Definitely one of the best IF's I've ever played! I've been hooked on it for the past couple of days, and while it is unfortunate that the public demo only extends to Chapter 8, I'm looking forward to seeing how the rest of the chapters turn out!
(Yap session below, read at your own expense 🙂 )
As I stated previously, this is one of the IF's I've ever played! Everything, from the plot, to the music, and the writing was done to a T! I loved the descriptive words, and it was clear that you put a ton of effort into this IF, it puts most others on this website to shame.
As far as the characters (companions in specific) go, I absolutely loved their personalities, and I was conflicted as to who I should romance (at least in the early chapters, 3-4 I believe), since I liked Iri, Sir Oren, and Ellie, both as romance options and characters! (Iri my beloved 😇 I didn't have it in me to flirt with all three, it felt wrong 😭)
I could honestly go on and on about everything that I liked about the game, but if I did, this comment would probably take up half the page. But it was worth every hour of my time, and I hope that I'll be able to buy the full game when it gets released! You're a great author, and I hope nothing but the best for you!
Thank you so much for your lovely comment! I'm so happy you enjoyed what was available to play in the public demo. I'm already working on Chapter 11 out of 12, so hopefully the full game will be available in the next year or so.
I'm so pleased you enjoyed the writing! I've always enjoyed fantasy and political stories but I was afraid of writing my own, so this was a leap of faith for me. It helps that I love ancient history so research wasn't as boring as some might think. I think Irus has always been a fan favourite and he continues to be a fan favourite. I love him to bits so it's good to know you do too! And I'm happy you enjoyed the different personalities of the ROs.
Thank you again for playing and if you ever have any questions, comments or feedback, feel free to reach out here or through my Tumblr.
Loved this story, Saw the fact that chap8 is the last free one and was wondering. How close is the game to completion and how much will it eventually be?
Thank you! I've just completed the first draft of Chapter 10, so I'll say with edits, it'll be released by the end of 2025 or in early 2026. I don't know how much the full game will be until I finalise everything but it'll likely between $10 - $12.
I've never been as addicted to an IF as I was to this one. I'm truly obsessed. Irus has my heart ❤️.
About our mother, I just can't swallow what she does. I mean, no visits? She may have sent letters and everything, but like, how about you show up for your son maybe?? She had enough time to start another family, it's not possible that she didn't have time to give us some sign. I'm not going to blame my stepsister or my mother's husband, after all they had nothing to do with her decision not to look for us. My sister is lovely and my mother's husband seems like a nice person, so I can have a friendly relationship with him. But honestly I don't see myself forgiving my mother, like, you haven't looked for me this whole time but you want me to be completely open now that you've shown up? No, I feel too frustrated just thinking about it. Besides, if I can't accept this, I wonder what will happen to our uncle, cousin, and grandmother. They all still think about her, but she never gave them a single sign. Anyway, I'm just really frustrated with her haha, mainly because she doesn't seem to accept Irus very much, and if she says something against it, then we're really going to have problems 🗣️.
I saw that the public demo will no longer be updated until the IF is completed. Unfortunately I can't pay the patreon to read more, so I'll have to be patient until the completion 🙏. Which makes me wonder if you have already decided how many chapters IF will have? I would really like to know that. I really loved the story, the characters, just everything. I wish you much success and please continue creating more IFs, you are very talented.
Thank you so much for playing and I'm glad you're enjoying the game 💖
Salyra disapproves the most of Irus and Elora as romance options for the MC just because she sees them as bad 😅 The Vinia family do reappear and make their views clear so you'll get to see that in the full game.
The game will eventually only be available on Steam so expect a post on that sooner to its completion. There will be twelve chapters in total, excluding the prologue and epilogue. Even if you can't join my Patreon, you can always follow my Tumblr for updates and more information.
Art is already commissioned and has been changed in the Patreon demo and on my Tumblr main post. I'll only update the public demo and page once I put up the edited and revised demo before the game's release.
A very well thought out plot. I am pleased to know that the female ROs have a similar level of depth in them as the male ones. With so many otome games filling up this genre, I was apprehensive at first. It still saddens me that the 2nd female RO was very late in her appearance, and I had to spend my time stuck with 2 dudes, with Elora as the only exit lol. But I appreciate the game regardless.
One more thing I liked that you didn't force us to reconcile with Salyra as a good old protagonist. She's a hypocrite and I enjoyed tormenting her. I liked the morally ambiguous Dena as well.
As others have pointed out, a breakup system would be good if you decide to put it on. I liked my grandmother's family too, she was quite supportive :). Thanks for writing this game, Ramona. I was saddened when it ended, and I look forward for more :D.
Thank you for playing and leaving a comment! Originally, only Irus and Elora were going to be ROs but then it spiralled out of control 😅 Anu is part of the main plot, so while her appearance is late, I wasn't going to add a female RO just to add another female RO. Hopefully Dena's extended scenes in the prologue makes up for it.
I don't think I'll be implementing a break-up system because of the amount of extra work it would take and it would mean more variations and scenes that don't affect the plot of the game. The game takes place over a few months and ends after the conclusion of the war so if you do choose to break up with someone, it'll come up in the epilogue but not before that. And since this is a stand-alone game, it's not going to play out in future plots.
I still haven't decided if I'm going to add break-ups to the game because it requires extra flavour text and dialogue. At the moment, it'll probably be that only if you're single, you can be with Dena when you meet again so stay single for now 😅
Staying single for chapters on end for my childhood crush... easier said than done, but I'll do it... Thank you for your response, Ramona! Excited to hold out for him upon release.
You're welcome 💖 I'll be adding romance interactions with Dena and expanding the scenes from the prologue so hopefully the single life won't be too long or painful for your MC 😅
When i first played the game i didn't look at who the ROs are so when Dena came i was like yep They are the one
But then i somehow ended up romancing Elora... And when i saw That Dena is back well, gotta stay loyal but that still won't stop me from romancing Dena in another save when the full game is out
I am thrilled to have found this game, and I am eagerly awaiting the finished product! (And Dena's route!) Found some typos that I will submit to the form.
Thank you so much! Im happy you're enjoying the game 💖 Based on my current pace of writing, I'm hopeful to have the full game finished by the end of next year so keep a look out for announcements 😊
Thank you so much! I'm still working on the game at the moment but I hope to have everything ready by next year. Do follow my Tumblr if you want updates.
May I ask Ramona something? Has the queen Elora had a lover before? And who took the queen Elora's first time? If it's not both, then she gave her first time to the main character? I'm really curious And would like to know the answer. I don't really like the main character's wife having her first time with someone else, But I will accept with the answer I received if possible.
Who would be that lucky? Don't tell me its MC's cousin....I will not accept that answer. I wouldn't buy the game if it was that bad. I can't accept that her first time isn't the main character. I've read more than 1000 manhua(Chinese manga) and it's not strange if I didn't accept.
Queen Erola didn't say it was her first time and said to MC "you could have spent your first time with anyone" Which makes me even more curious. Plus, it was easy to insert without pain. Or is the main character's thing too small? If the answer I get is that her first time is MC. I will definitely buy the full game just for Queen Erola. If I get an answer that would be great.
It was not Queen Flora's first time. She's has casual lovers before. To hold something like that against a character seems rather superficial. Everyone has a past and Elora wasn't going to wait around for the MC who she only met a few months before the game started. There is NOTHING romantic between Zikar and Elora so no need to stress 😅
Thank you. I just wonder how someone like Queen Erola could have a lover in the past. And there are still doubt about how they broke up. And who is that person and where has he gone.
she never mentioned it. But it's okay anyway.
I might read too much xianxia novels😅
I must be a little....Too tired and sleepy from work That is why I wrote this comment about the Queen Elora without thinking at all. I usually think more than 30 times before doing something.
After waking up I wanted to delete the comment but you had already read it.
I will not visit itch io after returning from work again Before doing something pointless or nonsense in comment section😅
This is my Last Comment. Let's be honest, the love story between the MC's mother and her new husband is very trash. The reason she loves him because he's different from everyone else, that's all. makes me think of the anime named "Erased"
But in this game, the MC's father betrays his country, betrays everyone, Sacrificed everything, for her alone. and what her new husband does is just different from everyone else....WTF! Poor MC's father. MC's father didn't deserve that. He deserve better. I include our MC.
Danzor was an Ishari warrior and he knew Salyra as children - plus they had a relationship before Salyra met Ahlf. The circumstances surrounding Ahlf and Salyra's love story is questionsble at best but I wont spoil anything since it comes up in later chapters depending on your choices 😉
"I will miss you dearly," Mama whispers. "I will pray to Ehulla to guide you safely on your journey, Rubari." You open your mouth to respond, but Mama turns away first.
