this is beautiful, the interaction with Ll is wholesome and I'm here for it. Keep it up!!<3
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Thank you so much for playing 💖 I'm glad you're enjoying the character interactions! Your support means a lot 😊😊
i love the prince so much. maybe part of me want to be queen who has power over people that hate part of yourself so much.
Thank you so much for playing and for leaving a comment! I really appreciate your support 💖If you play your cards right, you can become Irus' consort down the line 😋
irus is my bro and I want to climb oren like a tree
irus and elora my loves <3
not into interactive stories that much but i fell deeply in love with this one !! can't wait for more :)
irus my beloved <3
very good game ! can't wait for the following chapter
Irus is a fan fave 😂 Thank you so much for playing and taking the time to leave a comment. I really appreciate your support 💖
Virion you rat how dare you interrupt my smoocharoo with Irus I've never wanted to smack a old guy before but I sure do now😭💔
Now for my review this story is so well writing my goodness where would I even start without accidentally going on a rant in these here comments everything down to the dialogue and characters is just chef's kiss I simply couldn't help but go back and click other answers just so I could read what they said as you can imagine it took me over six hours of reading but it was all truly worth it and I can highly recommend this story to any fantasy, romancers and journey lovers out there trust me it'll be really good now I must end this comment since it's 5:20 am but I can't help but anxiously wait for the next chapter like my life depends on it because it does really depend on it anyways thank you author for writing this beautiful magnificent story so far you're doing great and I can't wait to see more in the future to come!
Thank you so much for taking time to write this wonderful review 😊💖 I'm so grateful that you played the game and appreciate your support!
It warms my heart to know that you enjoyed my writing and I'm in awe that you went to choose the different options given. Thank you again and know that your comment made my day! 💖💖💖
irus is a lil shit (affectionate) i adore him
gonna punch virion for being a cockblock too tbh
This is simply wonderful, I fell in love. I can't wait for more.
Thank you so much 😊 I really appreciate you playing the game and I'm so glad you enjoyed it!
Everyone in favor of punching Virion in his slimy backstabbing arrogant dusty musty crusty face, say "I". In other news, Queen Elora is special and beautiful and perfect and I love her.
This is my favorite IF I've come across, ever. I love it so much!
Wow. I didn't know why I hadn't encountered this one till now. I loved what you wrote, and the ROs are all likeable. I do have a few gripes, though... like the interaction between MCs and their family; it was short and abrupt and to the point. I mean, it's hard for me to care much for the mom and especially the dad when there's so little interaction between them.
I also feel like MC's background(from childhood to young adult) seems... lacklustre. Probably because of the dad being a barely active father. It does seem odd though... like the dad wants to be better, yet he was written differently. His behaviour doesn't make sense.
Other than that, everything else seems good. I went for the prince(highest romance points) but flirted with the captain guard whenever I could and noticed a jealousy scene(the outing to the food stalls). Do others also have these jealous scenes? I haven't played other routes hence the question.
Thank you so much for playing! I am currently revising Part 1 (prologue and chapters 1 - 3), so there is a few more scenes with the MC's father. The idea is that the MC's father doesn't know how to be a good father - the curt way he treats the MC is because he doesn't know how to show emotion.
The family scenes are short - because it's written this way. The parents aren't happy-go-lucky parents and Ahlf will never change his ways, regardless of how much he wants to. He's a stoic person and is bad at showing emotions. The scene with the mother is short because of plot reasons- she left the MC and that's the basis of the MC's memories of her. It's more to show that the MC has no choice on how everything happens especially with their parents. The new scenes should give a better read for childhood to teen years since it comes between them.
The others don't have jealousy scenes because it's still too early in the relationship 😊 Either way, Prince Irus is the most jealous and the others aren't really jealous, so there might not be much jealousy scenes with them.
I see. I loved family interactions a lot, and I was pleased to see that there are surviving members of MC's family that she could still interact with(the uncle, grandma, and cousin), hoping there would be more interactions between them. It's why I felt like there should be more interactions between MC and the father, IMO-- regardless of whether the player chose to be antagonistic or wanted the father to be a dad. I guess I could understand regarding the mother part having less interaction.
I could totally see the queen and the captain guard being the least jealous type, though(lol). It would be hard to write jealous scenes for them unless MC does something outrageous 😅
Anyway, I can't wait for the next chapter(and the revision)!
