There is an error in the scene where Irus bandages your injury. The last two options (drawing your hand away or snatching your hand away) both lead to the same scene, intended for snatching your hand away.
Small bug: When in Dark Mode, every entry in the Codex save for Salt Bay is still in black text, rather than the white text used elsewhere. Salt Bay displays properly, but Ishari, The Blood Guard, and The Ancient Ones all have black text for the entries themselves - difficult to read on a dark background.
Latest update is great! Wonderful writing, and excited to see where things go next.
This is a very interesting beginning, would love to see where it goes. I have to agree with LightningMaestro, though, but not on "all options" - there are some conflict moments here and there.
Very good - quite enjoyed what's available so far. One thing I noticed in particular with a lot of the 'choose your emotional reaction' segments, though: All of the options are single, unified responses. What I mean by that is that there doesn't seem to be any with two emotions or an emotional conflict - despite the situation being very complicated and the MC at the time being a child. It seems like it would be normal to be both scared of a newly introduced father as well as to want to get to know him - or to be hurt/sad and resentful at the ostracization brought on by the townsfolk - etc. I understand that would add a lot of writing to put all variations of that in, but just something that stood out to me.
Hi there, thanks for playing 😊 I do understand what you mean and these are really good suggestions. I probably will go back and add in extra options for two or more emotions once the first draft of the game is complete. Thanks again for pointing it out!
The one thing critique I would give it, is that the background is not mobile friendly with how similar the font color is to it. It could be just my phone not wanting to completely load everything. Don't get me wrong, I'm still trying to read it by highlighting the words, but with bad eyes it's hard to read. Maybe have an option to switch to a dark mode, or darken the font a bit, if it is possible. I will refresh my phone to see if anything loads more.
Hmm that sounds a bit odd. The background colour is white and I've added in a plain white background, if the background image doesn't work. The regular font is black, with only the links being a yellow/gold colour. If you could let me know what colour the font is - is it showing up a different colour or is it the gold colour that's hard to see? On my end, it works as it should.
I will try adding in a dark mode - my coding skills is still a little lacking, so I'll do my best 🙂
For me the font color is like an off white, and is almost blending in with the white background. There's nothing stopping me from reading this when I can get to the library with my laptop, so there's no rush. I just need to take into consideration that I'm having troubles with my cellphone provider ever sense they switched to a 5G network earlier this year. Things are probably not loading correctly because of it.
Thanks for letting me know 😊I did test it out on my phone and it worked fine, but I will be adding a dark theme just to be on the safe side, especially if other players have the same issue as you. Hopefully, with the next update, I should have a working dark theme so you'll be able to play from your phone.
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There is an error in the scene where Irus bandages your injury. The last two options (drawing your hand away or snatching your hand away) both lead to the same scene, intended for snatching your hand away.
Thanks for letting me know! I might have forgotten to change the scene when coding. I'll definitely check it out 👍
Small bug: When in Dark Mode, every entry in the Codex save for Salt Bay is still in black text, rather than the white text used elsewhere. Salt Bay displays properly, but Ishari, The Blood Guard, and The Ancient Ones all have black text for the entries themselves - difficult to read on a dark background.
Latest update is great! Wonderful writing, and excited to see where things go next.
Thank you for letting me know! I had completely forgotten about the text colour when changing to dark mode. I'll definitely fix that 👍
Thank you for playing and I'm glad you enjoyed it 😊
Loved it!! I'm excited for the next part hopefully they'll already be meeting with Queen Elora. ^^)
Thanks for playing and your kind words 🤗 You'll definitely be meeting Queen Elora as well as Sir Oren in chapter two.
This is a very interesting beginning, would love to see where it goes. I have to agree with LightningMaestro, though, but not on "all options" - there are some conflict moments here and there.
Thank you for playing 😊 I will be going back to add in more options for the MC to feel more than just one emotion.
Very good - quite enjoyed what's available so far. One thing I noticed in particular with a lot of the 'choose your emotional reaction' segments, though: All of the options are single, unified responses. What I mean by that is that there doesn't seem to be any with two emotions or an emotional conflict - despite the situation being very complicated and the MC at the time being a child. It seems like it would be normal to be both scared of a newly introduced father as well as to want to get to know him - or to be hurt/sad and resentful at the ostracization brought on by the townsfolk - etc. I understand that would add a lot of writing to put all variations of that in, but just something that stood out to me.
Hi there, thanks for playing 😊 I do understand what you mean and these are really good suggestions. I probably will go back and add in extra options for two or more emotions once the first draft of the game is complete. Thanks again for pointing it out!
The one thing critique I would give it, is that the background is not mobile friendly with how similar the font color is to it. It could be just my phone not wanting to completely load everything. Don't get me wrong, I'm still trying to read it by highlighting the words, but with bad eyes it's hard to read. Maybe have an option to switch to a dark mode, or darken the font a bit, if it is possible. I will refresh my phone to see if anything loads more.
Hmm that sounds a bit odd. The background colour is white and I've added in a plain white background, if the background image doesn't work. The regular font is black, with only the links being a yellow/gold colour. If you could let me know what colour the font is - is it showing up a different colour or is it the gold colour that's hard to see? On my end, it works as it should.
I will try adding in a dark mode - my coding skills is still a little lacking, so I'll do my best 🙂
For me the font color is like an off white, and is almost blending in with the white background. There's nothing stopping me from reading this when I can get to the library with my laptop, so there's no rush. I just need to take into consideration that I'm having troubles with my cellphone provider ever sense they switched to a 5G network earlier this year. Things are probably not loading correctly because of it.
Thanks for letting me know 😊I did test it out on my phone and it worked fine, but I will be adding a dark theme just to be on the safe side, especially if other players have the same issue as you. Hopefully, with the next update, I should have a working dark theme so you'll be able to play from your phone.
i really like the story so far ! can’t wait to see where it goes
Thank you for playing! 😊
really good so far! keep it up ^^
Thanks for playing and enjoying 🙂
Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it 😊