Not even a single comfort. There should be an option to say "You are so busy feeling guilty and sadness that you forget that I am suffering too. You keep thinking that you sacrificed so much to protect me but you forget that I also suffer. You never think about the consequences of your actions, even though every action you take only makes things worse. " I want to know how his mother will react.
She always walks away from our MC, There wasn't even any comfort. She often acts sad after the MC tells the truth About how much her actions affected him. Everything she did is to protect MC? Everything she did to the MC just made the MC suffer, so what now? He still had to fight against what his mother was trying to fight. Everything that the MC's mother does is in vain. All in order to leave the MC and go have a new family. I, who played the main character, did not accept her new husband. I really wanted the MC's mother to feel more and more guilty Until she regrets all her choices and all her actions. She shouldn't have a new family. That's what our MC wants.
Salyra is a complicated character with narcissistic tendencies so you're never going to get that satisfying comeback in the early chapters of meeting her. She's not someone who will sit idly by and take criticism but is very good at dishing it out. You're not going to get the closure you might want with her route - she is a bad/ggood mother depending on your playthrough 😅
"She was a blessing when everything seemed terrible," Danzor murmurs. "We are grateful to have had Rana." -Chapter 7 Do you think I'm stupid? How many times have you explode inside my mama? I guess he had too much fun with the MC's mama and forgot about protection or explode outside😂 The main character also says "A blessing?" you scoff. "There is nothing miraculous about bedding each other."" -Chapter 7 and I agreed with Rubari. I'm beginning to not be sure if I can continue to trust Mama.
It should be made into a meme on reddit if there's a community for this game out there.
May I ask who the woman on the cover is? if she is a character in this game, who is she? Can someone please tell me which game she is from? And what is her name? The visual style reminds me of a lot of games.
It would have been better if there had been a picture of the main character standing alone among hundreds of corpses with his back to the camera, showing the character who had been through a lot. Along with a picture of him as an innocent and happy 5 year old, he was happy with his mother. Compare with the first picture. You will see a lot of character development and more clarity. "this is the masterpiece" The cover of the game is very well made and fits the story perfectly. I never thought I'd find a good game like this.
Thank you! I trued to make the character as gender-neutral as possible so that all players could imagine that the character on the cover is them. It's supposed to represent the end war scenes of the game's conclusion 😊
My first thought when I found out that Mama already move on:
"I'll burn this planet down." along with music "Me and The Devil. Walking side by side🎶" I rate this game 11/10. I accidentally pressed in this game. who would have thought that I would end up with a masterpiece? I was so enjoying the story that I forgot to look at the time.
This Game is The Masterpiece(Every game I like is a masterpiece lol.)
If you can make your readers Shedding tears, you've succeeded. "So much has happened in the years that you have been apart. The woman you thought you knew as a child is not the woman you know now." -from Chapter 6 and I Agreed. I was so angry that no matter what, I had to choose the option of severing ties with Rubari's mother and living with the queen (future wife). It would be better not to mess with a mother who forgets her own child. Rubari is no longer the same person as the 5 yo kid from that day. He is no longer the same as he was then. He's been through a lot. the character development was great. And the character with no development is trash but This game has only good characters, especially Rubari. I hope he can fight 100 people by himself in the future Because the MC has enough or too much potential in many paths, such as being a great swordsman. There are very few options for practicing swordmanship skills. But at least The MC got to spend time with the Queen.
His greatest feats:
1. He almost single-handedly defeated the trained Blood Guard with no experience.
2. Have a child with the queen (Soon) hehhe
3. Nothing, because the main character is too weak to receive the 3rd achievement. If he can't protect himself, how can he protect the people he loves? haha.
Thank you for your long comment and for your feedback! Im so happy you enjoyed the game, even in its draft, unfinished state 😊 Combat scenes are possibly the hardest thing for me to write since I just don't like them and there's only so many ways to describe a fight without wanting to hide under a rock somewhere 😅
I'm working on getting better at them but it's something that will be refined during edits so for now, the scenes aren't going to be fleshed out.
There won't be children or weddings in the full game - that's not the scope of the game but expect DLCs on the wedding and children for each romance route.
Try unlocking your divinity if you really want some cool, glowing eyes 👀
was thinking of supporting you and the game on patreon, but i have some questions:
will talking about the 5€ tier
1.) are the once-a-month sidestories retroactive avaiable? so will i have access to all past stories if i support now?
2.) commisions are like: you ask an artist for something & pay, then the artist deliever, right? if so, what does early access mean in that context?
im sure you hear it enough, but it still amazes me how captivating your writing is. last time i played was when chapter 8 was released, and 1.) im sure i could roughly retell the story from memory and 2.) can still "conjure up" the hate i had towards the mother of MC.
The $5 tier gives you early access to new scenes of the demo when they're available, one NPC side story and one RO side story, as well as sneak peeks and the ability to vote in polls on decisions for the game.
1. Yes, all rewards/benefits are automatically retroactive on Patreon. If you join, you get access to everything from the very first thing that was posted for the tier you join.
2. Early access means you get access to the demo when it's available. Because you're not only paying for the demo - sometimes there won't be updates in a month due to the size and time it takes to write and code the demo, you'll only get access to the side stories and sneak peeks. I'm a writer, not an artist, so this isn't a commission type of benefit, it's an early access to the demo when it is available to play. Because the demo isn't going to be shared with the public until its final release on Steam, early access in this case means you're getting to play the game's scenes in development up until the epilogue.
just finished all the current chapters and i definitely enjoyed it! i can say the strained relationship dynamic between the MC and our mother hit CLOSE to home so i could relate.
Thank you so much and I'm so happy to know you enjoyed what's available to play 😊💖 I'm glad you were able to relate to the strained family dynamics! It's something that comes out throughout the game. Thanks again for playing!
In the first 7 chapters i was wondering: Are we ever going to meet D (I will call em D cause the gender can be different for some players) ? And when we did my reaction was just 😲(Wha-) 😀(D!!!) 😯 (Wait what I wasn't expecting them to appear-) 😀 (But I'm happy for that)🤨 (Wait so D Is actually beck for some time?!)😁jsijwjdh (awesome)
also i knew i would get addicted to this game, the writing, character, drama! Love it so much, I want to play more but sadly i can't download the game. It was fun playing the 1st chapters tho, Maybe in soms years i will come upon this game again and download it since the plot is fascinating and the characters are well made :)
Ah thank you for playing! Dena's name remains the same regardless of gender so no need for spoilers 😋 The public demo only goes up to Chapter 8 and the current Patreon demo is on the beginning of Chapter 10. There will be a download link when the full game is released on Steam. Thank you for playing and for your support!
Irus has me in a chokehold, and I love playing shy mc's so.. its a win for me. Can't wait for it to be finished. I'll be eagerly waiting. Irus supremacy!
I love this game! Congratulations on the fabulous work! It's incredible, I just have a few suggestions: please, in the next updates, try to make Salyra have more affection for her son. I feel like she still leaves him a little aside, for example at the mother and son reunion, she greets him, but then says goodbye saying that her other family needs her, however, and about the eldest son who she hasn't seen in a long time. TWO DECADES? He also needed her due to the shock and so many years of absence. I feel there is different treatment on Salyra and Amma's part between Rana and MC. It will never be Rana's fault, she is just an innocent child. But let's try to make Salyra redeem herself even more (she owes it to the MC) and treat her son better, of course I noticed that she loves him, but there are still loose ends. Obviously, these are not suggestions of mandatory choices, just a path of choices. Let's try to save Sal and her son's relationship. And please, make Salyra forget Danzor a little and focus more on her son. I emphasize, it is just a path that can be followed, nothing mandatory. My MC is male. Sorry, my English isn't the best. BUT SERIOUSLY, PLEASE CONTINUE THIS AMAZING WORK, I LOVE IT. I'M A FAN!
But, of course, these are just suggestions and opinions. It's only up to you as the author of this incredible work to decide how to proceed with the next updates :)
Hi, thank you so much for playing ❤ Unfortunately, there will be no update for the public demo. The game will only available once it's completed. My Patreon continues to receive new chapters but these are still not the edited version which will (eventually) be available on Steam.
Salyra's responses are who she is as a character. Adding more affection or love removes that part of her character and will be a completely different story. I didn't set out to write a happy family with lots of love and emotional maturity so I'm afraid, she won't change very much. Some people just don't change in real life and that's true for Salyra.
None of the parental figures are going to change - especially when they're not parents of the year 😅 If you've hoped for an emotionally distant/emotionally constipated parent to be more loving, you'll know it doesn't just happen (it sometimes rarely happens).
