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Oh..Queen Elora...*faint* 

😆😆 Wait for chapter 5. More romance scenes ahead 😋

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Oh yes!..*faint again* 

😂

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Dear Lord!!!! Chp 4 is here ✨

I can't wait to read it all now 🙊🤍

Tysm for the update and the android version, dear author! :)

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Glad you're excited! Please let me know if you encounter any issues with the android version - it's my first time compiling a game into an apk file 😂 Do have fun and enjoy!

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I am SO in love with Irus! I was instantly hooked into the story. I love your writing so much! Never lose your talent!!

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Thank you for playing 😊 And I'm super glad that you loved Irus! He's possibly my favourite out if the ROs if you can't already tell 😅 Thanks for supporting me! It means a lot to me 💖

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this. i'm not even done yet with all of the chapters so far and i know it's amazing hhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh
i have so much respect for you because i can't even make a good enough sentence with at least 15 words for my english homework. and if i do, it looks like an elementary kid did it



um spoilers below

and i don't really know how long this has to be


so i'll just put random sh lol



i have a folder dedicated to finding typos and
weird
english stuff
for this game
and i'm using a 2nd character for this


hee hee 🥰


and then it isn't long enough and
this is just an annoyingly long
comment



ok anyways

not my problem (well actually it is)





"Where are we going?" you ask, your voice small.

cirlces. CIRLCES??????? nah but it's ok i guess
circles*


"I am not staying with this man," you declare.


well it's missing the pronoun/noun. could be "Mama says softly." or "she says softly."

"Alright, Mama," you agree.


not cirlce again 😭😭
encircle*

"What's is to you?" you snarl.

 - choice
 - the result or whatever
well.... technically you just said "What is is to you?"
it*

"Bring the knives, [insert name]," Ahlf commands.


"...as to Ahlf was." what. it's missing a "who"
as to who Ahlf was.*

stall man merchant


"It fits neatly into your palm, a small and detailed." 'a' should not be there. even grammarly agrees
"It fits neatly into your palm, small and detailed."*

do you want to learn more about the Ancient Ones


"What say you?" wth happened here. i don't know if it's meant to be like that
"What do you say?"*

yeah i wanna learn more


"You eyes the idols." a
"You eye the idols."*

But instead of finding the worn book, you find a closed box


"...you reach out for the first folded, page." remove the comma after 'first folded'
you reach out for the first folded page.*

"I was just watching from the cottage," you snap in anger.


"...and the look his gaze becomes hard." well it's missing an 'in'
and the look in his gaze becomes hard.*

"I don't have to obey your every command," you hiss.


"...before he looks way." well it is certainly missing an 'a'
before he looks away.*

anyways at this point my itch.io is breaking but it's okay since i'm done with everything i've found so far
idk if some of them are intentional since.... maybe it's just ancient grammar or something. i mean, it is the 500s 🤷‍♀️
nOW MY LAPTOP IS BREAKING .

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Thank you so much for playing and I'm so glad you enjoyed it! Some of these errors were fixed, it's just not posted yet in the public demo 😊 It'll be posted with Chapter 4's update - there's quite a few new scenes added to Part One as well.

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What a great read! You're really talented, author; the writing got me hooked the entire time, the characters and lore are so interesting and the romance part gave me butterflies 💞 hope to see more of this one, good luck with your work and thank you for letting us read something with so much quality for free💜

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Thank you so much for your kind words and support! 💖😊 I'm so glad you enjoyed the game and my writing! It's hard to think anyone actually enjoys my ideas so it's really nice when players tell me they did. Thanks for playing!

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I soft locked myself by clicking on multiple menus without closing them.

1-Click on Bio

2-Click on Relationships

3-Click on "Return", you will be returned to Bio.

4-Click on "Return", you will be "returned" to Relationships.

5-See step 3.

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Yup, it's unfortunately an issue that happens. When it does - you'll need to use the back arrow on the top left side of the side-bar in order to get back 😊

gotta post again to just say that i check this for updates daily💀 your writing has me hooked asjoajw

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Thank you so much for playing! 💖 Chapter 4 is currently being tested so if all goes to plan, the update will be live by next week for the public 😀 

Thank YOU for working so hard to bring us all these updates so quickly!!! ;w; You're the best and amazing and please don't overwork yourself!!!

