power of the gods and be omega strong/ stronger than our mother cough cough.
To sum it up though I will recall a choice I picked in game. "She has her life I have mine" or something like that. And I agree whole heartily when something like this happens, the way it happened I think that atp there is no room for you anymore...Its bittersweet.
And I'm aware I could have my mc suck it up but why should I? I mean the "bitter" part of "bittersweet" is her living it up with her new family.....but I'm not gonna let myself be blinded by that,
You know what I was finished and now I'm not I would like to add a suggestion for a dialogue option. Can we pleaseeee get a conversation/dialogue option where we tell our mother not to make the same mistakes with her new family as she did with us. Give her new family the mother and wife she could not be before because of circumstances caused by her and some not. Not in a mean way but a bittersweet way. Because this is really how I feel I'm not mad but I'm leaning more to the "bitter" side in "bittersweet".
I guess I should've been said this but besides that whole little situation the story is very good.
Thank you so much for playing ❤ I'm glad you felt so much with the reveal with Salyra. I did try to make it as emotionally charged as I could, so it's really nice to hear everything you felt about the reunion and the type of MC you chose to play.
I'm not sure if I will add the suggestion, since Salyra would never listen to the MC regarding tips on how to deal with her new family and by Chapter 7, you'll realise that both Rana and Danzor are quite happy and content with the way Salyra is with them 😋
Thank you so much for playing and I'm so honoured that you've played it three times already 💗 I hope to have chapter 7 out by the end of the month or early May 😊
Wow, i feel so betrayed right now after the revelation, I'm looking forward to meeting the child though.
Perhaps MC can use holy powers too someday?
Anu and Oren are both so sweet, in chaotically different ways and i love both, i see i will have to do two different saves soon enough when romancing either of them.
I understand MC's Mama side in the start and after but I can't help but feel MC's anger ya know? Is wonderful game i will play again many times to see more outcomes until the next update XD
I'm glad the revelation had such a big impact for you! 😊 As for the divine blessings, you'll get your chance at learning more about them in Chapter 7.
It's definitely great to do more than one playthrough for the ROs 😂 And I'm happy that you're enjoying both Oren and Anu who are very opposite in temperaments.
Thank you so much for playing and I'm so happy you're enjoying it 😊 Elora is suspicious of the political climate of Ishari and doesn't trust the warriors. They're there to protect those in Ishari - not Elora or the main gang so she was observing their behavior for any signs of treachery.
I must say, I like Irus's route more than Sir Oren's. Irus had me blushing, squealing, and kicking my feet. Nevertheless, I enjoyed the game! Binged it actually.
Irus is one of my favourite characters to write so I'm really glad you're enjoying his route! Oren is a bit more shy/reserved compared to Irus. Oren's route is more fluffy than flirty 😅
I love this story so much! I'm so excited about the future updates. I love my romance path with Irus and can't wait to see Oren's too. This story deserves all the love and support. Rating: 10/10
this is the most delicious, heartbreaking, soul ripping, earth shattering, tear-jerking, devastating, bombastic, scrumdiddlyumptious writing ever 10/10 would eat again.
i just noticed something. if Mama's hair is ebony, and Ahlf's hair is chestnut brown, how do we have the options to have naturally golden or auburn hair? probably a dumb question but i need the closure
Genetics 😋 Ahlf had parents and so does Salyra. You can imagine it passed down somewhere along the line - there is no specific appearance that's restricted to the regions on the game. As the writer, I imagine it to be passed down from Ahlf's parents who are never mentioned in the game 😊
Hi! Just dropped by and want to say this is a great game! However in chapter6 there is no "next" after Anu left with her guards. There final scene I see is "Your return to your room is marred by the thoughts of the Nomad prisoners' escape."
(Also somehow I clicked the "form" link in the bug choice and nothing happened…)
Hey! This issue normally happens if you've not restarted the game. New variables were added to the previous chapters so it will affect chapter 6. Please restart the game and if you still can't move past this passage, let me know. The bug form does work - but make sure you're connected to the Internet or it won't open.
As this is a work in progress, I can't tell you when the full release is scheduled. The game is written in my spare time, so I'm not certain how frequently I'll be able to push updates. As for the length, there's a planned 12 chapters and epilogue 😊
This game is amazing, but it makes me want to scream. F*ck the MCs mom. Maybe its because im mixed and one side is racist but it's definitely a trigger. That said, its still awesome. Try it
Thank you so much for playing and I'm so happy you enjoyed it 💖😊 There is no racism in the game - it's religious discrimination and possibly discrimination against certain regions. Both Cyre and Ishari have the same types of people who just hold different beliefs 😊
i know totes i guess its cause both sides of my family are like opposites that reject me (like i'm buddhist but half my family tells me i'm going to hell, cultural rejection? My asian side won't even talk to me.) Your writing made me THINK which is like the best kind of writing. Thank you!
I'm really glad that the story and the MC's background could resonate with you 😊 It means a lot to know that my writing could do that, so thank you for your words of support 💖
If you choose to just remain friends - you will get a drop in your relationship. His look-in moment is in Chapter 4, after the council scene. So if you do not lock-in your relationship, unfortunately, you're locked out of his romance.
There is - in chapter 4 after the council meeting. You need to actively pursue a romance with him to get this scene. If not, you're automatically locked out of the romance. Make sure that you join him on the balcony during Chapter 3 and only then will you get a lock-in option or friendship option. If your romance is negative something and you didn't get a choice to choose friendship, you've not gotten enough romance points to get the lock-in scene.
when playing chapter six, upon reaching the scene to prepare for the departure to Sangasu, there is no 'next' button and i'm unable to continue the story, i've tried restarting the game, playing on different browsers and also trying my phone instead but it's still happening in the same scene. is there anything i can do to stop this from happening?
Please use the bug form to report this issue and be as detailed as possible with the choices you've selected that leads you to a blank screen. This sounds like a coding issue, but I can't be sure since others have played past this point without issue.
Every time I try to play this game on the web an error message pops up and it says 'An embedded page at v6p9d9t4.ssl.hwcdn.net says A fatal error has occured. Aborting. Error: no valid storage adapters found.' How do I solve this issue?
I actually don't know what error that is - it has nothing to do with the game because its not a game error. It sounds more like an itch.io error. Have you tried clearing your cache or opening the game page in incognito mode? Please let me know if you're still unable to play the game 😊
Woah 😱 this revelation really caught me by surprise! I would never have guessed it... Can't wait for the next chapter. Thank you for your hard work, Ramona 💜💜💜
Just binged up to Chapter 5 in one sitting. You really have a knack for making me feel attached to my own character, or maybe I'm just soft--after that particular ch5 revelation with Rana, I felt my heart plummet and felt my character's hurt as my own. Truly had to sit there for several moments and contemplate how I wanted to react. Kudos, author!