No way I can forgive her! She abandoned us! At first I was hopeful and looking forward to find her and reunite, but seeing what she has been doing this whole time really set me off. TWENTY YEARS. And all that time I could have been chilling in Vinia?? Maybe visiting pops at his cozy little cottage in sleepy Salt Bay every now and then?!
*sigh* i don't get why the mom nvr even sent someone to check on us? In 15 hears? Couldn't she have at least hired someone like lord randall to check? Or maybe at least a clear apology and admitting she must have left her to an aweful childhood? Or at least that she fcked up?
She received Ahlf's letters which told her the MC is fine and better off in Cyre. She also couldn't up and leave Ishari while Erlan was alive because he would have likely killed her for plot reasons that will be revealed in Part 4 😋 Still, you're free to feel upset about her lack of visits etc. She's by no means a perfect mother.
No i get that i just meant even cps has welfare checks beyond what the parents fill out in a form...i don't think salyra could have visited but if someone is like"sure ur kids fine no u can't talk to them" like kids die that way all the time, my grandmother does social work with foster children and adoption. Also hiring someone to check wouldn't have put her at risk would it? The hired person wouldn't even have to make contact...but point taken i guess...
Unfortunately, we're about 1-2 years from it's full completion 😅 Chapter 9 is available to play on my Patreon, but there's still three more chapters and an epilogue to go and the average word count per chapter has been steadily increasing the closer to the end of the game so expect a bit of a wait.
Since the main game ends after the conclusion of the plot, there wouldn't really be a look towards what happens after so I thought a wedding DLC would be nice to have 😊
(First of all, English isn't my first language, so some things might be worded the wrong way!)
I cannot put into words how much I like this game. The MC is so well-written, and there are so many choices to choose from. You can be bold or shy, downright spiteful and rude or openly kind and caring. The four love interests are also very diverse (Irus, the prince, Elora, the queen, sir Oren, and Anu). Everyone shares different qualities, Irus is cocky and almost arrogant at first, maybe just a bit more distant. Queen Elora isn't afraid to use us if it benefits our kingdom, but she still has a kind side to her. Sir Oren is probably my favourite, mostly because of his love and care for children, and the way he turns shy when you're bold with him! And Anu, of course. She started opening up kind of quickly with me, and I really enjoyed interacting with her.
And our parents. Oh my god, the rage I felt when I found out that Salyra only had us with Alf to stop the war. Not only was that stupid, but she didn't even think about the child after she left us with Alf. How did girl as an Ishari even pull a blood guard? 😦
And I have one question as well. Is it possible to sleep with Sir Oren? I know that Queen Elora and Prince Irus have steamt scenes, but I played through Sir Oren's route, but I havent been able to get those scenes.
Thank you so much for playing the game! 😊 And your English is fine, so don't worry about it.
I'm really glad you're enjoying the main gang so far! I tried to make them as different from each other as I could without making them too cliché with their roles so it means a lot that you're enjoying them. Anu mostly hates Irus, so she has no issue with becoming friends with the MC – especially after learning that tge MC is Salyra's child.
There's a separate Patreon side story that explains everything between Ahlf and Salyra's relationship. There's one on how they met, one on how they got together and even a few on them raising the MC. Their story isn't really explored in the game because like the MC, players will be left trying to find answers to something no one wants to answer.
All ROs (including Dena) will have steamy scenes. Oren is a slowburn romance – it takes him a while before he feels comfortable enough to want a relationship with the MC and once you get his lock-in point (Chapter 10), expect some steamy scenes 😋
….yup. Called it. lol The moment I saw Queen Elora in the RO list, I knew she would be the one my baby character ended up with. Gorgeous AND crafty/intelligent — with the possibility of manipulating my MC for the good of her Kingdom? Say. Less.
Cue: me finishing demo, and Ellie is my Entire short wife. What can I say - I know my type. (Also - not to be vulgar - but I freakin CHEERED seeing you write intimate/steamy scenes WELL. That is a GIFT, my friend. No one wants to wait 50 chapters ‘will they/won’t they’ only to get *fart noise* of a first time. Well done.)
But I have to give you more flowers: Not only for making an awesome character like Elora - but depth-filled characters in general. They could easily all be stereotypes; but you really do well at showcasing what makes them who they are (even if they’re awful people). Your work on the MC is my favorite though. I think a tragic main is nothing new at this point — but what sets yours apart are the choices for how the MC can feel about it. And you actually have them Explore their trauma (if they have it - mine certainly does), like: ‘oh crap - maybe I’m not okay…’
More kudos: You got me to play a (primarily) shy girlie — which does Not happen. I usually roll confident/flirty female MCs because I feel there’s still a dearth there compared to BLWUSHY ‘aah’types (nothing against that - just not my style) — that actually made a Lot of sense with a character who basically had Zero interactions with her own age group/everyone hates her. So — of course she doesn’t know how to flirt and ‘oh my goodness - this Queen is grabbing my wrist’. Needless to say: there was a Lot of gay panic and I really enjoyed it. (P.S.: every time Elora grins an Angel gets its wings.)
Gushing aside, this was a great rough draft and I’m really excited to see the final product~ ❤️
Thank you so much for playing and I'm so happy you're enjoying Ellie 😊💖
It means a lot that you enjoyed the steamy scenes! I'm no stranger to writing them in novels but interactive fiction is a bit different 😅 I'm hoping to expand the steamy scenes in the full game for extra interactions so hopefully they'll be even better when it's done. I hate slowburn romances – they're fine when done well but gosh, I just want to smooch an RO before the end of the game so I knew I wasn't going to leave the smut/romance for too late.
It really makes me so pleased that you're enjoying the characters and their flaws! I love tragic characters and I really enjoy complicated family dynamics, so it was fun to include them in the game and especially explore the relationships with the MC and all the weight they have to carry because of everything that's happened to them.
Please do give a flirty MC a try! Ellie tends to blush a bit around a bolder MC 😋 I'm glad you liked the shy flirt options though 💖
Thank you again for playing! There's so much still to be added and expanded for the main game but I'll soon be working on Chapter 10 so only 3 more chapters and an epilogue left to go before edits 🎉
uhm - thank you for Creating it! Elora is all my current obsession. (That, and when I can actually call her ‘Ellie’) *stares and sips tea*
I don’t hate slow burns(done well — agree) — but I feel Great characters should make out when they wanna make out and bed when they wanna bed. I know when I write, I’ll have a general plan for romance progression - but rarely do babies not interrupt my plans/I don’t allow it. What *does* drive me crazy is: constant interrupts/delay tactic. Bless you didn’t go that route. And Bless for expanded steamy. 😏 Who am I to stop you if you wanna add round twos, threes, and so forth~? Srsly tho: Ellie’s foreplay game is: MMM. When she started by offering a drink - I was Screaming
Gimme all the flawed. I actually RP my Rubi as kind/genuine - but oof! She a TEMPER. Such a fun dynamic. And she’ll call a B out. (one of my favorite bits is garden scene where there’s so many ways to claim Queenie a hypocrite. I ADORE MCs standing up to RO - we can Disagree and still Smash, darnit!!!) But yes. Flawed. Was trying to avoid spoilers, but. Mother. oh, Mother… 👀
Oh - I’ve given everything with Ellie a try. ;) …except for not bowing - that just rood. lol Admittedly a lot of the flirtier options just don’t fit MC’s past, to me. Not that some don’t sneak in there: It’s great to actually roleplay a MC getting more confident as time goes on. But! Credit where due: there's also a shy choice that made Ellie blush and it was such a fun surprise! As much as I love a BOLD blush, one where she’s flustered from pure sincerity is Everythiiiiiing
Amazed such great progress is being made - but please make sure not to burn out! I (and so many others) will be rooting for you along the way! 🎉
You might find the MC will have some experience (not the bedding kind but definitely young love kind) once the prologue is expanded and Dena's route gets a fully fleshed-out romance 😚 Thank you again for your support! I do make sure to take breaks on the weekends so (touch wood), there's been no burn-out so far.
I might be unintentionally spoiling things, so maybe, just in case, steer clear if you don't like spoilers!
It's a really great story! I'm still in the middle of it, but I love that there are a lot of romantic choices to choose from, like being proactive or passive when flirting and whether you want it hot or just heart-warming lol. When finally choosing an RO to pursue, I also love that there's an option to have a chaste relationship. Also, it seems that the RO and MC sometimes don't care if they're in public when flirting lmao. Sometimes I'm just like: Get a room you lovebirds!
Then, there's the MC's stats. I wonder if they have any effect on the story. I made my MC an all-rounder and to me, the stats are pretty high, with the lowest at 60. Yet, it seems like the stats have little to no effect on the story. For example, during battle, MC's skill doesn't reflect their high might stat much.