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I'm really enjoying writing after a long time of not writing so it's been a blast 😆 if you're keen on more info on the game while you wait for the update, check out my Tumblr because there's tons of content there and information on the next RO 👀

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omg not me doing the same thing

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Soon 👀😋

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Let me slap that smug smirk off the uncle face lol but I loved it nothing less keep up the good work 😸

Haha! Thank you for playing and glad you enjoyed it 😊

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Your welcome can't wait for more of this game I'm already wandering about what next in there adavender 😸

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Chapter 4 is done and will be tested soon so keep an eye out for an update 😊 

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Has work begun on Chapter 4?  I'm very excited for what is coming next in the story!  Keep up the great work, I'm sure I speak for most of us when I say I am at the edge of my seat in anticipation.

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I'm currently working in Chapter 4 as we speak 😊 I have a Patreon with exclusive content and sneak peeks of Chapter 4 but you can also follow me on Tumblr for writing progress updates and other fun stuff 🙂

Thank you so much for playing!

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I will be more than happy to become a patreon member.  Just after christmas.  Darn these holiday gifts cleaning me out haha.

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Please don't feel any pressure to become a Patron 😊 The public demo will still be updated with the same content, albeit a week later. I'm hoping for an end of the month update if not early January, so not too much longer 😅

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this is beautiful, the interaction with Ll is wholesome and I'm here for it. Keep it up!!<3

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Thank you so much for playing 💖 I'm glad you're enjoying the character interactions! Your support means a lot 😊😊

i love the prince so much. maybe part of me want to be queen who has power over people that hate part of yourself so much. 

Thank you so much for playing and for leaving a comment! I really appreciate your support 💖If you play your cards right, you can become Irus' consort down the line 😋

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irus is my bro and I want to climb oren like a tree

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Fun fact, Oren would let your MC do that 😂 Thank you for playing!

irus and elora my loves <3

not into interactive stories that much but i fell deeply in love with this one !! can't wait for more :)

Thank you so much for playing and I'm so glad to know that you enjoyed Crown of Exile!

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irus my beloved <3

very good game ! can't wait for the following chapter

Irus is a fan fave 😂 Thank you so much for playing and taking the time to leave a comment. I really appreciate your support 💖

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Virion you rat how dare you interrupt my smoocharoo with Irus I've never wanted to smack a old guy before but I sure do now😭💔

Now for my review this story is so well writing my goodness where would I even start without accidentally going on a rant in these here comments everything down to the dialogue and characters is just chef's kiss I simply couldn't help but go back and click other answers just so I could read what they said as you can imagine it took me over six hours of reading but it was all truly worth it and I can highly recommend this story to any fantasy, romancers and journey lovers out there trust me it'll be really good now I must end this comment since it's 5:20 am but I can't help but anxiously wait for the next chapter like my life depends on it because it does really depend on it anyways thank you author for writing this beautiful magnificent story so far you're doing great and I can't wait to see more in the future to come!

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Thank you so much for taking time to write this wonderful review 😊💖 I'm so grateful that you played the game and appreciate your support!

It warms my heart to know that you enjoyed my writing and I'm in awe that you went to choose the different options given.  Thank you again and know that your comment made my day! 💖💖💖

Ywww! I'm happy my comment made you happy :D

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irus is a lil shit (affectionate) i adore him


gonna punch virion for being a cockblock too tbh

Glad you liked him 😋 Virion is there to ruin moments for everyone 😅

This is simply wonderful, I fell in love. I can't wait for more.

Thank you so much 😊 I really appreciate you playing the game and I'm so glad you enjoyed it!

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Everyone in favor of punching Virion in his slimy backstabbing arrogant dusty musty crusty face, say "I". In other news, Queen Elora is special and beautiful and perfect and I love her.

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Virion does need a good punch 😂 And I'm glad you like Elora! Thank you for playing 💖

This is my favorite IF I've come across, ever. I love it so much! 

Thank you so much! I'm so honoured that you consider it as your favourite 💖

Wow. I didn't know why I hadn't encountered this one till now. I loved what you wrote, and the ROs are all likeable. I do have a few gripes, though... like the interaction between MCs and their family; it was short and abrupt and to the point. I mean, it's hard for me to care much for the mom and especially the dad when there's so little interaction between them.