Thank you so much for playing and I'm so happy you enjoyed the game 💖😊
It means a lot that you're attached to the MC! I tried to make the MC's personality based on what you as a player choose, so it's really good to know that you felt the same hurt over Chapter 5's revelations.
this has been on my mind for awhile now but will Dena pop back up? and will we be able to romance them? / also I'm getting the idea that sooner or later we are gonna be able to use some ancient magic- can't wait to see what you do next. I'm totally obsessed with this game. also I'm totally team Oren 99.9% but Anu's whole mean to everyone else but nice to you shtick has my head turning towards that other 00.1% *internal squealing*
Yes, Dena will reappear in Part 3 😊 The Divine Blessings (rather than magic), will come up in Part 3, so keep an eye on out on your belief stats 👀
Thank you so much for playing and I'm really glad you're enjoying Oren and Anu's routes! Most of the stuff you've asked about has been answered already on my Tumblr so please do check it out for more information about the plot and characters 🌼
I really wanted to do a poly route with Irus, the MC and Dena, but the amount of time and the extra coding would have been too much 😅 Dena will be added as a bonus RO once I've completed all other routes 😊
Love this game! Enough to actually report bugs I found through your form-- usually I don't bother but this game is so great I had to actually help out for once 😆!
Gotta shout out Elora! I'm playing a shy MC with her and the way she enjoys flustering her is so cute! Can't wait to spend more time with her.
Chapter 5 was fantastic, I appreciate you let us really choose how we felt about things. I had a feeling this would happen, I'm actually happy about it and looking forward to seeing how things pan out.
Thank you so much for playing 💖😊 And sending in bug reports is very helpful because my testers aren't able to find every bug encountered, so it dies help me a lot!
I'm really happy you're enjoying Queen Elora's romance route! You will be able to lock-in your relationship with her in Chapter 6 😋
You'll definitely always get a choice to decide how you're feeling with things, especially when it involves the MC's parents 👀
I've been keeping an eye on the progress of this for a while, but I definitely enjoyed the lastest update. I wanna thank you for giving the mc to be distant or angry about the revelation. Too often I see people who makes mc's way too forgiving and this was a a breath of fresh air. If anything, I hope the mc can tell the mother she's going too fast with "Oh hey, let's introduce you to my family. Let's be whole." when the mc revealed they lost their father in a violent and traumatic way.
Thank you for playing! And I'm really grateful for your support 💖
I really dislike forced forgiveness or happy reconciliations with MC's and people who have hurt them in some way or form, so I knew that I was going to let players act as antagonistic as they wanted to 😅
You will get a chance to tell Salyra how you feel in Chapter 6, and can choose how much you want to interact with her new family independently from whether or not you cut ties with Salyra.
Thank you again and I'm really glad you're enjoying the game 🌼
Yes! Forced forgiveness in games like these is a huge pet peeve of mine. I don't really know if any explanation would be good enough for forgiveness in my eyes, but I also don't think it's her daughter's fault. Would be cool if we could have little to no more interaction with Salyra but still be a good brother.
You will be able to have a relationship with Rana separately from Salyra 😋 Of course, Salyra might get a little hopeful that the MC would be willing to reconcile with her but that's what antagonistic responses are for 😅
i started reading thinking it would be a short demo, and ended up spending like 7ish hours bingereading it. i cried about 3 times throughout. what a game. IRUS MY BELOVED!!!!! p.s.: i am so sleep deprived rn i almost ended up commenting a major spoiler by accident 😳 oops. so let's just say the last chapter REALLY fucked me up
Thank you so much for playing! I forget how long the game is when you play it - to me it feels like an hour long but that's because I'm writing it opposed to playing it 😅
I'm glad you enjoyed Irus' route! He is quite a great RO 😉
That latest chapter was not the last of the angst, prepare for more in Chapter 6 👀 Thank you again fir your support 💖
MC's mom leaving them in a town so openly hateful of their people and building another family while MC had to grow up with a man they barely knew, in a town that was repulsed by her mere existence? I actually felt the betrayal, and honestly I don't think there's a good enough reason for my MC to forgive her, even if it's their mother. Actually, especially because she's their mother but she abandoned them like that. I think I'll be left in tears next chapter too, BUT I NEED CLOSURE FROM THIS LET MY MC ANGRILY YELL AT THEIR MOTHER I BEG YOU I really loved the story. I'm usually slow to play text-based games like this because of my ADHD, but the plot was so interesting that I found myself actually immersed. I love the characters so much, I can barely stop myself from flirting with all of them, though Iris has a special place in my heart.
Really excited to play chapter 6! (please let me rage at Salyra please please please)
Thank you so much for playing ❤ I'm so happy the chapter could make you feel so strongly.
You will definitely get a chance to get some answers, though detailed answers hinges on whether or not you actively pursue a relationship with Salyra and the rest of her family 😅
I'm so grateful that you're enjoying the game, especially the ROs 😊 Irus is my fave too!
There are already a lot of angry responses written for Chapter 6 and I have to admit, I teared up for a few so more angst ahead 👀
this interactive fiction is SO GOOD I'M SCREAMING RN IS AMAZING AND I'M LOOKING FORWARD TO THE NEW CHAPS IN THE FUTURE! And thank you for giving us this amazing entertainment and I wish u good luck and stay safe dear author ^^
Thank you so much for playing and I'm so glad that you're enjoying the game 😊 Irus is quite fun to write so I'm glad you're enjoying his character. Thank you for your support 💖
This chapter's plot twists are unexpected. I want to cry from happiness since this chapter was so fantastic!
Oh, but wait, the angst in here...I'm liking it so much I can't even begin to explain it 🌝, and Bloody hell! mama isn't going anywhere until or unless my MC gets answers, and she isn't going to warm up to mama anytime soon.
Imagine ahlf suddenly reappearing...oh dear my soul shall fly away :( I miss him.
I had a variety of conflicting emotions after reading the reunion scene with Mama. The chp was truly beautifully written.
Oh, do I really need to tell you how much I love Irus💕✨. The way he treats the MC, and the scenes with him are consistently refreshing and delightful. (Sometimes they are way too sweet, that I have to cover up my face to stop blushing 😭 😉 but I love it)
I'm excited for more chapters with him. (Ofc no rush 😌)
Thank you so much for your lovely comment 💖😊 It really made my day!