I also noticed that there are inconsistencies with pronouns here and there. For example, I set Dena's gender as female but sometimes, she's referred to as he.
Edit: "You shudder as her fingers trace over your skin; eliciting goose pimples in their wake."
Sorry, but why not goosebumps instead?🤣 It kind of made me laugh a bit🤣😭😭 The choice of words makes me curious😭
Thank you for playing and I'm glad you're enjoying it so far 😊
The stats don't play a huge role on the game. In hindsight, if I could go back, I'd have removed them entirely 😅 This is still a very rough draft so expect the variations to be polished and added once I start with edits of the full game. That's when the stats will offer better variations.
Goose pimples is what I use - it's a synonym for goosebumps. It's more a UK-English style of saying it (I write in UK-English) and I also hate how modern/urban-fiction goosebumps sounds which clashes with the high fantasy vibe of the game 😆
Haven't played this story in a few months and I've been playing it all day today (still haven't done all routes yet lol). Will definitely be buying it as soon as it releases! I must see where it goes with Dena! 😂💕
(Also, still haven't forgiven the mother yet, even after all this time. 😤)
I'm so happy you're enjoying it! It means a lot that you're willing to buy the full game especially since this is still a very rough draft with missing content that'll be added in the complete version. You'll probably hate Salyra more further into the chapters 👀
Ooh I knew she couldn't be trusted!😑IMHO, it is a very good rough draft. It was satisfying and left me wanting more. And I forgot it had missing content! I cannot wait to see what they are!
A lot are scenes I never had time to add during the rough draft, so there'll be additional scenes (like exploring the Southern Islands in chapter 8), extended dialogue scenes and additional choices implemented. In the rough draft, you'll always succeed in gaining Dena's support but the final version will have a failure outcome so you'll get Dena's limited support which will have consequences on the end game states 😊
Is it just me or does anyone feel that the mother is planning something evil or just being one of those hidden main antagonist, because no matter how I look at the mother, her character, personality is just completely puzzling for a example the mother claims to fight for a peaceful coexistense between the Ishari and Cyre but did not question the command of the "Ancient Ones" telling her to break the engagement between the princess of Ishari and the late king of Cyre which if occured would have resulted in doom for the Ishari and which still happened due to the war, the MC is in and now this is the confusing part, why did she have the MC with a Cyre man and not just a ordinary Cyre but one that is used to be the general of the bloodguards, a very high posistion in Cyre and one that is the equivalent to the mother status as high priestess, since both gives them right to stand atleast equal with the king and queen of they kingdom, so doesn't this seem too strange or weird especially she mention in a letter to the family in vinia that she has found a way to end the war, like lets be honest the mother has no love for foreigners as I have seen when she for no reason at all turn hostile on Elora the heir to vinia for just checking on the MC, it would have made sense if the hostility was shown towards to Anu for letting us to touch the divine weapon or Irus due to his aethist nature but this does not happen from what I have seen so far and she only directs such anger towards Elora whose nation practically respresent the mother's Ideals of equality amongst religion and what is even more strange is Ahlf hiding the letters from us that she writes which at this point we can tell when Ahlf was alive and wanted do something, he was doing it with good intentions, so that begs the question what on earth did the mother wrote that Ahlf didn't want us to know or protect us from, and another things that bothers my mind about her is the reason for bringing the infant MC to Cyre and which she explained that she did it to loose the bloodguards of they trail which just sounds like bullshit, and it would have made sense if she didn't just run back to the Ishari she was "Fleeing away from" with the MC and the people that she mentioned about that reside in Ishari that hate the MC due to they former bloodguard father, are not even a threat or they are not that many that hate them for it, so no matter how the mother explains it, she got zero reason for leaving us behind in Salt bay, the only good thing about abandoning the MC is that they were not entangle with her mad lies at a young age
Hi there, thanks for playing the game and leaving a comment 😊
Salyra's whole purpose is to serve the Ancient Ones - but that doesn't make her infallible. She makes mistakes but it's also hard for her to own those mistakes and admit that she can be wrong. It's up to you to decide if the message/vision she received from the Ancient Ones was one that couldn't be changed or one that was caused by her meddling in the betrothal of Lamahu and Erlan.
Salyra married Ahlf because she thought her union with him would inspire peace between Ishari and Cyre - if you go down the divinity route and uncover the truth of Salyra's ritual when the MC was a baby, you'll learn that she thought having a child with both heritages who could wield their divinity would achieve peace. Don't lose sight of the fact Ishari was part of Cyre before the war - a lot of people on either side if the kingdoms like to ignore that fact, but Cyre and Ishari were one kingdom often ruled by Ishari royalty before Erlan started the war. Salyra didn't see an issue of being with Ahlf because she thought people would be reminded of this unified past and try to work together.
Salyra doesn't like Irus because he's the son of Erlan. She loves Anu, because Anu was trained under her regarding her divinity. She really hates Elora because Elora has proven to be capable and strong, openly defying Salyra which Salyra doesn't like.
In order to understand Salyra's character (I'm assuming you're going down the aggressive route with her), you'll need to understand she's a very flawed character. She is written to be narcissistic and controlling and if you're not going to appease her, you'll end up getting a lot of her more negative traits flaring up 😅
A lot of the confusion you have is valid - but that's the point. You have to come up with your own reasonings why Ahlf and Salyra acted the way they did and then decide if that's something your MC is okay with or not. You don't have to play a loving child - you won't be punished for hating the parents and it won't affect the outcome of the game other than your relationship with them. There are quite a few side stories on my Patreon that explore the past history of Salyra and Ahlf, but it's not part of the main plot which follows the MC's decisions and not Ahlf or Salyra's decisions.
Thank you for your opinion author, I love this game, to bring out such emotions that my mc feel angry/conflicted towards the mother but his little sister Rana is still that one diamond in the rough that my Mc treasures
I just spent all day playing this. I'm so deeply in love with it, the characters, the story, it's all so well written! Well done, I can't wait for the full game!!!! The first game to genuinely cause me bi-panic lol!
Thank you so much! I'm so happy you enjoyed playing through the demo 💖 Progress is still going strong on the newer chapters so hopefully it won't be too long for the full game 😊
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amazing story, can't believe it took me playing like fifty other IFs to reach this lol
Thank you! I'm so glad you found your way to the game and enjoyed it 💖
Definitely one of the best IF's I've ever played! I've been hooked on it for the past couple of days, and while it is unfortunate that the public demo only extends to Chapter 8, I'm looking forward to seeing how the rest of the chapters turn out!
(Yap session below, read at your own expense 🙂 )
As I stated previously, this is one of the IF's I've ever played! Everything, from the plot, to the music, and the writing was done to a T! I loved the descriptive words, and it was clear that you put a ton of effort into this IF, it puts most others on this website to shame.
As far as the characters (companions in specific) go, I absolutely loved their personalities, and I was conflicted as to who I should romance (at least in the early chapters, 3-4 I believe), since I liked Iri, Sir Oren, and Ellie, both as romance options and characters!
(Iri my beloved 😇 I didn't have it in me to flirt with all three, it felt wrong 😭)
I could honestly go on and on about everything that I liked about the game, but if I did, this comment would probably take up half the page. But it was worth every hour of my time, and I hope that I'll be able to buy the full game when it gets released! You're a great author, and I hope nothing but the best for you!Thank you so much for your lovely comment! I'm so happy you enjoyed what was available to play in the public demo. I'm already working on Chapter 11 out of 12, so hopefully the full game will be available in the next year or so.
I'm so pleased you enjoyed the writing! I've always enjoyed fantasy and political stories but I was afraid of writing my own, so this was a leap of faith for me. It helps that I love ancient history so research wasn't as boring as some might think. I think Irus has always been a fan favourite and he continues to be a fan favourite. I love him to bits so it's good to know you do too! And I'm happy you enjoyed the different personalities of the ROs.
Thank you again for playing and if you ever have any questions, comments or feedback, feel free to reach out here or through my Tumblr.
hold onnn this game comes with music? lorddd i'm already hooked !!! trust me, i WILL be buying this game once it fully comes out
Thanks so much! The music is all from Pixabay 😊
Loved this story, Saw the fact that chap8 is the last free one and was wondering. How close is the game to completion and how much will it eventually be?
Thank you! I've just completed the first draft of Chapter 10, so I'll say with edits, it'll be released by the end of 2025 or in early 2026. I don't know how much the full game will be until I finalise everything but it'll likely between $10 - $12.
I see, Thank you for the info and best of luck!
Absolutely wonderful story. I will be awaiting your next update.
Thank you! There won't be any further updates to the public demo. The game is still ongoing and the plan is to have it released on Steam 😊
Ok :D. I am willing to wait 1-2 years for it.