I keep liking it more whenever there's an update. It keeps getting better and make me to get excited for the next update. I keep choosing the queen and I don't know why. She's just so adorable for me. And the prince is more like a best friend type for me ^.^ I don't know maybe because It's too common to be coupled with someone who's the plot or something. Keep up the good work and stay healthy and happy!
Thank you so much for your kind words and I am so happy that you enjoyed the game! I truly appreciate your support 😊 Elora is quite fun to write and I'm happy to see that she's getting love from players. Thank you again for playing!
I have been thoroughly enjoying this story, I discovered it about a month ago and have been looking forward to this latest update. Your writing is amazing and the characters are remarkably well done. The decisions feel like they have real meaning. You are doing remarkable work and I look forward to update 4, it can't come soon enough!
Thank you so much for playing and for your kind words! 😊 I'm so happy to know that you're enjoying the game and the characters and can't wait to share the rest with you. Thank you ❤️️
I absolutely love the update! Thank youuuu. And Sir Oren is just so—AAAAAAH, imma fangirl really hard. Now I have to wait again. I'm gonna busy myself with school works until then T^T.... And perhaps reading those answered asks, too. They're really interesting
Thank you so much for playing and I am so glad you enjoyed the update! Sir Oren is an absolute sweetheart 😂 I'm hoping to start with Chapter 4 in late December (once I finish edits of part 1) so stay tuned 😉
Asbsvdfghdhukshj chapter three did not dissapoint. I love irus and the teasing he does with a shy mc. i can't wait for the next update :))))
Thank you so much! I'm glad you enjoyed it 😊 Irus and a shy MC are my favourite scenes to write. Thank you for playing 🌼
I don't normally like fantasy as a genre, but this is quite well written. But the game somehow assumes the MC is a lot closer to the prince than they are when I play anything other than straight up hostile. The out of character moments are completely bringing me out of the game. I was playing a detached and reserved character who blames the prince for being part of the oppression and murder. But because I didn't choose anything overly emotional, the prince suddenly acts like they're besties once they arrive at Vinia. Which wouldn't be an issue; it'd be fun if he's being presumptuous. But the problem is that the MC acts like it's true. Hoping you'll look into this issue.
Oh, also the issue of choosing not to ask questions and the game treating as if all questions were asked.
Hi, thank you for your comment! Unfortunately, as the game is quite character focussed, I spent most of it writing close reactions with Irus opposed to the hostile relationships. If your relationship is hostile (under 50), it will be coded in when I start edits 😊 So it's not an issue, rather that I didn't code in the necessary hostile reactions because of time constraints.
The dialogue options where it's a link-reveal (you click a link to reveal text) will always be treated as if you've asked them and gotten answers because it's really just a lore/info dump that is necessary for the plot but also can be skipped for replays. So if there's a link with 'End your questions' it means that it's assumed you've asked those questions. However, if this happens elsewhere, please let me know 🙂
i'm fond of all the characters, while i'm not entirely interested in romancing Oren or Irus (cos i'm very sapphic) i really liked them as friends and characters, i also am crushing hardcore on Elora so i'm excited to see where this goes ^_^
I'm really glad you enjoyed the characters and I'm really happy to know that Elora is getting some love 😊 I am also planning on a fourth female RO who will be introduced in Chapter 4, so stay tuned 👀 Thank you playing! 💖
Literally decided to just go to work late because I was so enraptured by the novel. CAN'T WAIT FOR THE UPDATE!!!! thank you so much for this wonderful piece of work.
Thank you so much for playing and I am so glad you enjoyed it! 💖😊 I hope you didn't get too late for work! 😅
Heh, I was 10 minutes late, but it was so worth it. Thinking of this novel brought a smile to face every time during work.
Just finished Chapter 3, it's soo good!! Can't wait to see what happens next :))
aGGHH just saw the pages new redesign, and it's really gooood! Can't wait for the upcoming chapter!
So glad you liked it! I decided to redo the art style since the game's already nearing the end of Part 1. The new chapter will be put in a few more hours 😊
Love the updated visuals of the page! Really beautiful, elegant and royal!
Thank you so much! I'm glad you like them 😊I figured the game needed a face lift since Part One is coming to an end.
Omg this game is so good. i cant wait for mor
Thank you so much! Currently Chapter 3 is being tested and should be available to the public in a week or so 😊
hi there, i started playing the game (lovely by the way! I'm really enjoying it) but i've run into a problem: I cannot get back to the story once I go to one of the other tabs (bio, characters, relationships etc.)? I've made a screen recording (that I sadly can't upload along with this comment, so is there any way I can forward it to you?) to show you I literally cannot go back without restarting (because yes, I was stupid enough to not save anything yet)
Hi there! This hasn't been a problem mentioned by any other player so I'm not sure what the issue is. If the return link doesn't work, the back button on the left side bar should do the same without any issue. You can try send your recording to me through my Tumblr, though it might be a browser issue because I've tested it and my play testers have also tested the return button and it worked fine.