I'm so glad you enjoyed the plot twist! It was one that I had been planning for a very long time so it was quite enjoyable to write.
I'm currently working on Chapter 6, so rest assured that you will be getting your answers 😉
Ahlf is unfortunately not coming back, but you will get mentions of him in Chapter 6 when you finally sit down to talk to Salyra.
I'm so happy you enjoyed Irus' scene! I tried to convey his emotions for the MC without making it seem too cheesy, so it's good to know you enjoyed it 😊
Thank you so much for playing and for your support!
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!!!Major spoilers!!! This game slaps so hard for no good reason and I have a lot I want to say, so why not right a way too long comment nobody's gonna read? Buckle up b^tches we've got six chapters (plus a prologue) to break down, and as somebody whos read this way too many times I am going to go WAY too in-depth. :)
Prologue- Mommy issues.
Honestly I'd give this prologue a 10/10 she did what needed to be done. I was hooked and I was ready. I think it establishes a good start to this novel. I felt pretty indifferent to both Ahlf and Salyra at this point without really knowing the gravity of the situation we were in, and honestly- they both suck and cannot parent to save their souls, but we'll get into that later. I'm not really going to talk about the part where we get sick, I think it's cute we get to see Ahlf being somewhat fatherly, but that still doesn't justify what he did with the letters. (the fact he's been hiding the letters Salyra wrote us, not the letters in the jade box.) I like how we get to establish MC's appearance so earl on in a way that fits instead of just saying 'what u look like?' and then move on. As for genuine plot, i enjoyed it. We were able to see what MC goes through when it comes to cultural discriminations, and how Ahlf is just not doing what needs to be done as a sole parent. As for Dena I feel like their not talked about enough (going to use They/Them for Dena as you choose their gender) Previously there were hearts next to the two romantic options if you join Dena at the tavern, but they were taken out so it's safe to say Dena won't be romanceable which I have no problem with as they called us getting the shiz beat out of us a jest. Come on bro could you be more insensitive? I also liked the fact that we got a moment where Ahlf expressed his affection for us when we came back all bloody and banged up. I'd love to see Dena re introduced in later chapters just for unnecessary drama, but that's just me wanting to stir shiz up for no reason. At the end of the day Dena, you're just a tutorial character, get over yourself.
Chapter one- Alone with an exiled prince
Chapter one was really good too, I think the start with the mourning of king Erlan felt like it foreshadows Ahlf death. Speaking of which, I like to think Ahlf was really upset about king Erlan dying. I chose to make my MC think she was her mom was alive, but I still think it's nice you mourn the absence of her, because that's still something we can do if somebodies missing in out lives. Let's be so for real, or MC is traumatized BIG time. Also this i could've mentioned in the prologue part since it's in the prologue we fine the jade box but who cares- I kind of feel like Ahlf and Salyra's relationship may be foreshadowing- just a little bit- to MC's ad Irus's if you choose to pursue him. If that predictions correct I will not hesitate to cry. Ramona did MC dirty with Ahlf's death, especially if you choose to take his side like omg, I didn't like him that much, but that's just sad. Bu let's talk about the elephant in the room, Prince Irus. I genuinely love his character, he's a real piece of work in this chapter, but I loved every moment with him, honestly. It's made clear he had bad first impressions with MC, given how we're dressed when he first see's us, but that didn't stop him from being a gentleman and helping us off crown. I also love crown sm, and I need to take a moment and say that. Fight seen with that blood guard was super bad as^ if you chose to fight him and not make Irus fight him. And I am waiting for my MC to become a fricking magical girl with the most badas^ powers from the ancient ones, I'm getting my ancient ones stat to 100 sue me. Slay atheist Irus we live for it, and it was nice to get a sense of vulnerability from him with his dads death, makes him feel more human. And that wraps up chapter one, so next stop Vinia babes
Chapter two- well, this is bizzare.
My first impressions on Nerena were pretty bad like, sis, let us in, we've been through it alright. As for Oren, not the most memorable of the capture targets, though his picture is spicy af. While I feel like he can fade in the back when put up against a whole queen of a nation and an exiled prince, he feels more in place than Anu, but I'll get into her when she's actually introduced. I think both scenes on the horses of Irus or Oren is adorable, but it feels almost mean to choose Oren over Irus after you know Irus's true thoughts about you choosing to ride with him. Then we're introduced Queen Elora, and I as just about read to fight this girl when we first see her. Like, who does she think she is jumping onto MY man and calling him "Iri?" like, sis, we're gonna fight. But in all seriousness I love queen Elora so much, she seems like the bff you rant to about your toxic ex while she paints your nails and encourages you to fight them way too much. The part where Irus gets mad and snaps at you got me so heated, especially if you choose "that wasn't the news i was expecting" and he says "All I'm left with is a fisherman's daughter/son" Like bish? I could get in a space ship and see the entire world and STILL not find where you got the audacity. Of course he apologizes, all is forgiven, whatever, but I still haven't forgotten that four chapters later. Back in our room the only thing really worth mentioning besides the nightmare is what we find in the jade box. I'm enjoying uncovering my mom and dads past WAY too much, like really. Then the nightmare we have really reels in the fact that MC is freaking traumatized- like I am so sorry. Anyways, after the nightmare we have our moment with one of the three introduced capture targets. (Throughout this review I'll mostly be talking about Irus because he's the target I went for.) If you go upstairs and have your time with prince Irus I initially thought he would give you a kiss goodnight regardless, however if you choose the shyer option he just touches your face which I personally feel is so cute because it's like he's trying to be mindful of your boundaries. Also this novel encompasses anxiety so well, it's hilarious. Then, of course, the next morning we get good news from Elora which went- "Yay we can stay- Oh we have to win over your government." Happy moments are fleeting in this game indeed. We go and take a look around the city, of course me being me- I went to the food stalls. It also seemed like the least traumatic option for MC. Then disaster strikes. We have to take a look at MC's mommy and daddy issues again because we found family at the bizarre with Nerena and Irus. I genuinely love Zikar as a freaking mood so much. Of course he's gotta learn to watch what he says about Irus my man, my man, my man. The part with the MCs family is just super emotional, and makes me hate Salyra even more than before. That's practically chapter two and my thoughts- but get ready girls because chapter three is one of my favorites.
Chapter three- I'm having a ball.