I've never been as addicted to an IF as I was to this one. I'm truly obsessed. Irus has my heart ❤️.
About our mother, I just can't swallow what she does. I mean, no visits? She may have sent letters and everything, but like, how about you show up for your son maybe?? She had enough time to start another family, it's not possible that she didn't have time to give us some sign. I'm not going to blame my stepsister or my mother's husband, after all they had nothing to do with her decision not to look for us. My sister is lovely and my mother's husband seems like a nice person, so I can have a friendly relationship with him. But honestly I don't see myself forgiving my mother, like, you haven't looked for me this whole time but you want me to be completely open now that you've shown up? No, I feel too frustrated just thinking about it. Besides, if I can't accept this, I wonder what will happen to our uncle, cousin, and grandmother. They all still think about her, but she never gave them a single sign. Anyway, I'm just really frustrated with her haha, mainly because she doesn't seem to accept Irus very much, and if she says something against it, then we're really going to have problems 🗣️.
I saw that the public demo will no longer be updated until the IF is completed. Unfortunately I can't pay the patreon to read more, so I'll have to be patient until the completion 🙏. Which makes me wonder if you have already decided how many chapters IF will have? I would really like to know that. I really loved the story, the characters, just everything. I wish you much success and please continue creating more IFs, you are very talented.
All the best to you ~❤️
Thank you so much for playing and I'm glad you're enjoying the game 💖
Salyra disapproves the most of Irus and Elora as romance options for the MC just because she sees them as bad 😅 The Vinia family do reappear and make their views clear so you'll get to see that in the full game.
The game will eventually only be available on Steam so expect a post on that sooner to its completion. There will be twelve chapters in total, excluding the prologue and epilogue. Even if you can't join my Patreon, you can always follow my Tumblr for updates and more information.
Have you considered commissioning an actual artist to draw your character art instead of AI art?
Art is already commissioned and has been changed in the Patreon demo and on my Tumblr main post. I'll only update the public demo and page once I put up the edited and revised demo before the game's release.
Good to know, thank you. I realize that came off as confrontational, but as an artist myself, that is what was keeping me from trying this game.
It's okay. You don't have to try the game if the current art will bother you or keep you from wanting to play it 🌸
Hey the story is coming along well 😀, I accidentally sent an unfinished bug report 🤣 I'm killing myself laughing
That's okay! Im really only tackling bugs/grammar fixes during the edits so feel free to send it again.
Okay cool and actually I screenshoted the errors is there a way to send those or just text?
You can add them here in the comments for me to take a look 😊
👍 all of them are in chapter 7-8
Thank you! Are these bugs or spelling/grammar errors? I'm not fixing those until edits - only game-breaking bugs for now 😊
A very well thought out plot. I am pleased to know that the female ROs have a similar level of depth in them as the male ones. With so many otome games filling up this genre, I was apprehensive at first. It still saddens me that the 2nd female RO was very late in her appearance, and I had to spend my time stuck with 2 dudes, with Elora as the only exit lol. But I appreciate the game regardless.
One more thing I liked that you didn't force us to reconcile with Salyra as a good old protagonist. She's a hypocrite and I enjoyed tormenting her. I liked the morally ambiguous Dena as well.
As others have pointed out, a breakup system would be good if you decide to put it on. I liked my grandmother's family too, she was quite supportive :). Thanks for writing this game, Ramona. I was saddened when it ended, and I look forward for more :D.
Thank you for playing and leaving a comment! Originally, only Irus and Elora were going to be ROs but then it spiralled out of control 😅 Anu is part of the main plot, so while her appearance is late, I wasn't going to add a female RO just to add another female RO. Hopefully Dena's extended scenes in the prologue makes up for it.
I don't think I'll be implementing a break-up system because of the amount of extra work it would take and it would mean more variations and scenes that don't affect the plot of the game. The game takes place over a few months and ends after the conclusion of the war so if you do choose to break up with someone, it'll come up in the epilogue but not before that. And since this is a stand-alone game, it's not going to play out in future plots.
Thank you again for giving the game a try! 🩷
In the future, if we're courting someone... can we dump them to date Dena?
I still haven't decided if I'm going to add break-ups to the game because it requires extra flavour text and dialogue. At the moment, it'll probably be that only if you're single, you can be with Dena when you meet again so stay single for now 😅
Staying single for chapters on end for my childhood crush... easier said than done, but I'll do it... Thank you for your response, Ramona! Excited to hold out for him upon release.
You're welcome 💖 I'll be adding romance interactions with Dena and expanding the scenes from the prologue so hopefully the single life won't be too long or painful for your MC 😅
I thought almost the same thing XD
When i first played the game i didn't look at who the ROs are so when Dena came i was like yep They are the one
But then i somehow ended up romancing Elora... And when i saw That Dena is back well, gotta stay loyal but that still won't stop me from romancing Dena in another save when the full game is out
I am thrilled to have found this game, and I am eagerly awaiting the finished product! (And Dena's route!) Found some typos that I will submit to the form.
Thank you so much! Im happy you're enjoying the game 💖 Based on my current pace of writing, I'm hopeful to have the full game finished by the end of next year so keep a look out for announcements 😊
This question plagues me. Is it spelled Prince [ayrus] or Prince [eerus]
You mean the pronunciation? It's 'Ee-ris' 😊
I have a question: Is Dena a RO or not?
(For some reason i still haven't played it again to know that 😅 so I'm asking instead, even tho I'm going to play the game again-)
Dena is going to be an RO in the full game 😊 But for the current demo, Dena's romance route isn't implemented as yet.
Okey thank you for the info! 😄 The Demo is awesome, gotta buy the game one day :)
Thank you so much! I'm still working on the game at the moment but I hope to have everything ready by next year. Do follow my Tumblr if you want updates.
May I ask Ramona something? Has the queen Elora had a lover before? And who took the queen Elora's first time? If it's not both, then she gave her first time to the main character? I'm really curious And would like to know the answer. I don't really like the main character's wife having her first time with someone else, But I will accept with the answer I received if possible.
Who would be that lucky? Don't tell me its MC's cousin....I will not accept that answer. I wouldn't buy the game if it was that bad. I can't accept that her first time isn't the main character. I've read more than 1000 manhua(Chinese manga) and it's not strange if I didn't accept.
Queen Erola didn't say it was her first time and said to MC "you could have spent your first time with anyone" Which makes me even more curious. Plus, it was easy to insert without pain. Or is the main character's thing too small? If the answer I get is that her first time is MC. I will definitely buy the full game just for Queen Erola. If I get an answer that would be great.
It was not Queen Flora's first time. She's has casual lovers before. To hold something like that against a character seems rather superficial. Everyone has a past and Elora wasn't going to wait around for the MC who she only met a few months before the game started. There is NOTHING romantic between Zikar and Elora so no need to stress 😅
Thank you. I just wonder how someone like Queen Erola could have a lover in the past. And there are still doubt about how they broke up. And who is that person and where has he gone.
she never mentioned it. But it's okay anyway.
I might read too much xianxia novels😅
I must be a little....Too tired and sleepy from work That is why I wrote this comment about the Queen Elora without thinking at all. I usually think more than 30 times before doing something.
After waking up I wanted to delete the comment but you had already read it.
I will not visit itch io after returning from work again Before doing something pointless or nonsense in comment section😅
you're really weird, in a very creepy way.
I was thinking the exact same thing. This dudes a bit questionable
I felt disgusted reading that comment, and elora isn't even a real person but I do feel sorry for her 😅
This is my Last Comment. Let's be honest, the love story between the MC's mother and her new husband is very trash. The reason she loves him because he's different from everyone else, that's all. makes me think of the anime named "Erased"
But in this game, the MC's father betrays his country, betrays everyone, Sacrificed everything, for her alone. and what her new husband does is just different from everyone else....WTF! Poor MC's father. MC's father didn't deserve that. He deserve better. I include our MC.
Danzor was an Ishari warrior and he knew Salyra as children - plus they had a relationship before Salyra met Ahlf. The circumstances surrounding Ahlf and Salyra's love story is questionsble at best but I wont spoil anything since it comes up in later chapters depending on your choices 😉
"I will miss you dearly," Mama whispers. "I will pray to Ehulla to guide you safely on your journey, Rubari." You open your mouth to respond, but Mama turns away first.
Not even a single comfort. There should be an option to say "You are so busy feeling guilty and sadness that you forget that I am suffering too. You keep thinking that you sacrificed so much to protect me but you forget that I also suffer. You never think about the consequences of your actions, even though every action you take only makes things worse. " I want to know how his mother will react.