SOOO AMAZING!! I have spent my saturday just reading this story for hours, and I must confess, I am absolutely in love with Irus. I mean, how can I not?? Really heartbreaking what happened to the main characters family, but after finishing chapter 2 it seems like it's going to hopefully be okay, since they are not alone anymore! I have also read The Hedge Witch, which is how I found this story, and I am so glad I did, because this brilliant story is my favorite now! I am now going to wait patiently for chapter 3!
Thank you so much! It means a lot to know that you enjoyed the game and I cannot believe that you actually spent hours playing the game 💖Your support means so much to me so thank you 😊 I'm happy that you liked Irus, he is my favourite character to write, so I'm glad to know you enjoyed reading his character. You might things are about to be fine but think again 😅I should have Chapter 3 posted by the end of October, if all goes well. Thank you again for your lovely comment 💖💖
This is so cute. I love Irus even though I aint gay. Playing a shy female character and its way too cute Love the story too. So sad what the MC has to go trough. I cant wait to play more! Thank you for the this gem!
Thank you so much for playing and I'm really happy to know you enjoyed it 😊 💖 Irus is fast becoming a crowd favourite 😅 Thank you for your support 🤗
Irus has my whole heart, and yes I reread the whole thing again coz it’s quite interesting!
Hi, I'm really loving this so far (especially Irus!), but is there any chance you could add flirt options for an MC who is more stoic? My male MC is stoic/acerbic and intro but confident and 'unwillingly' attracted to the Ro/s, but the existing flirting options always feel really out of character for him - the shy/intro flirt (he's not shy), or the flirtatious/brazen flirt (he's not flirtatious) - when often the more 'denying how I feel' or 'deliberately being an unpleasant ass because I really hate how I'm unexpectedly feeling right now' option which would suit him better is not a flirt and gives friendship/normal responses. I realise this may be asking a lot, but is there a chance an additional 'flirt' option could be added to accommodate a character who shows their interested in a less obvious way (like, instead of blushing they get annoyed or snippy), with the RO/s catching on and teasing it out of the MC in their own way?
Also, how tall is the prince? because there is a moment where it mentions him tipping my MC's chin up to look in his eyes (when I tried a shy flirt) and I have my MC's height set to 'very tall'.
Thank you so much for playing 😊 I do realise that the flirt options are lacking in the variations of choices - I just went with shy/flirty choices because they were the easiest to start off with and write. I do hope to add more variations to the flirting choices when the first draft of the game is completed, since I also know others want a friendly flirt option as well 🙂 this is simply because of coding and writing the different variations would take up a bit more time and I hope to finish the first draft before going back to polish up and add in variation scenes.
Do keep in mind though that you don't need to flirt with the ROs to gain romance points. You will be given clear choices of who you like (like at the end of chapter 2) and that, combined with your friendship stat will determine the outcome of pursuing a romance 🙂
Irus in game height is the tall option, so even though he and MC might both be tall, Irus will still be slightly taller than them by a few centimetres at most 😊
Thanks for replying! I'm really glad to hear you're considering offering some more flirt options for MC's with different dispositions.
I felt my MC was quite naturally guided into the stoic & confident personality, chiefly because of the whole growing up alienated by everyone in the village and never really 'clicking' with his dad (both of them having personalities that are not the easiest to get along with), but having a strong survival instinct and having no one else to really lean on, trusted in himself (and yeah, he's lonely af, but he buries that deep deep down under many layers of denial). It ended up fostering an MC who knew what they wanted (at least goal-wise) but was really not used to dealing with being interested in someone romantically, and being completely out of his depth if/when someone actually showed an interest in him, so naturally diverted to what he was comfortable with: acting like a stoic/cold b*stard. The sort of guy who seems like he'd rather be anywhere else but beside the RO, and yet the next minute would risk his life for them (cos deep down he's just relieved he's not alone, and that the RO hasn't already left his sorry ass, but he's kind of socially stunted and way too afraid of being vulnerable and hurt to admit how he feels). ANYWAY...