Starting this chapter off strong with coming to the realization that Irus can't study for shiz. You want to govern a whole kingdom but you can't even sit down and read a book? Smh. I also spent some time with Elora learning about Kazan which actually came in handy, I was genuinely not excepting that to matter. Later we're helping Elora, and oh my god let's make a petition to get rid of every mother in this novel, what are ya'll even doing for real. Also, I'd feel bad romancing Elora when Elora and Zikar together is so cute-. Also, the more I read the more I hate MC's mom, poor uncle Belahm- he did not deserve the mental torment Salyra put him through. Also why is everybody-besides MCs mother and father- in MCs family so freaking nice like omg. I got so excited when Ama gave MC the locket, if only I had known how much Salyra sucks. Then it was time to go to a ball. I'm going to sum this banquet up really quick because this comment is really long. MC aggressively makes out with either Irus, Oren, or Elora, then Virion (Irus's uncle who is trying to kill him) comes and says he's totally gonna wage war on Vinia- a very neutral kingdom- if they don't give him Irus. I honestly loved this chapter so much. The drama, the romance, it was all so perfect, I would stay here longer but there's not as much to unpack as there is in the other chapters which I really need to talk about. But in chapter four we're going on a trip sis, and poor MC just needs a nice good cry.
Chapter four- Setting sail.
Understandably enough, we start this chapter off in total fear. With all the- "I want Irus's head" and "I'm gonna declare war on you fools" we are not doing well as the MC, and the rest of the group isn't either. We're making the decision if we want to keep Irus and wage war against Cyre, or leave him in the dust, and the council doesn't go one way or the other. They decide we're going to be packaged with a nice bow and shipped to Ishari. This is hard on the MC because being Isharian literally got them beat up before, and now MCs going to where all the Isharians live. We have to say good bye to Ama, Zikar, Belahm, and Aunt Yara (who is literally pregnant and dose not need this stress,) and it was totally hear breaking. We really get to see how deeply they care for MC and it's so bittersweet. After that, if you're as cool as I am, you get into an official relationship with Irus. I think it's really nice how the book takes into consideration how people may feel about the sexual parts of relationships ad makes sure you're ok with having anything more than just a base level relationship with Irus. I would also like to mention how Elora is literally my right hand man like we are thick as thieves for real, and again everybody is fatherless in this book like omg. All our moms either abandoned us or hates us and we just have no dads smh. The next day begin our endeavor to Ishari, and of course nothing ever goes right for these dudes. It's only fair we get attacked while at sea, right? Nomad tribes attack us because they suck. It's a total massacre, luckily Oren and Elora come to our rescue and we're saved and the turns quickly table as we capture the Nomads and their leader whos name starts with an L it's like Lena or something. Cha[ter four was nice, and is very hectic for the MC. After this who knows what's going to happen? Though You and Irus still get some... quality time together? Chapter five is a bit spicy huh?
Chapter five- spicy
We finally make it to Ishari and we meet Anu, who I've got some notes on. First and for most Anu is sexy af, like mommy? I mean mommy? I mean... But also she seemed to be introduced quite late in the story. Most people will have already chosen who to be with by the time Anu is reeled into the picture. That's really my only issue besides the fact she makes me think gay. Again people hating on Irus like that- this time Anu calls him a bastard- smh. This is like black people being racist towards white people racisim is racism, it doesn't matter who it's directed at. :/ Discriminations aside we meet aa rather open minded Isharian named Saragon who's a real breath of fresh air. I chose to visit Eloras room and she literally let me do her hair I as so happy. Then some insignificant rude bish -Delondra- comes and ruins our good time like the insignificant rude bish she is. She lies to my face about my mom like an insignificant rude bish and the leaves. Like bish? Later prince Irus states his case about why the Isharians should make an Alliance with him but, of course, nothing ever goes smoothly, so MCs offered as tribute to save some Isharian captives being heled by the blood guard. So in favor of the alliance I do so, and say goodbye to Irus as I go and put my life on the line. Yay. I stumble upon my mother. The same mother who abandoned me when I was six years old or smth. This could've been a happy hting if it weren't for the fact she had another kid, Rana, AND that Rana got a dad. Yay. Needless to say MC isn't taking this too well. Ahlf is painted to be this bad dad who simply Tolerated MC but at least he had his moments. Since Salyra came into the picture, it's been sadness after sadness for MC. They both suck at parenting and chapter five was just mentally detrimental on MC. I try to remain indifferent when it comes to Rana since its genuinely go nothing to do with her that Salyra is a piece of trash. of course we still have time for the dirty and squirty with Irus, and we close out chapter five with the devils tango. I refuse to go into anymore detail than that. Chapter five was pretty good too. Fudge you Salyra you suck.
Chapter 6 - Tender mercies
If you end up staying the night with Irus you wake up with him, and then Elora tells you that the nomad prisoners escaped. (remember those guys?) Your mother also goes through your things at some point but there's something really important i need to talk about. It is stressed multiple times throughout this chapter that Salyra is keeping a secret from you and i think i figured out part of what it is. You get an opportunity to question Salyra and you can ask her why she never went back to you. She says it was too dangerous and that she's afraid she could be putting you in danger by leading the blood guard to you. That's total BS because she had Rana but didn't abandon her event though Rana is completely susceptible to the same fate. I think the secret is that Salyra was totally capable of coming back for MC but chose not to because of one reason or another. Not only that but Princess Lamahu said something that led me to this conclusion. " "I see," she breathes. "You are unaware of much, child. Your mother always did think she was protecting you by sending you away." " Literally word for word. This means Lamahu knew I was in Cyre, and knew of my existence even though Anu didn't so we can assume it was just Lamahu. The queen of this clearly wealthy nation and my moms good friend. Could she not have sent protection with Salyra? I feel like Salyra was purposefully leaving us in salt bay even if though he could come get us for whatever reason. I'm not surprised Salyra sucks, though i could be way off. Anyways, thats mostly what i wanted to day about chapter six. We did manage an alliance with the isharians, go Irus! and bam, my analysis of this book.
It's 1:37 Am and I am tired as shiz but felt like doing this because this story has helped me cope so much, Thanks Ramona G. I wrote 8 paragraphs of this then an essay for school, I'm living the dream until it's due tomorrow. TvT. Excited for chapter seven! I remember hearing it's coming out end of April early may so I am checking in literally everyday now, super excited. This story is honestly a 10/10, it understood the assignment.