She always walks away from our MC, There wasn't even any comfort. She often acts sad after the MC tells the truth About how much her actions affected him. Everything she did is to protect MC? Everything she did to the MC just made the MC suffer, so what now? He still had to fight against what his mother was trying to fight. Everything that the MC's mother does is in vain. All in order to leave the MC and go have a new family. I, who played the main character, did not accept her new husband. I really wanted the MC's mother to feel more and more guilty Until she regrets all her choices and all her actions. She shouldn't have a new family. That's what our MC wants.
Salyra is a complicated character with narcissistic tendencies so you're never going to get that satisfying comeback in the early chapters of meeting her. She's not someone who will sit idly by and take criticism but is very good at dishing it out. You're not going to get the closure you might want with her route - she is a bad/ggood mother depending on your playthrough 😅
"She was a blessing when everything seemed terrible," Danzor murmurs. "We are grateful to have had Rana." -Chapter 7 Do you think I'm stupid? How many times have you explode inside my mama? I guess he had too much fun with the MC's mama and forgot about protection or explode outside😂 The main character also says "A blessing?" you scoff. "There is nothing miraculous about bedding each other."" -Chapter 7 and I agreed with Rubari. I'm beginning to not be sure if I can continue to trust Mama.
It should be made into a meme on reddit if there's a community for this game out there.
what a weirdo
This world is full or weirdo, my friend. You can find them everywhere.
May I ask who the woman on the cover is? if she is a character in this game, who is she? Can someone please tell me which game she is from? And what is her name? The visual style reminds me of a lot of games.
That's the main character wearing a hooded cloak, so it's not necessarily a woman 😋 The cover was designed by an artist for the game's official cover.
It would have been better if there had been a picture of the main character standing alone among hundreds of corpses with his back to the camera, showing the character who had been through a lot. Along with a picture of him as an innocent and happy 5 year old, he was happy with his mother. Compare with the first picture. You will see a lot of character development and more clarity. "this is the masterpiece" The cover of the game is very well made and fits the story perfectly. I never thought I'd find a good game like this.
Thank you! I trued to make the character as gender-neutral as possible so that all players could imagine that the character on the cover is them. It's supposed to represent the end war scenes of the game's conclusion 😊
My first thought when I found out that Mama already move on:
"I'll burn this planet down." along with music "Me and The Devil. Walking side by side🎶" I rate this game 11/10. I accidentally pressed in this game. who would have thought that I would end up with a masterpiece? I was so enjoying the story that I forgot to look at the time.
Thank you! 🥰
This Game is The Masterpiece(Every game I like is a masterpiece lol.)
If you can make your readers Shedding tears, you've succeeded. "So much has happened in the years that you have been apart. The woman you thought you knew as a child is not the woman you know now." -from Chapter 6 and I Agreed. I was so angry that no matter what, I had to choose the option of severing ties with Rubari's mother and living with the queen (future wife). It would be better not to mess with a mother who forgets her own child. Rubari is no longer the same person as the 5 yo kid from that day. He is no longer the same as he was then. He's been through a lot. the character development was great. And the character with no development is trash but This game has only good characters, especially Rubari. I hope he can fight 100 people by himself in the future Because the MC has enough or too much potential in many paths, such as being a great swordsman. There are very few options for practicing swordmanship skills. But at least The MC got to spend time with the Queen.
His greatest feats:
1. He almost single-handedly defeated the trained Blood Guard with no experience.
2. Have a child with the queen (Soon) hehhe
3. Nothing, because the main character is too weak to receive the 3rd achievement. If he can't protect himself, how can he protect the people he loves? haha.
Thank you for your long comment and for your feedback! Im so happy you enjoyed the game, even in its draft, unfinished state 😊 Combat scenes are possibly the hardest thing for me to write since I just don't like them and there's only so many ways to describe a fight without wanting to hide under a rock somewhere 😅
I'm working on getting better at them but it's something that will be refined during edits so for now, the scenes aren't going to be fleshed out.
There won't be children or weddings in the full game - that's not the scope of the game but expect DLCs on the wedding and children for each romance route.
Try unlocking your divinity if you really want some cool, glowing eyes 👀
Thank you again for playing! 💖
hi Ramona,
was thinking of supporting you and the game on patreon, but i have some questions:
will talking about the 5€ tier
1.) are the once-a-month sidestories retroactive avaiable? so will i have access to all past stories if i support now?
2.) commisions are like: you ask an artist for something & pay, then the artist deliever, right? if so, what does early access mean in that context?
im sure you hear it enough, but it still amazes me how captivating your writing is. last time i played was when chapter 8 was released, and 1.) im sure i could roughly retell the story from memory and 2.) can still "conjure up" the hate i had towards the mother of MC.
The $5 tier gives you early access to new scenes of the demo when they're available, one NPC side story and one RO side story, as well as sneak peeks and the ability to vote in polls on decisions for the game.
1. Yes, all rewards/benefits are automatically retroactive on Patreon. If you join, you get access to everything from the very first thing that was posted for the tier you join.
2. Early access means you get access to the demo when it's available. Because you're not only paying for the demo - sometimes there won't be updates in a month due to the size and time it takes to write and code the demo, you'll only get access to the side stories and sneak peeks. I'm a writer, not an artist, so this isn't a commission type of benefit, it's an early access to the demo when it is available to play. Because the demo isn't going to be shared with the public until its final release on Steam, early access in this case means you're getting to play the game's scenes in development up until the epilogue.
Hope this answers you! 😊
yes, thank you for your answers.
AT LAST I FOUND THIS, YOU DON'T KNOW HOW HARD IT IS TRYING TO FIND THE GAME YOU'VE PLAYED BUT FORGOT THE NAME
I'm glad you found it 😅 That's why you should add it to your itch.io library so you don't lose it.
just finished all the current chapters and i definitely enjoyed it! i can say the strained relationship dynamic between the MC and our mother hit CLOSE to home so i could relate.
i am deeply in love with irus as well <3
Thank you so much and I'm so happy to know you enjoyed what's available to play 😊💖 I'm glad you were able to relate to the strained family dynamics! It's something that comes out throughout the game. Thanks again for playing!
MIRTH.
Love the story! Ellie is best girl! And Irus is such a bro! Looking forward to another playthrough with Anu after I finish my current one
Thank you! I'm so glad you're enjoying it 😊
I haven't played the game much yet but the story is incredible! I just reached Chapter 2 and im already enjoying it! Keep up the great work!
Thank you! You'll be able to go up to Chapter 8 in the public demo. I'm glad you're enjoying what's available so far! 😊💖
Kind of a spoiler
In the first 7 chapters i was wondering: Are we ever going to meet D (I will call em D cause the gender can be different for some players) ? And when we did my reaction was just 😲(Wha-) 😀(D!!!) 😯 (Wait what I wasn't expecting them to appear-) 😀 (But I'm happy for that)🤨 (Wait so D Is actually beck for some time?!)😁jsijwjdh (awesome)
also i knew i would get addicted to this game, the writing, character, drama! Love it so much, I want to play more but sadly i can't download the game. It was fun playing the 1st chapters tho, Maybe in soms years i will come upon this game again and download it since the plot is fascinating and the characters are well made :)
Ah thank you for playing! Dena's name remains the same regardless of gender so no need for spoilers 😋 The public demo only goes up to Chapter 8 and the current Patreon demo is on the beginning of Chapter 10. There will be a download link when the full game is released on Steam. Thank you for playing and for your support!
Okey! At first i thought that the mc would never meet Dena again XD but they did
And thank you for the informations. I will make sure to find this game again in the future and play it! 😄
Irus has me in a chokehold, and I love playing shy mc's so.. its a win for me. Can't wait for it to be finished. I'll be eagerly waiting. Irus supremacy!
Thank you for playing! I'm so happy that Irus has you enamoured 😊 I do hope you give the other ROs a try too while you wait for more Irus scenes 😆
Do you guys think Salyra deserves her child's forgiveness? Even if she doesn't deserve it, would it be good for the MC to forgive her?
It's up to you as a player to decide 😋 You can create two different playthroughs to see whether the forgiveness path is worth playing.
I love this game! Congratulations on the fabulous work! It's incredible, I just have a few suggestions: please, in the next updates, try to make Salyra have more affection for her son. I feel like she still leaves him a little aside, for example at the mother and son reunion, she greets him, but then says goodbye saying that her other family needs her, however, and about the eldest son who she hasn't seen in a long time. TWO DECADES? He also needed her due to the shock and so many years of absence. I feel there is different treatment on Salyra and Amma's part between Rana and MC. It will never be Rana's fault, she is just an innocent child. But let's try to make Salyra redeem herself even more (she owes it to the MC) and treat her son better, of course I noticed that she loves him, but there are still loose ends. Obviously, these are not suggestions of mandatory choices, just a path of choices. Let's try to save Sal and her son's relationship. And please, make Salyra forget Danzor a little and focus more on her son. I emphasize, it is just a path that can be followed, nothing mandatory. My MC is male. Sorry, my English isn't the best. BUT SERIOUSLY, PLEASE CONTINUE THIS AMAZING WORK, I LOVE IT. I'M A FAN!