I also feel like MC's background(from childhood to young adult) seems... lacklustre. Probably because of the dad being a barely active father. It does seem odd though... like the dad wants to be better, yet he was written differently. His behaviour doesn't make sense.

Other than that, everything else seems good. I went for the prince(highest romance points) but flirted with the captain guard whenever I could and noticed a jealousy scene(the outing to the food stalls). Do others also have these jealous scenes? I haven't played other routes hence the question.

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Thank you so much for playing! I am currently revising Part 1 (prologue and chapters 1 - 3), so there is a few more scenes with the MC's father. The idea is that the MC's father doesn't know how to be a good father - the curt way he treats the MC is because he doesn't know how to show emotion.

The family scenes are short - because it's written this way. The parents aren't happy-go-lucky parents and Ahlf will never change his ways, regardless of how much he wants to. He's a stoic person and is bad at showing emotions. The scene with the mother is short because of plot reasons- she left the MC and that's the basis of the MC's memories of her. It's more to show that the MC has no choice on how everything happens especially with their parents. The new scenes should give a better read for childhood to teen years since it comes between them.

The others don't have jealousy scenes because it's still too early in the relationship 😊 Either way, Prince Irus is the most jealous and the others aren't really jealous, so there might not be much jealousy scenes with them.

I see. I loved family interactions a lot, and I was pleased to see that there are surviving members of MC's family that she could still interact with(the uncle, grandma, and cousin), hoping there would be more interactions between them. It's why I felt like there should be more interactions between MC and the father, IMO-- regardless of whether the player chose to be antagonistic or wanted the father to be a dad. I guess I could understand regarding the mother part having less interaction.

I could totally see the queen and the captain guard being the least jealous type, though(lol). It would be hard to write jealous scenes for them unless MC does something outrageous 😅

Anyway, I can't wait for the next chapter(and the revision)! 

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I keep liking it more whenever there's an update. It keeps getting better and make me to get excited for the next update. I keep choosing the queen and I don't know why. She's just so adorable for me. And the prince is more like a best friend type for me ^.^ I don't know maybe because It's too common to be coupled with someone who's the plot or something. Keep up the good work and stay healthy and happy!

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Thank you so much for your kind words and I am so happy that you enjoyed the game! I truly appreciate your support 😊 Elora is quite fun to write and I'm happy to see that she's getting love from players. Thank you again for playing!

And thank you for writing this IF! You gave us a wonderful one! Hope there would be a lots to come! Stay healthy and happy always! <3

I have been thoroughly enjoying this story, I discovered it about a month ago and have been looking forward to this latest update.  Your writing is amazing and the characters are remarkably well done.  The decisions feel like they have real meaning.  You are doing remarkable work and I look forward to update 4, it can't come soon enough!

Thank you so much for playing and for your kind words! 😊 I'm so happy to know that you're enjoying the game and the characters and can't wait to share the rest with you. Thank you ❤️️

I absolutely love the update! Thank youuuu. And Sir Oren is just so—AAAAAAH, imma fangirl really hard. Now I have to wait again. I'm gonna busy myself with school works until then T^T.... And perhaps reading those answered asks, too. They're really interesting

Thank you so much for playing and I am so glad you enjoyed the update! Sir Oren is an absolute sweetheart 😂 I'm hoping to start with Chapter 4 in late December (once I finish edits of part 1) so stay tuned 😉

Asbsvdfghdhukshj chapter three did not dissapoint. I love irus and the teasing he does with a shy mc. i can't wait for the next update :))))

Thank you so much! I'm glad you enjoyed it 😊 Irus and a shy MC are my favourite scenes to write. Thank you for playing 🌼

I don't normally like fantasy as a genre, but this is quite well written. But the game somehow assumes the MC is a lot closer to the prince than they are when I play anything other than straight up hostile. The out of character moments are completely bringing me out of the game. I was playing a detached and reserved character who blames the prince for being part of the oppression and murder. But because I didn't choose anything overly emotional, the prince suddenly acts like they're besties once they arrive at Vinia. Which wouldn't be an issue; it'd be fun if he's being presumptuous. But the problem is that the MC acts like it's true. Hoping you'll look into this issue.

Oh, also the issue of choosing not to ask questions and the game treating as if all questions were asked.