Firstly, thank you so much for taking the time to leave such a long and detailed comment! I'm so grateful for your support and I'm happy that you're enjoying the game so far 🌼💖 I'll tackle my response the same way you structured your comment 😊
I'm really glad you enjoyed the prologue! Those scenes with Ahlf (the sickness scene), Dena's scenes and the bullying were added to the prologue after Chapter 3 had been completed. I had hoped to flesh out the prologue a bit more by adding more ages for players to explore. Good news - Dena will play a major role in Part 3 and you'll meet them by Chapter 8. Dena was supposed to just be a forgotten character but after I wrote their character, I fell in love and realised I couldn't just ignore Dena 😅
CHAPTER 1:
Ahlf was always going to die 😬 That had been one part of the plot that I knew I had to include. As much as this is a fantasy game, I really love exploring family dynamics so the MC's relationship with their parents and especially when everything goes to hell was something I wanted to explore. I'm glad you love Irus! When the game was still a story/novel idea, he was the main love interest for the main character so you can say he has a special place in my heart. Crown was also going to be a nameless stallion until I added that scene with Irus explaining his name, so it's good to know you like our favourite horse.
CHAPTER 2:
Elora is definitely the BFF character I imagined her to be. She's based on another story character I created and originally was the only other love interest for the game. Chapter 2 was definitely more of a struggle to write for me, especially the political aspects since it was made up by me and I often questioned if it was going to make sense or not. I'm really glad you enjoyed meeting the family because it was also a planned moment which I had known needed to happen.
CHAPTER THREE:
This was one of my favourite chapters to write and I'm so glad you enjoyed it! I prefer writing romance to most things and I'd be dying to include a banquet scene and balcony kisses with a particular prince 😋 Bad parents/family is the theme of the game so buckle up, it's definitely not over yet. With that said, Oren and Anu have the best family/parent dynamics with Oren's family being the closest to the MC's Vinia family.
CHAPTER FOUR:
I'm so happy that you appreciate the way the relationships are handled! To me, a good relationship isn't based on physical intimacy but trust and understanding so I knew that the sexual aspects of the romances would be secondary to the emotional connections I wanted to write. No one will be forced into doing more than they're comfortable with and it won't be an issue for any of the ROs. There is a lot of baggage with Ishari and the poor MC so I'm happy you enjoyed all the turmoil.
CHAPTER FIVE:
Anu was never planned as an RO until later in the game's writing and I had decided from the start that no RO would be an RO just for the sake of it. They needed to be relevant to the plot and play a role in the overall story, so Anu was introduced late and unfortunately will have fewer scenes with the MC than Irus would. Still, if you pursue her, you'll find that her romance will progress quickly much like Irus' and you'll start to see more of her route in Parts 3 and 4. Funnily enough, the intimacy scenes with Irus were meant to be more detailed/interactive but time was not on my side so I had to stick to basics 😅 Expect a more detailed scene when the full game is complete.
CHAPTER 6:
There are a lot of secrets to unearth with Salyra. When I say that you haven't learnt the full truth, trust me 👀 You'll get some answers in Chapter 7 but it'll just lead to more questions and with the way everything is structured, you'll only get to learn everything by Chapter 9/end of Part 3. So brace yourself for more angst and painful revelations 😬
Thank you for your lovely comment and know that I truly appreciate you playing and being so wonderfully detailed in your comment! Chapter 7 will be out in May 😋
I wasn't expecting anybody to read that comment (because of the size and all) especially not the author, so thanks for that pleasant surprise while I was watching a horror movie. :> With that aside I did have a question about my comment with Salyra. The more I thought about
it the more what I wrote didn't make sense, so I did the only smart thing and re read It paying a lot more attention to chapter five and six and while I can see her being like this I don't get her motive, not only that but I'm really excited for Dena- all besides the point, I know this is a demo so I wanted to know if the entire thing is going to be on browser, or if theirs going to be an eventual download option, and if it's going to be a paid experience or not. I know there's twelve chapters scheduled but i just wanted to know. I'd definitely spend money because the writing is immaculate. I'd have to say I'm mostly excited about the re introduction of Dena an where he takes this story in chapter seven. Good writing, and remember not to overwork yourself. <3
I always read and try to reply to all the comments so please feel free to add as many as you want 😊
Her motive is mostly because she thought Erlan would have killed the MC but also because of spoilers which will be brought up briefly in Chapter 7 and explained more in depth towards the middle to end of Part 3. Safety was one of the reasons but not all of her reasons 😋
The game will go up to Chapter 8 for the public demo and then up to Chapters 10 and 11 for my Patrons. Once it's completed the demo will remain as it is on itch.io and playable on browser and as an apk and I'll be publishing the full game on Steam and depending on the demand, on Google Play 😊
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Right here 😊
I played the game for five hours straight only to realize that my romance relationship with Irus was -63 :) I wish the romance options were more clear. If you flirt with other ROs does is the possibility of friendzoning increase? How do the percentages work? I chose romance responses only to be disappointed when I looked at the menu. It's time that I won't get back.
If you are not choosing flirt options, you will not increase your romance stats. For Irus, you lock in your romance only if you spend time with him on the balcony in Chapter 3 and if you don't, you're locked out of his romance because the romance lock-in scene which triggers by Chapter 4 when you speak to him will not happen so you're automatically cut off from future romance scenes with him.
SPOILERS: This is gonna be long and all over the place because I have thoughts and my nerves are irked....real bad
Honestly I called the whole "mother being alive thing" and I also kinda called what some of her "reasons/excuses" would be. Now usually with my characters I let them reconcile with their parents but for this one I decided not to. I mean my main thing was "why didn't you tell them you were alive?" which she gave her answer and imo it wasn't enough. Listen I understand you not being able to help who and when you fall in love with and having a child can be a "happy accident" but let me put this into perspective. Her (main) reasoning for staying away was because it was "dangerous" and because of the previous king hunting her down and she felt it would extend to us. Which I found ironic considering he knew about us this whole time so it was kinda pointless. Then if you want to go there it was so "dangerous" yet she decided to have a child in which they could end up possibly be forced into the same circumstances our mc was put in because of who our mother was. On top of all this the lies, the secrets, and the half truths between both parents make me glad that I made my character kinda stiff with her dad because both of them ain't it at all. Like I know that it was written in a way to make the dad seem like the bad one but naw they both trash. Especially after we find out he hid the letters of her basically letting us know she was alive. Also I would like to add because I almost forgot she literally went through our stuff. Like I understand some of the letters were hers but she still had no right. I mean imagine what else she could've went through while in our room....
To add this in right here I had a whole little laughing moment where I was like "her whole character was a lie and she couldn't even be truthful about dying".