But, of course, these are just suggestions and opinions. It's only up to you as the author of this incredible work to decide how to proceed with the next updates :)
Hi, thank you so much for playing ❤ Unfortunately, there will be no update for the public demo. The game will only available once it's completed. My Patreon continues to receive new chapters but these are still not the edited version which will (eventually) be available on Steam.
Salyra's responses are who she is as a character. Adding more affection or love removes that part of her character and will be a completely different story. I didn't set out to write a happy family with lots of love and emotional maturity so I'm afraid, she won't change very much. Some people just don't change in real life and that's true for Salyra.
None of the parental figures are going to change - especially when they're not parents of the year 😅 If you've hoped for an emotionally distant/emotionally constipated parent to be more loving, you'll know it doesn't just happen (it sometimes rarely happens).
Thank you for playing and I hope you understand!
Of course! Thank u! :)
I really loathe her character. She is so infuriating, i don't understand her reasoning most of the times.
If you're familiar with narcissistic mothers, it'll explain why she does what she does 😅
In my head I always justified her decision, "Oh she is is just misunderstood character." But, damn. Sis really make me hard to relate with her 💀
You don't have to relate to her. You can choose to hate her instead 😆
No way I can forgive her! She abandoned us! At first I was hopeful and looking forward to find her and reunite, but seeing what she has been doing this whole time really set me off. TWENTY YEARS. And all that time I could have been chilling in Vinia?? Maybe visiting pops at his cozy little cottage in sleepy Salt Bay every now and then?!
Spoilers!
*sigh* i don't get why the mom nvr even sent someone to check on us? In 15 hears? Couldn't she have at least hired someone like lord randall to check? Or maybe at least a clear apology and admitting she must have left her to an aweful childhood? Or at least that she fcked up?
Ugh this has got my heart in knots!
She received Ahlf's letters which told her the MC is fine and better off in Cyre. She also couldn't up and leave Ishari while Erlan was alive because he would have likely killed her for plot reasons that will be revealed in Part 4 😋 Still, you're free to feel upset about her lack of visits etc. She's by no means a perfect mother.
No i get that i just meant even cps has welfare checks beyond what the parents fill out in a form...i don't think salyra could have visited but if someone is like"sure ur kids fine no u can't talk to them" like kids die that way all the time, my grandmother does social work with foster children and adoption. Also hiring someone to check wouldn't have put her at risk would it? The hired person wouldn't even have to make contact...but point taken i guess...
This is a fantasy game based off of ancient civilizations so unfortunately there aren't such things as social workers or welfare checks, I'm afraid 😅
Is the full game out yet •^•
I'm very nosey 🤣
Unfortunately, we're about 1-2 years from it's full completion 😅 Chapter 9 is available to play on my Patreon, but there's still three more chapters and an epilogue to go and the average word count per chapter has been steadily increasing the closer to the end of the game so expect a bit of a wait.
damn I'll wait for the full game
I hope there's a chance of starting a family because drama stuff can happen 🤣
Unfortunately you can't start a family in the game, it's not part of the scope of the plot but there will be separate DLCs for marriage and children 😊
yay drama ^^
A marriage DLC???????????? bless you!!
Since the main game ends after the conclusion of the plot, there wouldn't really be a look towards what happens after so I thought a wedding DLC would be nice to have 😊
(First of all, English isn't my first language, so some things might be worded the wrong way!)
I cannot put into words how much I like this game. The MC is so well-written, and there are so many choices to choose from. You can be bold or shy, downright spiteful and rude or openly kind and caring. The four love interests are also very diverse (Irus, the prince, Elora, the queen, sir Oren, and Anu). Everyone shares different qualities, Irus is cocky and almost arrogant at first, maybe just a bit more distant. Queen Elora isn't afraid to use us if it benefits our kingdom, but she still has a kind side to her. Sir Oren is probably my favourite, mostly because of his love and care for children, and the way he turns shy when you're bold with him! And Anu, of course. She started opening up kind of quickly with me, and I really enjoyed interacting with her.
And our parents. Oh my god, the rage I felt when I found out that Salyra only had us with Alf to stop the war. Not only was that stupid, but she didn't even think about the child after she left us with Alf. How did girl as an Ishari even pull a blood guard? 😦
And I have one question as well. Is it possible to sleep with Sir Oren? I know that Queen Elora and Prince Irus have steamt scenes, but I played through Sir Oren's route, but I havent been able to get those scenes.
Thank you so much for playing the game! 😊 And your English is fine, so don't worry about it.
I'm really glad you're enjoying the main gang so far! I tried to make them as different from each other as I could without making them too cliché with their roles so it means a lot that you're enjoying them. Anu mostly hates Irus, so she has no issue with becoming friends with the MC – especially after learning that tge MC is Salyra's child.
There's a separate Patreon side story that explains everything between Ahlf and Salyra's relationship. There's one on how they met, one on how they got together and even a few on them raising the MC. Their story isn't really explored in the game because like the MC, players will be left trying to find answers to something no one wants to answer.
All ROs (including Dena) will have steamy scenes. Oren is a slowburn romance – it takes him a while before he feels comfortable enough to want a relationship with the MC and once you get his lock-in point (Chapter 10), expect some steamy scenes 😋
Thank you again for your support! 💖
Alright, thanks!! 🌸🫶 It's an amazing IF, so that's the reason why I commented in the first place
….yup. Called it. lol The moment I saw Queen Elora in the RO list, I knew she would be the one my baby character ended up with. Gorgeous AND crafty/intelligent — with the possibility of manipulating my MC for the good of her Kingdom? Say. Less.
Cue: me finishing demo, and Ellie is my Entire short wife. What can I say - I know my type. (Also - not to be vulgar - but I freakin CHEERED seeing you write intimate/steamy scenes WELL. That is a GIFT, my friend. No one wants to wait 50 chapters ‘will they/won’t they’ only to get *fart noise* of a first time. Well done.)
But I have to give you more flowers: Not only for making an awesome character like Elora - but depth-filled characters in general. They could easily all be stereotypes; but you really do well at showcasing what makes them who they are (even if they’re awful people). Your work on the MC is my favorite though. I think a tragic main is nothing new at this point — but what sets yours apart are the choices for how the MC can feel about it. And you actually have them Explore their trauma (if they have it - mine certainly does), like: ‘oh crap - maybe I’m not okay…’
More kudos: You got me to play a (primarily) shy girlie — which does Not happen. I usually roll confident/flirty female MCs because I feel there’s still a dearth there compared to BLWUSHY ‘aah’types (nothing against that - just not my style) — that actually made a Lot of sense with a character who basically had Zero interactions with her own age group/everyone hates her. So — of course she doesn’t know how to flirt and ‘oh my goodness - this Queen is grabbing my wrist’. Needless to say: there was a Lot of gay panic and I really enjoyed it. (P.S.: every time Elora grins an Angel gets its wings.)
Gushing aside, this was a great rough draft and I’m really excited to see the final product~ ❤️
Thank you so much for playing and I'm so happy you're enjoying Ellie 😊💖
It means a lot that you enjoyed the steamy scenes! I'm no stranger to writing them in novels but interactive fiction is a bit different 😅 I'm hoping to expand the steamy scenes in the full game for extra interactions so hopefully they'll be even better when it's done. I hate slowburn romances – they're fine when done well but gosh, I just want to smooch an RO before the end of the game so I knew I wasn't going to leave the smut/romance for too late.
It really makes me so pleased that you're enjoying the characters and their flaws! I love tragic characters and I really enjoy complicated family dynamics, so it was fun to include them in the game and especially explore the relationships with the MC and all the weight they have to carry because of everything that's happened to them.