As you can probably tell, I got quite invested in this story thus far, hence why I thought I'd ask if a 'stoic/unflirty' flirt could be added. On that topic, I also really love me some sexual tension ramping up between characters, particularly when one (or both) are unwilling to admit how they feel/what they want. That's always fun to read!
Since posting my last message I also tried out Oren and the Queen, and they both seem really interesting so far, too. The sparring session with Oren was great! I'm looking forward to finding out more about both of them and pursuing them in parallel playthroughs in future. :)
Good luck with the game going forward!
I really want players to be able to play a character they feel most comfortable with 😊 Thank you for letting me know more about your MC, because it really helps when coming up with choices in game.
Once chapter 3 is completed and updated, I will be revising the first 3 chapters again and hopefully will add in the flirt options for a more stoic MC 🙂 Thank you again for being so detailed with your feedback 🌼💖
Thank you for playing and being so supportive! I really appreciate it 😊
Thank you so much for playing! I appreciate your support and am so happy to know you enjoyed the game ❤️️😊
im ded i didnt know Irus would be playful and teased the mc a lot asdahksdkd im loving this. Its so fun seeing their interaction in chap 2 esp with the mc fam omg Irus go full on good boy with grandma so cute AAAAAAAa
Irus is just killing my character with embarrassment
In a good way, I hope? 😂
Love the game so far, you've already got me hooked ;)
Can't wait to see what you do with this <3
There is an error in the scene where Irus bandages your injury. The last two options (drawing your hand away or snatching your hand away) both lead to the same scene, intended for snatching your hand away.
Thanks for letting me know! I might have forgotten to change the scene when coding. I'll definitely check it out 👍
Small bug: When in Dark Mode, every entry in the Codex save for Salt Bay is still in black text, rather than the white text used elsewhere. Salt Bay displays properly, but Ishari, The Blood Guard, and The Ancient Ones all have black text for the entries themselves - difficult to read on a dark background.
Latest update is great! Wonderful writing, and excited to see where things go next.
Thank you for letting me know! I had completely forgotten about the text colour when changing to dark mode. I'll definitely fix that 👍
Thank you for playing and I'm glad you enjoyed it 😊
Loved it!! I'm excited for the next part hopefully they'll already be meeting with Queen Elora. ^^)
Thanks for playing and your kind words 🤗 You'll definitely be meeting Queen Elora as well as Sir Oren in chapter two.
Thank you for playing 😊 I will be going back to add in more options for the MC to feel more than just one emotion.
Very good - quite enjoyed what's available so far. One thing I noticed in particular with a lot of the 'choose your emotional reaction' segments, though: All of the options are single, unified responses. What I mean by that is that there doesn't seem to be any with two emotions or an emotional conflict - despite the situation being very complicated and the MC at the time being a child. It seems like it would be normal to be both scared of a newly introduced father as well as to want to get to know him - or to be hurt/sad and resentful at the ostracization brought on by the townsfolk - etc. I understand that would add a lot of writing to put all variations of that in, but just something that stood out to me.
Hi there, thanks for playing 😊 I do understand what you mean and these are really good suggestions. I probably will go back and add in extra options for two or more emotions once the first draft of the game is complete. Thanks again for pointing it out!
The one thing critique I would give it, is that the background is not mobile friendly with how similar the font color is to it. It could be just my phone not wanting to completely load everything. Don't get me wrong, I'm still trying to read it by highlighting the words, but with bad eyes it's hard to read. Maybe have an option to switch to a dark mode, or darken the font a bit, if it is possible. I will refresh my phone to see if anything loads more.
Hmm that sounds a bit odd. The background colour is white and I've added in a plain white background, if the background image doesn't work. The regular font is black, with only the links being a yellow/gold colour. If you could let me know what colour the font is - is it showing up a different colour or is it the gold colour that's hard to see? On my end, it works as it should.
I will try adding in a dark mode - my coding skills is still a little lacking, so I'll do my best 🙂
For me the font color is like an off white, and is almost blending in with the white background. There's nothing stopping me from reading this when I can get to the library with my laptop, so there's no rush. I just need to take into consideration that I'm having troubles with my cellphone provider ever sense they switched to a 5G network earlier this year. Things are probably not loading correctly because of it.
Thanks for letting me know 😊I did test it out on my phone and it worked fine, but I will be adding a dark theme just to be on the safe side, especially if other players have the same issue as you. Hopefully, with the next update, I should have a working dark theme so you'll be able to play from your phone.
i really like the story so far ! can’t wait to see where it goes
really good so far! keep it up ^^
I'm already in love with this! I'm buzzing with excitement, eager to see where this leads.