Its crazy because I hate how in these situations they say their piece/peace idk and think that everything is suppose to magically be alright. Ummm...No our character literally thought you died and they had to live with that at a young age and in a new place where everybody seemed to hate them. Not to mention the person you left them with didn't even want them really and kinda just tolerated us. So no I don't forgive her and I made my mc pick the choice of "I may have needed a mother once when I was child but I'm older I do not need one now" or something like that. Because its true. The moment she disappeared all those years was the moment she died and my mc eventually moved on. Being the person I am I just think some things people should let go. My mc already mourned and to just pop up like everything is sweet irked the mess out of me. Especially when even after that convo "mama" is kinda how can I say this "sneaky" about stuff still even after everything and even after seeing where that "sneakiness" has gotten her. Like she inserts herself in things when we kinda already established that's not her place to do....and its annoying and not endearing at all. Likeeee don't inquire about my man Isur he was there while you weren't so scoot scoot. Shoo fly shoo. And I'm glad he stepped because she really tried it.
This is so out of order but also think about her family who think she is dead as well and tbh the energy she's gives off makes me feel like she's the type of person to ask our mc not to tell them she's alive....or at the very least say they are gonna tell them themselves but have every excuse as to why they haven't yet....
In the end no I'm not gonna blame the child and no I'm not gonna be mad at the other guy but I swear if she gives me a reason I'm gonna be petty asf. Andddd I hope in the future we can have the power of the gods and be omega strong/ stronger than our mother cough cough.
To sum it up though I will recall a choice I picked in game. "She has her life I have mine" or something like that. And I agree whole heartily when something like this happens, the way it happened I think that atp there is no room for you anymore...Its bittersweet.
And I'm aware I could have my mc suck it up but why should I? I mean the "bitter" part of "bittersweet" is her living it up with her new family.....but I'm not gonna let myself be blinded by that,
You know what I was finished and now I'm not I would like to add a suggestion for a dialogue option. Can we pleaseeee get a conversation/dialogue option where we tell our mother not to make the same mistakes with her new family as she did with us. Give her new family the mother and wife she could not be before because of circumstances caused by her and some not. Not in a mean way but a bittersweet way. Because this is really how I feel I'm not mad but I'm leaning more to the "bitter" side in "bittersweet".
I guess I should've been said this but besides that whole little situation the story is very good.
Well, damn
Yeah....It was a lot huh? I think I did pretty good though.
Thank you so much for playing ❤ I'm glad you felt so much with the reveal with Salyra. I did try to make it as emotionally charged as I could, so it's really nice to hear everything you felt about the reunion and the type of MC you chose to play.
I'm not sure if I will add the suggestion, since Salyra would never listen to the MC regarding tips on how to deal with her new family and by Chapter 7, you'll realise that both Rana and Danzor are quite happy and content with the way Salyra is with them 😋
Thank you for support and for the long comment! 🌼
I'm not usually one for these types of stories but this is honestly really good and i have thoroughly enjoyed it
I'm so happy you gave the game a try and enjoyed it! 🌼😊
I love this game ive read this 3 times now cant get enough excited for more! Thank you and keep up the hard work its amazing.
Thank you so much for playing and I'm so honoured that you've played it three times already 💗 I hope to have chapter 7 out by the end of the month or early May 😊
Wow, i feel so betrayed right now after the revelation, I'm looking forward to meeting the child though.
Perhaps MC can use holy powers too someday?
Anu and Oren are both so sweet, in chaotically different ways and i love both, i see i will have to do two different saves soon enough when romancing either of them.
I understand MC's Mama side in the start and after but I can't help but feel MC's anger ya know? Is wonderful game i will play again many times to see more outcomes until the next update XD
I'm glad the revelation had such a big impact for you! 😊 As for the divine blessings, you'll get your chance at learning more about them in Chapter 7.
It's definitely great to do more than one playthrough for the ROs 😂 And I'm happy that you're enjoying both Oren and Anu who are very opposite in temperaments.
Thank you so much for playing ❤
Really enjoying this book right now! Just wondering, why was Ellora looking at the warriors near the coaches?
Thank you so much for playing and I'm so happy you're enjoying it 😊 Elora is suspicious of the political climate of Ishari and doesn't trust the warriors. They're there to protect those in Ishari - not Elora or the main gang so she was observing their behavior for any signs of treachery.
I must say, I like Irus's route more than Sir Oren's. Irus had me blushing, squealing, and kicking my feet. Nevertheless, I enjoyed the game! Binged it actually.
Irus is one of my favourite characters to write so I'm really glad you're enjoying his route! Oren is a bit more shy/reserved compared to Irus. Oren's route is more fluffy than flirty 😅
Thank you for playing 🌼
Through my Tumblr 😊
do it stop here?
You have to restart the game to continue.
I love this story so much! I'm so excited about the future updates. I love my romance path with Irus and can't wait to see Oren's too. This story deserves all the love and support. Rating: 10/10
Thank you so much for playing! I'm so happy that you're enjoying the game and Irus' romance route 😊🌼 I really appreciate the support!
can't get past naming my character because the game refuses to listen to the enter key when playing on mobile i guess 🥲
It works. Hit space after typing your name then press enter.
thank you !
also ngl kinda wanted to beat princess lamahu up.
Unfortunately, it might trigger a war 😅
this is the most delicious, heartbreaking, soul ripping, earth shattering, tear-jerking, devastating, bombastic, scrumdiddlyumptious writing ever 10/10 would eat again.
Thank you so much 😊 I'm really grateful for your kind words and I'm so glad you enjoyed the angst and story 💖
i just noticed something. if Mama's hair is ebony, and Ahlf's hair is chestnut brown, how do we have the options to have naturally golden or auburn hair? probably a dumb question but i need the closure
Genetics 😋 Ahlf had parents and so does Salyra. You can imagine it passed down somewhere along the line - there is no specific appearance that's restricted to the regions on the game. As the writer, I imagine it to be passed down from Ahlf's parents who are never mentioned in the game 😊
Hi! Just dropped by and want to say this is a great game! However in chapter6 there is no "next" after Anu left with her guards. There final scene I see is "Your return to your room is marred by the thoughts of the Nomad prisoners' escape."
(Also somehow I clicked the "form" link in the bug choice and nothing happened…)
Hey! This issue normally happens if you've not restarted the game. New variables were added to the previous chapters so it will affect chapter 6. Please restart the game and if you still can't move past this passage, let me know. The bug form does work - but make sure you're connected to the Internet or it won't open.
When is the full release scheduled?, And how many chapters are planned (just curious)?
As this is a work in progress, I can't tell you when the full release is scheduled. The game is written in my spare time, so I'm not certain how frequently I'll be able to push updates. As for the length, there's a planned 12 chapters and epilogue 😊
Cool and fair enough, last question is this last update on the demo?