Please do give a flirty MC a try! Ellie tends to blush a bit around a bolder MC 😋 I'm glad you liked the shy flirt options though 💖
Thank you again for playing! There's so much still to be added and expanded for the main game but I'll soon be working on Chapter 10 so only 3 more chapters and an epilogue left to go before edits 🎉
uhm - thank you for Creating it! Elora is all my current obsession. (That, and when I can actually call her ‘Ellie’) *stares and sips tea*
I don’t hate slow burns(done well — agree) — but I feel Great characters should make out when they wanna make out and bed when they wanna bed. I know when I write, I’ll have a general plan for romance progression - but rarely do babies not interrupt my plans/I don’t allow it. What *does* drive me crazy is: constant interrupts/delay tactic. Bless you didn’t go that route. And Bless for expanded steamy. 😏 Who am I to stop you if you wanna add round twos, threes, and so forth~? Srsly tho: Ellie’s foreplay game is: MMM. When she started by offering a drink - I was Screaming
Gimme all the flawed. I actually RP my Rubi as kind/genuine - but oof! She a TEMPER. Such a fun dynamic. And she’ll call a B out. (one of my favorite bits is garden scene where there’s so many ways to claim Queenie a hypocrite. I ADORE MCs standing up to RO - we can Disagree and still Smash, darnit!!!) But yes. Flawed. Was trying to avoid spoilers, but. Mother. oh, Mother… 👀
Oh - I’ve given everything with Ellie a try. ;) …except for not bowing - that just rood. lol Admittedly a lot of the flirtier options just don’t fit MC’s past, to me. Not that some don’t sneak in there: It’s great to actually roleplay a MC getting more confident as time goes on. But! Credit where due: there's also a shy choice that made Ellie blush and it was such a fun surprise! As much as I love a BOLD blush, one where she’s flustered from pure sincerity is Everythiiiiiing
Amazed such great progress is being made - but please make sure not to burn out! I (and so many others) will be rooting for you along the way! 🎉
You might find the MC will have some experience (not the bedding kind but definitely young love kind) once the prologue is expanded and Dena's route gets a fully fleshed-out romance 😚 Thank you again for your support! I do make sure to take breaks on the weekends so (touch wood), there's been no burn-out so far.
I might be unintentionally spoiling things, so maybe, just in case, steer clear if you don't like spoilers!
It's a really great story! I'm still in the middle of it, but I love that there are a lot of romantic choices to choose from, like being proactive or passive when flirting and whether you want it hot or just heart-warming lol. When finally choosing an RO to pursue, I also love that there's an option to have a chaste relationship. Also, it seems that the RO and MC sometimes don't care if they're in public when flirting lmao. Sometimes I'm just like: Get a room you lovebirds!
Then, there's the MC's stats. I wonder if they have any effect on the story. I made my MC an all-rounder and to me, the stats are pretty high, with the lowest at 60. Yet, it seems like the stats have little to no effect on the story. For example, during battle, MC's skill doesn't reflect their high might stat much.
I also noticed that there are inconsistencies with pronouns here and there. For example, I set Dena's gender as female but sometimes, she's referred to as he.
Edit: "You shudder as her fingers trace over your skin; eliciting goose pimples in their wake."
Sorry, but why not goosebumps instead?🤣 It kind of made me laugh a bit🤣😭😭 The choice of words makes me curious😭
Thank you for playing and I'm glad you're enjoying it so far 😊
The stats don't play a huge role on the game. In hindsight, if I could go back, I'd have removed them entirely 😅 This is still a very rough draft so expect the variations to be polished and added once I start with edits of the full game. That's when the stats will offer better variations.
Goose pimples is what I use - it's a synonym for goosebumps. It's more a UK-English style of saying it (I write in UK-English) and I also hate how modern/urban-fiction goosebumps sounds which clashes with the high fantasy vibe of the game 😆
so my speculation was right then! lol, looking forward to future updates!
ah, hence the choice of words, I understand now!🤣
Haven't played this story in a few months and I've been playing it all day today (still haven't done all routes yet lol). Will definitely be buying it as soon as it releases! I must see where it goes with Dena! 😂💕
(Also, still haven't forgiven the mother yet, even after all this time. 😤)
I'm so happy you're enjoying it! It means a lot that you're willing to buy the full game especially since this is still a very rough draft with missing content that'll be added in the complete version. You'll probably hate Salyra more further into the chapters 👀
Ooh I knew she couldn't be trusted!😑IMHO, it is a very good rough draft. It was satisfying and left me wanting more. And I forgot it had missing content! I cannot wait to see what they are!
A lot are scenes I never had time to add during the rough draft, so there'll be additional scenes (like exploring the Southern Islands in chapter 8), extended dialogue scenes and additional choices implemented. In the rough draft, you'll always succeed in gaining Dena's support but the final version will have a failure outcome so you'll get Dena's limited support which will have consequences on the end game states 😊
Is it just me or does anyone feel that the mother is planning something evil or just being one of those hidden main antagonist, because no matter how I look at the mother, her character, personality is just completely puzzling for a example the mother claims to fight for a peaceful coexistense between the Ishari and Cyre but did not question the command of the "Ancient Ones" telling her to break the engagement between the princess of Ishari and the late king of Cyre which if occured would have resulted in doom for the Ishari and which still happened due to the war, the MC is in and now this is the confusing part, why did she have the MC with a Cyre man and not just a ordinary Cyre but one that is used to be the general of the bloodguards, a very high posistion in Cyre and one that is the equivalent to the mother status as high priestess, since both gives them right to stand atleast equal with the king and queen of they kingdom, so doesn't this seem too strange or weird especially she mention in a letter to the family in vinia that she has found a way to end the war, like lets be honest the mother has no love for foreigners as I have seen when she for no reason at all turn hostile on Elora the heir to vinia for just checking on the MC, it would have made sense if the hostility was shown towards to Anu for letting us to touch the divine weapon or Irus due to his aethist nature but this does not happen from what I have seen so far and she only directs such anger towards Elora whose nation practically respresent the mother's Ideals of equality amongst religion and what is even more strange is Ahlf hiding the letters from us that she writes which at this point we can tell when Ahlf was alive and wanted do something, he was doing it with good intentions, so that begs the question what on earth did the mother wrote that Ahlf didn't want us to know or protect us from, and another things that bothers my mind about her is the reason for bringing the infant MC to Cyre and which she explained that she did it to loose the bloodguards of they trail which just sounds like bullshit, and it would have made sense if she didn't just run back to the Ishari she was "Fleeing away from" with the MC and the people that she mentioned about that reside in Ishari that hate the MC due to they former bloodguard father, are not even a threat or they are not that many that hate them for it, so no matter how the mother explains it, she got zero reason for leaving us behind in Salt bay, the only good thing about abandoning the MC is that they were not entangle with her mad lies at a young age
Hi there, thanks for playing the game and leaving a comment 😊
Salyra's whole purpose is to serve the Ancient Ones - but that doesn't make her infallible. She makes mistakes but it's also hard for her to own those mistakes and admit that she can be wrong. It's up to you to decide if the message/vision she received from the Ancient Ones was one that couldn't be changed or one that was caused by her meddling in the betrothal of Lamahu and Erlan.
Salyra married Ahlf because she thought her union with him would inspire peace between Ishari and Cyre - if you go down the divinity route and uncover the truth of Salyra's ritual when the MC was a baby, you'll learn that she thought having a child with both heritages who could wield their divinity would achieve peace. Don't lose sight of the fact Ishari was part of Cyre before the war - a lot of people on either side if the kingdoms like to ignore that fact, but Cyre and Ishari were one kingdom often ruled by Ishari royalty before Erlan started the war. Salyra didn't see an issue of being with Ahlf because she thought people would be reminded of this unified past and try to work together.
Salyra doesn't like Irus because he's the son of Erlan. She loves Anu, because Anu was trained under her regarding her divinity. She really hates Elora because Elora has proven to be capable and strong, openly defying Salyra which Salyra doesn't like.
In order to understand Salyra's character (I'm assuming you're going down the aggressive route with her), you'll need to understand she's a very flawed character. She is written to be narcissistic and controlling and if you're not going to appease her, you'll end up getting a lot of her more negative traits flaring up 😅
A lot of the confusion you have is valid - but that's the point. You have to come up with your own reasonings why Ahlf and Salyra acted the way they did and then decide if that's something your MC is okay with or not. You don't have to play a loving child - you won't be punished for hating the parents and it won't affect the outcome of the game other than your relationship with them. There are quite a few side stories on my Patreon that explore the past history of Salyra and Ahlf, but it's not part of the main plot which follows the MC's decisions and not Ahlf or Salyra's decisions.
I hope this helps clear up some your points 🌼
Thank you for your opinion author, I love this game, to bring out such emotions that my mc feel angry/conflicted towards the mother but his little sister Rana is still that one diamond in the rough that my Mc treasures
No problem! I'm glad you feel so strongly about the characters 💖 Thank you again for playing 😊
I just spent all day playing this. I'm so deeply in love with it, the characters, the story, it's all so well written! Well done, I can't wait for the full game!!!! The first game to genuinely cause me bi-panic lol!
Thank you so much! I'm so happy you enjoyed playing through the demo 💖 Progress is still going strong on the newer chapters so hopefully it won't be too long for the full game 😊
hey there is a way to have the sovereign's support? To not made the prince run again immediatly?
Which Sovereign are you referring to? And running off to where? You're going to end up in Ishari no matter what you choose to do.