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Hi, thank you for your comment! Unfortunately, as the game is quite character focussed, I spent most of it writing close reactions with Irus opposed to the hostile relationships. If your relationship is hostile (under 50), it will be coded in when I start edits 😊 So it's not an issue, rather that I didn't code in the necessary hostile reactions because of time constraints.

The dialogue options where it's a link-reveal (you click a link to reveal text) will always be treated as if you've asked them and gotten answers because it's really just a lore/info dump that is necessary for the plot but also can be skipped for replays. So if there's a link with 'End your questions' it means that it's assumed you've asked those questions. However, if this happens elsewhere, please let me know 🙂

i'm fond of all the characters, while i'm not entirely interested in romancing Oren or Irus (cos i'm very sapphic) i really liked them as friends and characters, i also am crushing hardcore on Elora so i'm excited to see where this goes ^_^

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I'm really glad you enjoyed the characters and I'm really happy to know that Elora is getting some love 😊 I am also planning on a fourth female RO who will be introduced in Chapter 4, so stay tuned 👀 Thank you playing! 💖

Literally decided to just go to work late because I was so enraptured by the novel. CAN'T WAIT FOR THE UPDATE!!!! thank you so much for this wonderful piece of work.

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Thank you so much for playing and I am so glad you enjoyed it! 💖😊 I hope you didn't get too late for work! 😅

Heh, I was 10 minutes late, but it was so worth it. Thinking of this novel brought a smile to face every time during work. 

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Well, as long as you didn't get into any trouble. Thank you again for your support! I really appreciate it 😊If you are interested in more about the game, do check out my Tumblr if you haven't already. It has a lot more information and fun facts about the characters and world lore.

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Just finished Chapter 3, it's soo good!! Can't wait to see what happens next :))

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Thank you so much for playing and I'm so glad that you enjoyed Chapter Three! ❤️️

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aGGHH just saw the pages new redesign, and it's really gooood! Can't wait for the upcoming chapter!

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So glad you liked it! I decided to redo the art style since the game's already nearing the end of Part 1. The new chapter will be put in a few more hours 😊

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Love the updated visuals of the page! Really beautiful, elegant and royal!

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Thank you so much! I'm glad you like them 😊I figured the game needed a face lift since Part One is coming to an end.

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Omg this game is so good. i cant wait for mor

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Thank you so much! Currently Chapter 3 is being tested and should be available to the public in a week or so 😊

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Hi there! This hasn't been a problem mentioned by any other player so I'm not sure what the issue is. If the return link doesn't work, the back button on the left side bar should do the same without any issue. You can try send your recording to me through my Tumblr, though it might be a browser issue because I've tested it and my play testers have also tested the return button and it worked fine.

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SOOO AMAZING!! I have spent my saturday just reading this story for hours, and I must confess, I am absolutely in love with Irus. I mean, how can I not?? Really heartbreaking what happened to the main characters family, but after finishing chapter 2 it seems like it's going to hopefully be okay, since they are not alone anymore! I have also read The Hedge Witch, which is how I found this story, and I am so glad I did, because this brilliant story is my favorite now! I am now going to wait patiently for chapter 3!

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Thank you so much! It means a lot to know that you enjoyed the game and I cannot believe that you actually spent hours playing the game 💖Your support means so much to me so thank you 😊 I'm happy that you liked Irus, he is my favourite character to write, so I'm glad to know you enjoyed reading his character. You might things are about to be fine but think again 😅I should have Chapter 3 posted by the end of October, if all goes well. Thank you again for your lovely comment 💖💖

This is so cute. I love Irus even though I aint gay. Playing a shy female character and its way too cute  Love the story too. So sad what the MC has to go trough. I cant wait to play more! Thank you for the this gem!

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Thank you so much for playing and I'm really happy to know you enjoyed it 😊 💖 Irus is fast becoming a crowd favourite 😅 Thank you for your support 🤗

Irus has my whole heart, and yes I reread the whole thing again coz it’s quite interesting!

I'm so glad you enjoyed it! If you haven't already, do check out my Tumblr because there's quite a lot more information on Irus posted there 😊

oh I didn’t really know that, ty!