For now, yes 😊 Once Chapter 7 is ready, it'll be posted to play.
Cool can't wait 🙂
I should just be the ruler at this point my MC is literally doing everything lol
So true 😂
This game is amazing, but it makes me want to scream. F*ck the MCs mom. Maybe its because im mixed and one side is racist but it's definitely a trigger. That said, its still awesome. Try it
Thank you so much for playing and I'm so happy you enjoyed it 💖😊 There is no racism in the game - it's religious discrimination and possibly discrimination against certain regions. Both Cyre and Ishari have the same types of people who just hold different beliefs 😊
i know totes i guess its cause both sides of my family are like opposites that reject me (like i'm buddhist but half my family tells me i'm going to hell, cultural rejection? My asian side won't even talk to me.) Your writing made me THINK which is like the best kind of writing. Thank you!
I'm really glad that the story and the MC's background could resonate with you 😊 It means a lot to know that my writing could do that, so thank you for your words of support 💖
Amazing chapter!! I loved it, excited for the next
Thank you! I'm glad you're enjoying it 💖
I- I have -91 on prince Irus romance points somehow??? Minus 91
I'm also locked out of flirt options for some reason.
The sudden drop to minus happens somwhere during the talking to prince Irus before leaving to Ishari scene.
If you choose to just remain friends - you will get a drop in your relationship. His look-in moment is in Chapter 4, after the council scene. So if you do not lock-in your relationship, unfortunately, you're locked out of his romance.
If that's your intention, the drop in numbers doesn't happen if I just skip spending time with the prince before leaving for Ishari.
Yes, but you will not be locked-in - so it's friendship scenes only afterwards.
There's also never a moment where the game asks if you want to "remain friends"?
There is - in chapter 4 after the council meeting. You need to actively pursue a romance with him to get this scene. If not, you're automatically locked out of the romance. Make sure that you join him on the balcony during Chapter 3 and only then will you get a lock-in option or friendship option. If your romance is negative something and you didn't get a choice to choose friendship, you've not gotten enough romance points to get the lock-in scene.
when playing chapter six, upon reaching the scene to prepare for the departure to Sangasu, there is no 'next' button and i'm unable to continue the story, i've tried restarting the game, playing on different browsers and also trying my phone instead but it's still happening in the same scene. is there anything i can do to stop this from happening?
Having the same problem, I’ve tried restarting/refreshing etc, still not working.
Please use the bug form to report this issue and be as detailed as possible with the choices you've selected that leads you to a blank screen. This sounds like a coding issue, but I can't be sure since others have played past this point without issue.
Every time I try to play this game on the web an error message pops up and it says
'An embedded page at v6p9d9t4.ssl.hwcdn.net says
A fatal error has occured. Aborting.
Error: no valid storage adapters found.'
How do I solve this issue?
I actually don't know what error that is - it has nothing to do with the game because its not a game error. It sounds more like an itch.io error. Have you tried clearing your cache or opening the game page in incognito mode? Please let me know if you're still unable to play the game 😊
The game works when opened in incognito mode.
It's likely a browser issue then or an issue on itch.io. I'm glad it managed to work for you in any case 🌼
Woah 😱 this revelation really caught me by surprise! I would never have guessed it... Can't wait for the next chapter. Thank you for your hard work, Ramona 💜💜💜
Big revelations are still to come 👀😋 Thank you for playing and I'm glad you enjoyed it!
Chapter 6 is broken. :(
Please restart the game if you're getting stuck. The game works fine on my side and many others have already played the new chapter without issue.
it worked, thanks for the advice. Is always a pleasure to play this game again.
No problem 😊 Thank you for playing!
this was so well done. I felt like i was reading a book and not playing a game
Thank you for your kind words 💖😊 I'm really glad you enjoyed the game!
Just binged up to Chapter 5 in one sitting. You really have a knack for making me feel attached to my own character, or maybe I'm just soft--after that particular ch5 revelation with Rana, I felt my heart plummet and felt my character's hurt as my own. Truly had to sit there for several moments and contemplate how I wanted to react. Kudos, author!
Thank you so much for playing and I'm so happy you enjoyed the game 💖😊
It means a lot that you're attached to the MC! I tried to make the MC's personality based on what you as a player choose, so it's really good to know that you felt the same hurt over Chapter 5's revelations.
Thank you again for your support 🌼
i love this. i love you, author. just 🤯
Thank you so much 😊💖 It means a lot and I'm glad you're enjoying the game!
this has been on my mind for awhile now but will Dena pop back up? and will we be able to romance them? / also I'm getting the idea that sooner or later we are gonna be able to use some ancient magic- can't wait to see what you do next. I'm totally obsessed with this game. also I'm totally team Oren 99.9% but Anu's whole mean to everyone else but nice to you shtick has my head turning towards that other 00.1% *internal squealing*
Yes, Dena will reappear in Part 3 😊 The Divine Blessings (rather than magic), will come up in Part 3, so keep an eye on out on your belief stats 👀
Thank you so much for playing and I'm really glad you're enjoying Oren and Anu's routes! Most of the stuff you've asked about has been answered already on my Tumblr so please do check it out for more information about the plot and characters 🌼
I'm glad someone asked about this cause I was wondering too. 😅
About Dena or the divine blessings? 😋
Denna, my mc's first love 😅 I go back and forth between Prince Irus and Oren, but might leave em both for Denna. 🤭
I really wanted to do a poly route with Irus, the MC and Dena, but the amount of time and the extra coding would have been too much 😅 Dena will be added as a bonus RO once I've completed all other routes 😊
Oooh that would have been interesting! But we are grateful for all you have given us!! 😊💕
this is my new obsession.
Thank you for playing 😊 I'm really glad you're enjoying it!
crying and dyinh (played the 5th chap)
Thank you so much for playing ❤ And im so happy the chapter could move you so deeply 😊
What a chapter! I'm completely in love with the characters and the plots!!
And what in the word was THAT scene with Irus!! i'm deep in love!
You're an amazing writter and i'm looking forward to seeing what will happen in the story!! <3
I'm so glad you enjoyed the game 😊🌼 Thank you for your support!
Glad you enjoyed Irus' scene 😉
Love this game! Enough to actually report bugs I found through your form-- usually I don't bother but this game is so great I had to actually help out for once 😆!
Gotta shout out Elora! I'm playing a shy MC with her and the way she enjoys flustering her is so cute! Can't wait to spend more time with her.