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Hi, I'm really loving this so far (especially Irus!), but is there any chance you could add flirt options for an MC who is more stoic? My male MC is stoic/acerbic and intro but confident and 'unwillingly' attracted to the Ro/s, but the existing flirting options always feel really out of character for him - the shy/intro flirt (he's not shy), or the flirtatious/brazen flirt (he's not flirtatious) - when often the more 'denying how I feel' or 'deliberately being an unpleasant ass because I really hate how I'm unexpectedly feeling right now' option which would suit him better is not a flirt and gives friendship/normal responses. I realise this may be asking a lot, but is there a chance an additional 'flirt' option could be added to accommodate a character who shows their interested in a less obvious way (like, instead of blushing they get annoyed or snippy), with the RO/s catching on and teasing it out of the MC in their own way?
Also, how tall is the prince? because there is a moment where it mentions him tipping my MC's chin up to look in his eyes (when I tried a shy flirt) and I have my MC's height set to 'very tall'.

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Thank you so much for playing 😊 I do realise that the flirt options are lacking in the variations of choices - I just went with shy/flirty choices because they were the easiest to start off with and write. I do hope to add more variations to the flirting choices when the first draft of the game is completed, since I also know others want a friendly flirt option as well 🙂 this is simply because of coding and writing the different variations would take up a bit more time and I hope to finish the first draft before going back to polish up and add in variation scenes.

Do keep in mind though that you don't need to flirt with the ROs to gain romance points. You will be given clear choices of who you like (like at the end of chapter 2) and that, combined with your friendship stat will determine the outcome of pursuing a romance 🙂

Irus in game height is the tall option, so even though he and MC might both be tall, Irus will still be slightly taller than them by a few centimetres at most 😊

Thanks for replying! I'm really glad to hear you're considering offering some more flirt options for MC's with different dispositions.

I felt my MC was quite naturally guided into the stoic & confident personality, chiefly because of the whole growing up alienated by everyone in the village and never really 'clicking' with his dad (both of them having personalities that are not the easiest to get along with), but having a strong survival instinct and having no one else to really lean on, trusted in himself (and yeah, he's lonely af, but he buries that deep deep down under many layers of denial). It ended up fostering an MC who knew what they wanted (at least goal-wise) but was really not used to dealing with being interested in someone romantically, and being completely out of his depth if/when someone actually showed an interest in him, so naturally diverted to what he was comfortable with: acting like a stoic/cold b*stard. The sort of guy who seems like he'd rather be anywhere else but beside the RO, and yet the next minute would risk his life for them (cos deep down he's just relieved he's not alone, and that the RO hasn't already left his sorry ass, but he's kind of socially stunted and way too afraid of being vulnerable and hurt to admit how he feels). ANYWAY...

As you can probably tell, I got quite invested in this story thus far, hence why I thought I'd ask if a 'stoic/unflirty' flirt could be added. On that topic, I also really love me some sexual tension ramping up between characters, particularly when one (or both) are unwilling to admit how they feel/what they want. That's always fun to read!

Since posting my last message I also tried out Oren and the Queen, and they both seem really interesting so far, too. The sparring session with Oren was great! I'm looking forward to finding out more about both of them and pursuing them in parallel playthroughs in future. :)

Good luck with the game going forward!

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I really want players to be able to play a character they feel most comfortable with 😊 Thank you for letting me know more about your MC, because it really helps when coming up with choices in game.

Once chapter 3 is completed and updated, I will be revising the first 3 chapters again and hopefully will add in the flirt options for a more stoic MC 🙂 Thank you again for being so detailed with your feedback 🌼💖

Thank you for playing and being so supportive! I really appreciate it 😊

I’m

In

Love

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Thank you so much for playing! I appreciate your support and am so happy to know you enjoyed the game ❤️️😊

❤️ ❤️

Thank you for creating such a masterpiece ✨ 😭

I appreciate your hardwork and such amazing talent!

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im ded i didnt know Irus would be playful and teased the mc a lot asdahksdkd im loving this. Its so fun seeing their interaction in chap 2 esp with the mc fam omg Irus go full on good boy with grandma so cute AAAAAAAa

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Irus will always tease the MC if romanced 😏 Thank you for playing! 💖

Irus is just killing my character with embarrassment

In a good way, I hope? 😂

She will be alive-ish. Just a melted puddle of feelings

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Love the game so far, you've already got me hooked ;)

Can't wait to see what you do with this <3

Thank you so much for playing and your kind words 😊 I'm really glad you enjoyed it!

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