Chapter 5 was fantastic, I appreciate you let us really choose how we felt about things. I had a feeling this would happen, I'm actually happy about it and looking forward to seeing how things pan out.
Thank you so much for playing 💖😊 And sending in bug reports is very helpful because my testers aren't able to find every bug encountered, so it dies help me a lot!
I'm really happy you're enjoying Queen Elora's romance route! You will be able to lock-in your relationship with her in Chapter 6 😋
You'll definitely always get a choice to decide how you're feeling with things, especially when it involves the MC's parents 👀
Thank you for your support 🌼
AINT NO WAY THIS WAS JUST THE DEMO. THAT WAS TOO GOOD. Irus is bae btw idc what you say.
now I gotta do all the parts..
dw.. Irus will always be in my heart <3
It really is just the demo 😋 There are 12 planned chapters in total and an epilogue, so roughly around 7 more chapters to go.
Thank you so much for playing! I hope you enjoy the other romance routes as much as you enjoyed Irus' route 💖
Thank you! i look forward to more
I've been keeping an eye on the progress of this for a while, but I definitely enjoyed the lastest update. I wanna thank you for giving the mc to be distant or angry about the revelation. Too often I see people who makes mc's way too forgiving and this was a a breath of fresh air. If anything, I hope the mc can tell the mother she's going too fast with "Oh hey, let's introduce you to my family. Let's be whole." when the mc revealed they lost their father in a violent and traumatic way.
Thank you for playing! And I'm really grateful for your support 💖
I really dislike forced forgiveness or happy reconciliations with MC's and people who have hurt them in some way or form, so I knew that I was going to let players act as antagonistic as they wanted to 😅
You will get a chance to tell Salyra how you feel in Chapter 6, and can choose how much you want to interact with her new family independently from whether or not you cut ties with Salyra.
Thank you again and I'm really glad you're enjoying the game 🌼
Yes! Forced forgiveness in games like these is a huge pet peeve of mine. I don't really know if any explanation would be good enough for forgiveness in my eyes, but I also don't think it's her daughter's fault. Would be cool if we could have little to no more interaction with Salyra but still be a good brother.
You will be able to have a relationship with Rana separately from Salyra 😋 Of course, Salyra might get a little hopeful that the MC would be willing to reconcile with her but that's what antagonistic responses are for 😅
i started reading thinking it would be a short demo, and ended up spending like 7ish hours bingereading it. i cried about 3 times throughout. what a game. IRUS MY BELOVED!!!!!
p.s.: i am so sleep deprived rn i almost ended up commenting a major spoiler by accident 😳 oops. so let's just say the last chapter REALLY fucked me up
Thank you so much for playing! I forget how long the game is when you play it - to me it feels like an hour long but that's because I'm writing it opposed to playing it 😅
I'm glad you enjoyed Irus' route! He is quite a great RO 😉
That latest chapter was not the last of the angst, prepare for more in Chapter 6 👀 Thank you again fir your support 💖
Man, the last chapter actually left me in tears.
MC's mom leaving them in a town so openly hateful of their people and building another family while MC had to grow up with a man they barely knew, in a town that was repulsed by her mere existence? I actually felt the betrayal, and honestly I don't think there's a good enough reason for my MC to forgive her, even if it's their mother. Actually, especially because she's their mother but she abandoned them like that. I think I'll be left in tears next chapter too, BUT I NEED CLOSURE FROM THIS LET MY MC ANGRILY YELL AT THEIR MOTHER I BEG YOU
I really loved the story. I'm usually slow to play text-based games like this because of my ADHD, but the plot was so interesting that I found myself actually immersed. I love the characters so much, I can barely stop myself from flirting with all of them, though Iris has a special place in my heart.
Really excited to play chapter 6! (please let me rage at Salyra please please please)
Thank you so much for playing ❤ I'm so happy the chapter could make you feel so strongly.
You will definitely get a chance to get some answers, though detailed answers hinges on whether or not you actively pursue a relationship with Salyra and the rest of her family 😅
I'm so grateful that you're enjoying the game, especially the ROs 😊 Irus is my fave too!
There are already a lot of angry responses written for Chapter 6 and I have to admit, I teared up for a few so more angst ahead 👀
this interactive fiction is SO GOOD I'M SCREAMING RN IS AMAZING AND I'M LOOKING FORWARD TO THE NEW CHAPS IN THE FUTURE! And thank you for giving us this amazing entertainment and I wish u good luck and stay safe dear author ^^
OH AND IRUS HAS BEEN MY FAVORITE SO FAR😯
Thank you so much for playing and I'm so glad that you're enjoying the game 😊 Irus is quite fun to write so I'm glad you're enjoying his character. Thank you for your support 💖
The way that this game and Irus have a fierce chokehold on me 😭😭 i love this so much
Thank you so much for playing and I'm so grateful for your support! Expect more Irus soon ❤️️
What did i do to deserve you 😭 ✨, dear author?
This chapter's plot twists are unexpected. I want to cry from happiness since this chapter was so fantastic!
Oh, but wait, the angst in here...I'm liking it so much I can't even begin to explain it 🌝, and Bloody hell! mama isn't going anywhere until or unless my MC gets answers, and she isn't going to warm up to mama anytime soon.
Imagine ahlf suddenly reappearing...oh dear my soul shall fly away :( I miss him.
I had a variety of conflicting emotions after reading the reunion scene with Mama. The chp was truly beautifully written.
Oh, do I really need to tell you how much I love Irus💕✨. The way he treats the MC, and the scenes with him are consistently refreshing and delightful. (Sometimes they are way too sweet, that I have to cover up my face to stop blushing 😭 😉 but I love it)
I'm excited for more chapters with him. (Ofc no rush 😌)
I value your time and effort 💞 tysm.
Thank you so much for your lovely comment 💖😊 It really made my day!
I'm so glad you enjoyed the plot twist! It was one that I had been planning for a very long time so it was quite enjoyable to write.
I'm currently working on Chapter 6, so rest assured that you will be getting your answers 😉
Ahlf is unfortunately not coming back, but you will get mentions of him in Chapter 6 when you finally sit down to talk to Salyra.
I'm so happy you enjoyed Irus' scene! I tried to convey his emotions for the MC without making it seem too cheesy, so it's good to know you enjoyed it 😊
Thank you so much for playing and for your support!
I'm happy to see that my words were able to brighten your day💕,
I'm quite eager to learn the answers in the upcoming chapter 🤭.
There isn't a single scene with Irus that I didn't enjoy✨; it's impossible not to.
Rip ahlf :(